How do you vary sentence patterns in an
essay to improve the flow for a reader?
In this lesson you will learn
how to revise your essay by
varying sentence patterns.
Let’s Review
Writing
Writing Prompt
Prompt
Write
Write an
an informative
informative essay
essay to
to respond
respond to
to the
the following
following
prompt:
prompt: “What
“What does
does Mathilde
Mathilde value?”
value?”
Be
Be sure
sure to:
to:
-Introduce
-Introduce your
your topic
topic clearly.
clearly.
-Support
-Support your
your response
response with
with evidence
evidence from
from the
the text.
text.
-Write
-Write aa concluding
concluding statement
statement that
that supports
supports the
the
information
information presented.
presented.
Let’s Review
Write
Write an
an
informative
informative essay.
essay.
Answer
the
Answer the
question,
question, “What
“What
does
Mathilde
does Mathilde
value?”
value?”
1
2
3
4
5
Close
reading
&
analysis
Assignment
Generate
&
Plan
Draft &
revise
Edit &
publish
Let’s Review
Why
Why is
is sentence
sentence
variety
variety important?
important?
• Spices up your
writing by giving it
life, rhythm, and
flow
Let’s Review
Simple
I went to the mall.
Compound
I went to the mall, so
I could buy shoes.
Complex
Because I needed shoes, I
went to the mall.
What
What are
are the
the
different
different types
types of
of
sentences?
sentences?
Core Lesson
1
Analyze currently used sentence patterns.
2
Ask yourself, “ Do I have any sentences
that can be combined?”
3
Rewrite sentences to vary the
sentence patterns.
Core Lesson
1
Analyze currently used sentence patterns.
One
One of
of the
the first
first possessions
possessions that
that Mathilde
Mathilde values
values is
is aa house
house filled
filled with
with
expensive
expensive items.
items. All
All she
she can
can think
think about
about is,
is, “long
“long reception
reception halls
halls hung
hung
with
with ancient
ancient silk,
silk, of
of the
the dainty
dainty cabinets
cabinets containing
containing priceless
priceless curiosities
curiosities
and
and of
of the
the little
little coquettish
coquettish perfumed
perfumed reception
reception rooms
rooms (Maupassant
(Maupassant
1)”.Mathilde
1)”.Mathilde believes
believes that
that she
she will
will be
be happy
happy by
by having
having all
all of
of these
these
things.
things. Mathilde
Mathilde lives
lives in
in aa house
house which
which is
is not
not up
up to
to her
her standards.
standards. She
She
does
does not
not like
like to
to visit
visit her
her wealthy
wealthy friend,
friend, Madame
Madame Forestier.
Forestier. Every
Every time
time
Mathilde
Mathilde visits
visits Madame
Madame Forestier
Forestier it
it makes
makes her
her sad
sad because
because she
she is
is
reminded
reminded that
that she
she isn’t
isn’t rich.
rich. Mathilde’s
Mathilde’s desire
desire to
to live
live aa lavish
lavish lifestyle
lifestyle
causes
causes her
her to
to become
become very
very unhappy
unhappy with
with the
the life
life she
she is
is currently
currently living.
living.
Core Lesson
2
Ask yourself, “Do I have any sentences
that can be combined?”
One
One of
of the
the first
first possessions
possessions that
that Mathilde
Mathilde values
values is
is aa house
house filled
filled with
with
expensive
expensive items.
items. All
All she
she can
can think
think about
about is,
is, “long
“long reception
reception halls
halls hung
hung
with
with ancient
ancient silk,
silk, of
of the
the dainty
dainty cabinets
cabinets containing
containing priceless
priceless curiosities
curiosities
and
and of
of the
the little
little coquettish
coquettish perfumed
perfumed reception
reception rooms
rooms (Maupassant
(Maupassant
1)”.Mathilde
1)”.Mathilde believes
believes that
that she
she will
will be
be happy
happy by
by having
having all
all of
of these
these
things.
things. Mathilde
Mathilde lives
lives in
in aa house
house which
which is
is not
not up
up to
to her
her standards.
standards. She
She
does
does not
not like
like to
to visit
visit her
her wealthy
wealthy friend,
friend, Madame
Madame Forestier.
Forestier. Every
Every time
time
Mathilde
Mathilde visits
visits Madame
Madame Forestier
Forestier it
it makes
makes her
her sad
sad because
because she
she is
is
reminded
reminded that
that she
she isn’t
isn’t rich.
rich. Mathilde’s
Mathilde’s desire
desire to
to live
live aa lavish
lavish lifestyle
lifestyle
causes
causes her
her to
to become
become very
very unhappy
unhappy with
with the
the life
life she
she is
is currently
currently living.
living.
