Spring semester 2016
Editing the NMIH107
case study & preparing
for the NMIH105 essay
Dr Jeannette Stirling,
Senior lecturer,
Learning Development
Assessment
Assessment
Assessment
Assessment
Subject
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2
3
4
NMIH105
Week 6
Weeks 8 & 9
Exam Period
Essay
2000 wds
Group presentation
20 mins
Final exam
120 mins
40%
20%
40%
Week 9
Week 10
Exam Period
In-class quiz
60 mins
Assignment
2500 wds
Final exam
120 mins
20%
40%
40%
NMIH106
NMIH107
NMIH108
Week 4
Week 13
Case study
1500 wds
35%
Case study
3000 wds
65%
Week 13
Nursing
Competency
Assessment
Schedule
Week 7
Exam Period
Health Behaviour
Change diary
1500 wds
60%
Final exam
120 mins
40%
Before we get started…
Does anyone want to revisit
any points from last week’s
seminar on the NMIH107
case study assignment?
Proof reading & editing the NMIH107 case study
1. Check overall structure
2. Check your grammar &
punctuation
3. Check that you’ve addressed
the ‘technical’ aspects of the
assignment
Editing for structure
Can you clearly identify the
discrete sections of the
case study by the
suggested sub-headings?
 Introduction
 Discussion
 Nursing care plan
 Conclusion
Does each section address
the points in the checklist
on the next slide?
Checklist: does your ……
Introduction
Approx. 250 wds.
• Preview the key aspects of Kyle’s condition in paediatric
terms?
• Briefly state the importance to a Nursing assessment & the
development of a relevant care plan?
• Identify the main focus of your discussion?
Discussion: Breathing &
controlling body
temperature
Approx. 600 wds.
• Provide an overview of how these 2 AoLs have been
affected?
• Clearly explain how you’ll assess Kyle in relation to these
AoLs?
• Prioritise Kyle’s initial care needs & then discuss how you
will treat his symptoms?
• Identify ONE issue related to breathing OR controlling body
temperature relevant to Kyle’s case?
Nursing care plan
• Formulate a plan / goal for improving the symptom?
Approx. 400 wds.
• Clearly identify your strategies for achieving the plan?
• Evaluate the merit of the plan?
Conclusion
Approx. 250 wds.
• Summarise the key points emerging from your case study &
the key learning from your research about prioritising &
managing these particular AoLs in a paediatric context
Editing for grammar & punctuation
Read through carefully &
check for:
 Any problems with
sentences (sentence
fragments, run-on
sentences, & so forth);
 that you have achieved
consistent noun-verb
agreement;
 that your use of
apostrophes is elegantly
aware.
Remember that a complete, grammatically
correct sentence requires …
Essential
Essential
Essential
Optional
Subject (noun phrase)
Verb phrase
Object (noun phrase)
Adverbial
Somebody
broke
the window
last night
Sentencing: the fragment…
 Sentence fragments are strings of words that
have been punctuated as a sentence but are not
valid sentences;
 that is, they do not contain all the elements
necessary to create a sentence.
Sentence fragments are usually incomplete ideas
Some examples from Nursing essays …
Please
explain???
For example, low levels of education,
higher rate of domestic violence, and
young maternal age.
Describe and identify community
resources to assist in the prevention of
injury in the home.
Completing the idea …
There are several reasons for this statistical difference;
for example, low levels of education, higher rate of
domestic violence, and young maternal age.
Before Mrs Wall is discharged it is essential to identify
community resources to assist in the prevention of future
injury in the home.
On the other hand, you don’t want to overpack …
Ensuring the patients maintaining an airway which
Mr Beto is clearly communicating ultimately his
breathing on his own and he has circulation.
This is called a run-on sentence
Ensuring the patients maintaining an airway
which Mr Beto is clearly communicating
ultimately his breathing on his own and he has
circulation.
It is important to ensure that the patient is
maintaining an airway. Mr Beto is
communicating clearly, breathing normally and
his circulation appears viable.
Matching your verbs to your subject or noun
Crookes and Davies (2006 p. 232) states
that questionnaires in research is defined
as a “printed self-report form(s) designed
to elicit information that can be obtained
through written responses of the
subject”.
Crookes and Davies (2006) state that
questionnaires in research
are defined as a “printed self-report
form(s) designed to elicit information
that can be obtained through written
responses of the subject” (p. 232).
The ‘Stolen Generation’ is well
documented throughout the literature and
the significant dissociation effects it has
on Indigenous Australian’s.
OR
Apostrophes?
The ‘Stolen Generation’ is well documented
throughout the literature and the significant
dissociation effects it has on Indigenous
Australians.
Nordby, Kjønsberg and Hummelvoll (2010)
argue that consumers rights and, indeed,
recovery, are improved by involvement of
carers in mental health care.
OR
Nordby, Kjønsberg and Hummelvoll
(2010) argue that consumers’ rights and
recovery, are improved by involvement of
carers in mental health care.
Where do I go?
Where DO I go???
