Revising and
Editing
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Name
Teacher’s Name
Subject- Period ___
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Sally Jones
Mrs. Peabody
English I- Period 5
30 August 2013
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Station 1- FIRST WORDS
• Read your classmates paper, highlight the
first word of every sentence.
• Can begin a sentence the same way twice:
after that, they need to change it. Help
them identify which words need to be
changed and write suggestions.
Station 2-Student/Teacher
Conference
• Underline Your Thesis Statement
Station 3- Weak words
• We can’t use the same words we learned
in the fourth grade. Look for descriptive
words using your brain or a thesaurus.
• On your classmates paper, square three
puny (easy) words and write change above
them. Use the thesaurus.
Station 3- Sample Weak Words
Directions: Read your classmate’s paper. Check for
weak words, square them, and correct with an
appropriate synonym. You may use a thesaurus if
needed.
very
a lot
happy
awfully, dreadfully, exceedingly, exceptionally, extremely, greatly
sad
good
bad
hard
stuff/things
big
Small/little
boring
nice
you
melancholy, forlorn, dejected, disheartened
righteous, superb, awesome, spectacular
wicked, horrendous, repulsive, vile, hideous
arduous, daunting, tedious, solid
material, supplies, articles, paraphernalia
colossal, titanic, immense, gigantic
Lilliputian, diminutive, miniature, tiny, puny, limited, minute
prosaic, tedious, tiresome, monotonous
amiable, amicable, enjoyable, pleasant
one, the reader
many, several, multiple, bountiful, plentiful, numerous
elated, ecstatic, delighted, exhilarated, thrilled, overjoyed
Station 4- Compound Sentences
Making compound Sentences
 Every sentence should not be a simple sentence. Make at least two sentences
compound by adding a comma and a FANBOYS (For, And, Nor, But, Or, Yet, So),
or a semicolon (;).
 Example:
 Fred went to the store. There was a robbery in town.
 Fred went to the store, and there was a robbery in town.
 Fred went to the store; there was a robbery in town.
 Put a star by two sentences
that you changed from two simple sentences
to a compound sentence. (Do this twice)
Checking compound Sentences
 Circle all FANBOYS in the essay
 Check to see if the fanboys are separating two independent clauses; if so,
there should be a comma before the fanboys; if not, make sure there isn’t a
random comma before the fanboys
Station 5- Complex Sentences
 One way of
having
different
sentences is
by adding a
subordinating
conjunction,
like...
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After
Although
As
Because
Before
Even if
Even though
If
In order that
Once
Provided that
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Rather than
Since
So that
Than
That
Though
Unless
Until
When
Whenever
Where
Wherever
Whereas
Whether
While
Why
 When you being a sentence with a
subordinating conjunction, you must
have a comma in the middle!
 Examples:
 Fred went to the store. There was a
robbery in town.
 While Fred was at the store in town, there
was a robbery.
 When I shot the deer, I knew I was good at
hunting.
 Until I shot the deer, I had no idea I was
good at hunting.
Find 2 sentences in your
classmate’s paper and make
them into a complex sentence.
Do this twice. Draw a heart over
the corrected sentences.
Station 6 -ING a sentence
Add ING to a beginning word of a sentence. (You will need to add a
comma in the middle of the sentences.)
 Example:
 I ran to accept my tiara. I knew I was good at pageants.
 Running to accept my tiara, I knew I was good at pageants.
 I unhooked my third fish. I was glad to know I could fish.
 Unhooking my third fish, I was glad to know I could fish.
 I stepped off the field. I was proud that I could kick field goals.
 Stepping off the field, I was proud that I could kick field goals.
Locate 2 sentences in your classmate’s paper to change to start
with an ING word and write above. Do this twice. Draw a smiley
face above.