Core Lesson
3
Rewrite sentences to vary the
sentence patterns.
X
Mathilde lives in a house that is not up to her
standards.because
standards
She doesshe
notdoes
like to
notvisit
likeher
to visit
wealthy
her
friend, Madame
wealthy
friend, Madame
Forestier.Forestier.
Because Mathilde lives in a house that is not up to
her standards, she does not like to visit her
wealthy friend, Madame Forestier.
Complex Sentence
Core Lesson
Revised Paragraph
One
One of
of the
the first
first possessions
possessions that
that Mathilde
Mathilde values
values is
is aa house
house filled
filled
with
with expensive
expensive items.
items. All
All she
she can
can think
think about
about is,
is, “long
“long reception
reception
halls
halls hung
hung with
with ancient
ancient silk,
silk, of
of the
the dainty
dainty cabinets
cabinets containing
containing
priceless
priceless curiosities
curiosities and
and of
of the
the little
little coquettish
coquettish perfumed
perfumed reception
reception
rooms
rooms (Maupassant
(Maupassant 1)”.Mathilde
1)”.Mathilde believes
believes that
that by
by having
having all
all of
of
these
these things,
things, she
she will
will be
be happy.
happy. Because
Because Mathilde
Mathilde lives
lives in
in aa house
house
which
which is
is not
not up
up to
to her
her standards,
standards, she
she does
does not
not like
like to
to visit
visit her
her
wealthy
wealthy friend,
friend, Madame
Madame Forestier.
Forestier. Every
Every time
time Mathilde
Mathilde visits
visits
Madame
Madame Forestier
Forestier it
it makes
makes her
her sad
sad because
because she
she is
is reminded
reminded that
that
she
she isn’t
isn’t rich.
rich. Mathilde’s
Mathilde’s desire
desire to
to live
live aa lavish
lavish lifestyle
lifestyle causes
causes her
her
to
to become
become very
very unhappy
unhappy with
with the
the life
life she
she is
is currently
currently living.
living.
Core Lesson
What we have so far . . .
Do
Do material
material possessions
possessions bring
bring you
you happiness?
happiness? In
In my
my opinion,
opinion, material
material possessions
possessions can
can get
get the
the best
best of
of aa person.
person. In
In The
The Diamond
Diamond
Necklace
Necklace by
by Guy
Guy de
de Maupassant,
Maupassant, Mathilde
Mathilde deeply
deeply values
values her
her material
material possessions:
possessions: aa house
house filled
filled with
with expensive
expensive items,
items, aa lavish
lavish dress,
dress,
and
and aa diamond
diamond necklace;
necklace; so
so much
much that
that itit ends
ends up
up leading
leading to
to over
over 10
10 years
years of
of misery
misery for
for her
her and
and her
her husband.
husband.
One
One of
of the
the first
first possessions
possessions that
that Mathilde
Mathilde values
values are
are aa house
house filled
filled with
with expensive
expensive items.
items. All
All she
she can
can think
think about
about is,
is, “long
“long reception
reception
halls
halls hung
hung with
with ancient
ancient silk,
silk, of
of the
the dainty
dainty cabinets
cabinets containing
containing priceless
priceless curiosities
curiosities and
and of
of the
the little
little coquettish
coquettish perfumed
perfumed reception
reception rooms
rooms
(Maupassant
(Maupassant 1)”.Because
1)”.Because Mathilde
Mathilde lives
lives in
in aa house
house which
which is
is not
not up
up to
to her
her standards,
standards, she
she does
does not
not like
like to
to visit
visit her
her wealthy
wealthy friend,
friend, Madame
Madame
Forestier.
Forestier. Every
Every time
time Mathilde
Mathilde visits
visits Madame
Madame Forestier
Forestier itit makes
makes her
her sad
sad because
because she
she is
is reminded
reminded that
that she
she isn’t
isn’t rich.
rich. Mathilde’s
Mathilde’s desire
desire to
to
live
live aa lavish
lavish lifestyle
lifestyle causes
causes her
her to
to become
become very
very unhappy
unhappy with
with the
the life
life she
she is
is currently
currently living.
living.
In
In addition,
addition, Mathilde
Mathilde values
values her
her appearance.
appearance. More
More importantly,
importantly, she
she values
values the
the dress
dress that
that she
she wears
wears to
to the
the ball
ball because
because she
she knows
knows this
this
is
is her
her chance
chance to
to finally
finally feel
feel wealthy.
wealthy. Mathilde’s
Mathilde’s husband
husband suggested
suggested that
that Mathilde
Mathilde wear
wear aa dress
dress that
that she
she had
had already
already worn
worn before.
before. This
This
made
made Mathilde
Mathilde cry
cry because
because she
she was
was so
so upset
upset that
that her
her husband
husband would
would make
make such
such aa suggestion.
suggestion. She
She wanted
wanted her
her husband
husband to
to feel
feel guilty
guilty for
for
not
not buying
buying her
her aa new
new dress,
dress, so
so she
she said,
said, "Nothing.
