THE HAPPY RAINBOW FUN-TIME
REVISION SLIDE SHOW
BADDA-BING
PERIOD 1
1
Blankmeyer
Frankel
Siekmann
Wood
Burschlag
Echeverria
Le
2
Burns
He
Tentilucci
Allen
Child
Hoefer
McCullough
3
Day
Leder
Tien
Brooks
Collins
Laitman
Richards
4
Edelman
Rabinowitz
West
Burke
Connors
Law
Solarz
PERIOD 3
1
Bunke
Gallant
Huddy
Van Aken
Finn
Reilly
2
Frankel
Gao
Adams
Rowen
Cardona
Jhaveri
Rubin
3
Cohen
Cabo
Shelby-Glick
Delehey
Lamb
Sheung
Voutsinas
4
Delahanty
Campbell
Shultz
Deon
Peri
Thorpe
PERIOD 4/5
1
ALARY
ENGEL
T. HUGHES
McCRANEY
RUPPEL
WEST
SHAKT
2
3
ATTANASIO AVCI
FINNEYFROCK
FRICKER
KING
MYERS
LEHMAN
SKINNER NGUYEN
STROMINGER
WHITE
GRISWOLD
PINCIOTTI
4
BROD
HOLLAWELL
McANDREWS
RAND
THORBURN
RUTKOWSKI
PERIOD 9
1
BAGNELL
2
BONAS
DEMSKO
GOLDSTEIN GOROSHKO
GRUNDY
SHIPON
KENNY
BREINER
KASOFF
FOOTE
MEINSTER
RUMMEL
PEREPICZKA
SUKUNDA
3
COLLITO
LEVY
WATKINS
FORD
MITCHELL
SACHACZENSKI
4
D’ANJOLELL
GOUBEAUD
SANDMAN
WILLIS
HULIHAN
NOWMOS
SINGH
GREEN = GO FOR IT!
Excellent Critical Writing With Researched,
Well-Reasoned Arguments
• Uses original ideas (doesn’t let the critic
take the lead)
• Uses Text {PROOF} from the short story in
their arguments. Expands and analyzes
that {proof} often.
• Frames all quotes from critics.
• Uses present tense when criticizing
literature.
Yellow = Slow Down and Revise
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Unbalanced, Unproven Arguments With
Possible Faulty Reasoning.
Allows the critics to lead at times.
Needs more detailed Text {PROOF} from
the short story.
Needs to cite author in detail.
Needs to cite author and page number
when paraphrasing.
An alarming number of grammatical and
formatting errors.
Red = Stop and Rethink.
Inadequate Evidence and/or Failed Reason
• The critics take the lead. Article is
basically a summary of what critics think,
rather than an original literary research
article.
• Little to no actual textual {PROOF} to back
up arguments.
• Appears rushed and unclear often.
• Contains multiple typos and mechanical
errors.
CONCISE
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MAKE “TO BE” YOUR ENEMY.
“IS” “ARE” “WAS” “WERE”
WRITING BECOMES CLEARER
LESS PASSIVE VOICE (PV)
CONCISE
The plot of the story is based
almost entirely on a group of
three young girls that enter the
store. [20 words]
CONCISE
The plot follows a group of
three young girls who
enter the store. [13 words]
[FRAMES]
• Make it clear if a critic or the
author is writing the quote.
• Make you sound clearer and
prepared for your reader.
[FRAMES]
[FRAMES]
[FRAMES]
[FRAMES]
[FRAMES]
[FRAMES]
TEXT {PROOF}
• Increases your LOGOS
• Makes your argument more convincing
• Makes it clear that you KNOW the story
and you KNOW your stuff!
TEXT {PROOF}
TEXT {PROOF}
TEXT {PROOF}
TEXT {PROOF}
TEXT {PROOF}
TEXT {PROOF}
PARAPHRASE
Helps your reader follow the important
action.
Cites the AUTHOR’s last name, not the
critic’s. Cites the PAGE NUMBER also.
EX: (London 7).
Keeps you from sounding pretentious
Effective use of Conciseness (C)
PARAPHRASE
PARAPHRASE
INTRO HOOK
Helps your reader engage the material.
Uses a plausible connection.
- Author quote
- Metaphor
- Comparison
TAKE 4 DAYS AND MAKE
YOUR FINAL LITERARY
RESEARCH ARTICLE
SPARKLE