Evaluating resources / moving the discussion
along…
X states that…
X asserts that…
X claims that…
X points out that…
X suggests that…
X takes the view that…
X observes that…
X concludes that…
X proposes that…
X insists that…
However, Y argues that…
The evidence suggests
that…
Controlling the comic commas…
Leonora walked on her
head, a little higher
than usual.
The driver managed to
escape from the vehicle
before it sank and swam to
the river-bank.
The convict said the
judge is mad.
or
or
or
Leonora walked on, her
head a little higher than
usual.
The driver managed to escape
from the vehicle before it sank,
and swam to the river-bank.
The convict, said the
judge, is mad.
Truss, L 2003, Eats, Shoots & Leaves, Profile Books, London, p. 97.
And finally …
Are your in-text & listed references correctly formatted?
This type of a method has the potential to
introduce bias into the study as participants are
considered simply because they are available
and convenient at the time of recruitment
Crookes and Davies (2006, p. 100).
OR
This type of a method has the potential to
introduce bias into the study as participants are
considered simply because they are available
and convenient at the time of recruitment
(Crookes and Davies 2006, p. 100).
OR
This type of a method has the potential to
introduce bias into the study as participants are
considered simply because they are available
and convenient at the time of recruitment
(Crookes & Davies 2006, p. 100).
A Harvard style reference list looks like?
Australian Aboriginal and Torres Strait Islander Health Survey 2012-13, Australian
Bureau of Statistics, viewed 28 August 2014,
http://www.abs.gov.au/ausstats/[email protected]/mf/4727.0.55.001
Australian Institute of Health and Welfare, viewed 24 August 2014,
http://www.aihw.gov.au/indigenous-australians/
Candlin, S 2007, Therapeutic communication. A lifespan approach, Pearson Education
Australia, Frenchs Forest.
Goethals, S, Gastmans, C & de Castler, B 2010, ‘Nurses’ ethical reasoning and
behaviour: A literature review’, International Journal of Nursing Studies, vol. 47, no.
5, pp. 635-650.
Harms, L 2007, Working with people. Communication skills for reflective practice,
Oxford, Melbourne.
Sievert, D, Armola R, Armola M 2011, ‘Chlorhexidine gluconate bathing: does it
decrease hospital-acquired infections’, American Journal of Critical Care, vol. 20,
no. 2, pp. 166-170.
Silverman, J, Kurtz, S & Draper, J 2005, Skills for communicating with patients, 2nd edn,
Radcliff Publishing, Oxford.
Sully, P & Dallas, J 2005, Essential communication skills for nursing, Elsevier Mosby,
Sydney.
World Health Organisation, viewed 19 August 2014,
http://www.who.int/mediacentre/factsheets/fs138/en/
NB: Note that the list is organised in alphabetical order.
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Planning for the NMIH105 Essay: 2000wds
QUESTION:
According to the World Health Organisation (WHO) more than 900 million
international journeys are undertaken every year. Global travel on this scale
exposes many people to a range of health risks. Many of these risks can be
minimized by precautions taken before, during and after travel (WHO 2012).
Recently, the West African Ebola outbreak has been the largest, most
severe and most complex in human history. For more than a year, people
from all over the world have answered the call to work with WHO to
overcome this outbreak.
On the 9 June 2016 WHO declared the end of the most recent outbreak of
Ebola virus disease in Liberia. This announcement came 42 days (two 21day incubation cycles of the virus) after the last confirmed Ebola patient in
Liberia tested negative for the disease for the second time. Liberia now
enters a 90-day period of heightened surveillance to ensure that any new
cases are identified quickly and contained before spreading.
GOAL:
The goal of this assignment is for students to conduct library
research and to acquire knowledge and understanding about
the Ebola virus and safety precautions when travelling. The
students will develop an appreciation of health precautions
and preventions surrounding the virus.
In the beginning …
Deep breaths. Focus. Scan the
terrain.
Plot your navigational points …
Analyse
• PLAN each stage of your essay so that when you begin writing, you
can be fairly sure that you’re going to address all aspects of the topic.
the task:
• WHAT will be the organising focus for your discussion ?
Briefly map
• HOW do you need to order your response?
your plan of
action:
Consider
the terms of
your topic:
• DO YOU UNDERSTAND the meaning of all the terms / ideas relevant
to the task?
Planning your structure …
Do I understand the history and pathophysiology of
Ebola (including varied strains) and its mode of
transmission?
Can I discuss the incidence and prevalence of
reported cases of Ebola in Guinea, Liberia & Sierra
Leone, including the current estimated morbidity and
mortality rates?
Can I clearly identify the incubation period of Ebola
along with the current treatment methods of persons
affected by Ebola including vaccination options?
What are the three - 3 - objectives in the Phase 3
Ebola crisis identified by WHO?
Do I understand Objective one – 1 – of the
phase 3 goals, including plans to accurately
define & rapidly interrupt all remaining
transmission chains?
Next week …
Delving deeper
into the NMIH105
essay?