"Nothing. Only
Only II have
have no
no gown,
gown, and,
and, therefore,
therefore, II can't
can't go
go to
to this
this ball.
ball. Give
Give your
your card
card to
to some
some
colleague
colleague whose
whose wife
wife is
is better
better equipped
equipped than
than II am
am (Maupassant
(Maupassant 2)”.
2)”. Mathilde
Mathilde wanted
wanted to
to look
look wealthy
wealthy so
so badly
badly that
that she
she coerces
coerces her
her
husband
husband into
into buying
buying her
her aa new
new dress,
dress, so
so she
she won’t
won’t look
look poor
poor among
among rich
rich women.
women.
In
In the
the story,
story, one
one of
of the
the most
most disastrous
disastrous items
items that
that Mathilde
Mathilde values
values is
is the
the diamond
diamond necklace
necklace because
because itit allows
allows her
her to
to “appear”
“appear” wealthy.
wealthy.
Mathilde
Mathilde associates
associates diamonds
diamonds with
with money
money and
and believes
believes that
that she
she will
will finally
finally be
be envied
envied ifif she
she gets
gets the
the opportunity
opportunity to
to wear
wear itit in
in front
front of
of her
her
rich
rich friends.
friends. She
She was
was displeased
displeased with
with all
all of
of the
the other
other jewelry
jewelry that
that Madame
Madame Forestier
Forestier had
had to
to offer,
offer, but
but she
she was
was lost
lost in
in ecstasy
ecstasy once
once she
she
saw
saw the
the diamond
diamond necklace.
necklace. In
In the
the story,
story, itit says,
says, “Her
“Her heart
heart throbbed
throbbed with
with an
an immoderate
immoderate desire.
desire. Her
Her hands
hands trembled
trembled as
as she
she took
took itit
(Maupassant
(Maupassant 3)”.Mathilde
3)”.Mathilde knew
knew this
this necklace
necklace would
would finally
finally make
make her
her feel
feel like
like she
she had
had fallen
fallen from
from aa higher
higher station.
station. Not
Not to
to mention,
mention, when
when
Mathilde
Mathilde discovered
discovered the
the diamond
diamond necklace
necklace was
was missing,
missing, itit was
was because
because she
she went
went to
to look
look into
into the
the mirror
mirror and
and see
see herself
herself in
in all
all her
her glory
glory for
for
the
the last
last time.
time. She
She was
was so
so self-absorbed
self-absorbed that
that she
she hadn’t
hadn’t even
even noticed
noticed itit missing
missing until
until they
they had
had arrived
arrived home
home from
from the
the ball.
ball. Mathilde’s
Mathilde’s
desire
desire to
to “appear”
“appear” wealthy
wealthy led
led to
to her
her fascination
fascination of
of the
the necklace
necklace which
which eventually
eventually led
led to
to over
over 10
10 years
years of
of hard
hard work
work and
and debt.
debt.
In
In conclusion,
conclusion, Mathilde
Mathilde is
is not
not satisfied
satisfied with
with her
her current
current living
living situation,
situation, so
so when
when she
she gets
gets the
the opportunity
opportunity to
to “appear”
“appear” wealthy,
wealthy, she
she
takes
takes itit without
without thinking
thinking of
of the
the consequences.
consequences. She
She felt
felt like
like she
she deserved
deserved to
to live
live the
the lifestyle
lifestyle of
of aa wealthy
wealthy person
person and
and did
did everything
everything in
in her
her
power
power to
to “appear”
“appear” like
like someone
someone from
from aa higher
higher status.
status. Because
Because Mathilde
Mathilde valued
valued material
material possessions
possessions so
so deeply,
deeply, itit led
led to
to years
years of
of
unnecessary
unnecessary pain.
pain.
Core Lesson
Write
Write an
an
informative
informative essay.
essay.
Answer
the
Answer the
question,
question, “What
“What
does
Mathilde
does Mathilde
value?”
value?”
1
2
3
4
5
Close
reading
&
analysis
Assignment
Generate
&
Plan
Draft &
revise
Edit &
publish
Core Lesson
1
Analyze currently used sentence patterns.
2
Ask yourself, “Do I have any sentences
that can be combined?”
3
Rewrite sentences to vary the
sentence patterns.
In this lesson you have learned
how to revise your essay by
varying sentence patterns.