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Use evidence and explain it!
Clel Waller is a cruel man.
EVIDENCE:
“Had a rope down and over to a shackle on
Nightjohn’s neck. Rope tied to a saddle. . . He brought
Nightjohn into the main yard near the quarters out in
the open, yelling and swearing at him.” (pg 26)
How does the evidence PROVE your point?
 EVIDENCE:
 “Had a rope down and over to a shackle on Nightjohn’s neck. Rope tied to a saddle. . . He brought
Nightjohn into the main yard near the quarters out in the open, yelling and swearing at him.” (pg 26)
EXPLANATION:
He’s whipping and yelling at all his slaves and being mean.
How does the evidence PROVE your point?
 EVIDENCE:
 “Had a rope down and over to a shackle on Nightjohn’s neck. Rope tied to a saddle. . . He brought Nightjohn
into the main yard near the quarters out in the open, yelling and swearing at him.” (pg 26)
EXPLANATION:
Waller has no regard whatsoever about Nighjohn’s needs,
all he cares about is feeling like he is totally in charge, no
matter who he hurts in the process. He wants to make
Nightjohn fear him, and force him into submission.
Clel Waller is a cruel man.
EVIDENCE:
“Sometimes he doesn’t whip and makes a field hand do
it and stands with his pistol in his belt and smiles.” (pg 44)
How does the evidence PROVE your point?
 EVIDENCE:
 “Sometimes he doesn’t whip and makes a field hand do it and stands with his pistol in his belt and
smiles.” (pg 44)
EXPLANATION:
Whipping a person is mean.
How does the evidence PROVE your point?
 EVIDENCE:
 “Sometimes he doesn’t whip and makes a field hand do it and stands with his pistol in his belt and
smiles.” (pg 44)
 EXPLANATION:
Clearly Waller is cruel because to make another slave whip for
him when the slaves are ‘family’ is also torture for the slave who’s
whipping. While this happens Waller smiles as if the beating is
entertainment to him. To take pleasure in another person’s pain is
the ultimate sign of cruelty.
Put it all together
 Clel Waller is a cruel man. This can be seen when he, “Had a rope down and over to
a shackle on Nightjohn’s neck. Rope tied to a saddle. . . He brought Nightjohn into
the main yard near the quarters out in the open, yelling and swearing at him.” (pg 26)
We can see that Waller has no regard whatsoever about Nighjohn’s needs, all he
cares about is feeling like he is totally in charge, no matter who he hurts in the
process. He wants to make Nightjohn fear him, and force him into submission.
“Sometimes he doesn’t whip and makes a field hand do it and stands with his pistol in
his belt and smiles.” (pg 44) Clearly Waller is cruel because to make another slave
whip for him when the slaves are ‘family’ is also torture for the slave who’s whipping.
While this happens Waller smiles as if the beating is entertainment to him. To take
pleasure in another person’s pain is the ultimate sign of cruelty. Repeatedly Waller’s
actions show his cruel nature.
Your turn!
 R+A (topic sentence) – make a statement, should Jarvis be arrested?
 T – Evidence – what is your evidence
 E – Explanation – how does the evidence prove your point?
 T – Evidence – what is your 2nd evidence
 E – Explanation – how does the 2nd evidence prove your point?
 Concluding sentence – restate your topic sentence