We had a go at describing this setting in
preparation for our own adventure stories.
As day broke the dark, misty sky covered the bright colourful rainbow, which cascaded over the top
of the ruined castle. Black clouds rumbled with rain that splashed on the green grass. Lightning
struck. At midnight the graves stood silently. The pink flowers gleamed like pearls whilst the silky
petals fell to the golden grass. Emily Hayward-Reed
Grey stones crumbled from the building whilst the sun shone brightly. Up in the air were dark black
clouds. Next to the giant underground dungeon, the red guards watched. Lennon Smith
Quickly grey gates opened and scattered around were bones of a skeleton. The bright rainbow shone
and the clouds came across the sky. Kennadie Davis
We had a go at describing this character
in preparation for our own adventure
stories
Blood, which was as red as rubies, dripped from his mouth to the floor. Fire glittered like one
thousand fairy lights. As the dragon soared through the sky the sound of his wings sounded like one
million caged birds. Millie West
Fire, which was flaming hot, was quickly spread by the fierce, scaly dragon. Maisy Priddle
The dragon’s teeth twinkled in the light of the fire, which was blazing. Queenie Dinsdale
As he was flying through the clouds, the dragon, which had razor sharp teeth, blew fire all over the
city as people were running for their lives… Callum Winter
Because he was angry, the red, frightening dragon blew fire at the ground, which burnt to ashes.
Maddie Brett
At night a dragon, who revealed a fearsome set of teeth, breathed over the city. Scattered across his
back were rough scales. Around his mouth was bright, red blood from when he killed the Princess!
Lexie Harveson
Smoke slowly drifted from the volcano whilst the fierce dragon slept. His body was covered in green
scales and his sharp teeth glinted in the light. Lewis Elkin
We thought about how we can
use our senses to create
suspense in a story.
As she walked through the cave entrance, his hand brushed along the grey, bumpy wall. She saw
shadows flickering in the distance but couldn’t make out what they were. Eerie noises lurked around
the cave. Darkness fell! She pulled her torch out of her pocket and turned it on. She smelt old, rotten
flesh and saw it ripped up on the floor. She heard water dripping. It would soon be the middle of the
night. She smelt toxic gas in the open air. She felt wet, sticky liquid along an iron handle bar. Was
this someone’s house? Olivia Brading
As he entered the cave he could see a broken boat with bodies hidden inside. He heard rattling
chains and footsteps behind him. He heard a noise in the water but nothing was there… Josie Gould
As he entered the cave he could see black and red spiders crawling along the ground. He heard
echoes calling for him. The smell of blood drifted under his noise as it began to drip from the
ceiling… Isabel Dominey
As he entered the cave, he could see scattered bones. He heard mysterious noises and smelt rotten
flesh! His hand touched the crumbling wall… Jessica Burnett
As I entered the cave I saw red blood sliding along the floor. Bones scattered around the cave as a
light flickered all around. The noise of laughter bounced off the wall and echoed into nowhere. I
smelt something toxic. I backed away from the smell and screamed, but nothing came out. A gate
opened… Was someone coming in? I didn’t dare move. Something grabbed me. I screamed and
kicked the figure and rushed to the entrance. It had gone… I was trapped. Lola Bonser
As I entered the abandoned cave I could hear the rusty, old gates smashing. I touched some red,
slimy liquid. Had I made the right choice? I smelt something rotten and could hear creaking metal.
Suddenly smoke drifted underneath my nose. I had no idea what it was! Thunder struck! I opened
the door and gasped… Charlotte Bass
He could feel the icy rocks hanging from the cave. The smell of smoke was drifting under his nose.
He heard mysterious noises. There were spider webs in every corner and shadows darted all around
him. A rock rolled behind him… Something roared loudly… Alfie Brandon
Finally we were given a very boring adventure story and
asked to improve it, using the techniques we have been
practising!
At sunset Blackbeard hatched an evil plan. The island that he lived on was the Caribbean. Golden
sand was scattered in front of the crystal blue sea, which glimmered in the moonlight. Around the
island, palm trees, which had long spiky leaves, had coconuts that hung from the branches.
Blackbeard had a golden belt that fastened tightly around his waist, where his shiny cutlass dangled
from. One night the fiendish pirate found an old, slightly ripped treasure map inside an old chest. It
led to a chest of treasure, He wanted that treasure. He carefully hopped on his wooden boat, which
was armoured with rusty cannons… Finley Gilbert
Many years ago on a remote island of the Caribbean, which was filled with colour, a pirate lived. On
his hand was a hook, which reflected in the sunlight. On his hat was a logo, which was black and
white and in his hand he had a sword, which was as sharp as razors. The pirate lived in a tropical
place where the trees swayed in the refreshing wind. Thomas Townshend
Dotted around the island were tall, thin palm trees, which had coconuts hanging from them.
Shimmering overhead the burning, hot sun rose over the island. Poppy Marshall
Many years ago, on a Caribbean island, Captain Blackbeard stomped off his ship and laid on the soft,
golden sand. Scattered across the sand were shiny jewels, leading to a treasure chest. The blue sea
was filled with rainbow fish and white, fluffy clouds floated overhead in the sky. Jennifer Rann
Captain Jack wore a leather coat, which was held on by a golden belt. On his shoulder was a green,
parrot that squawked all the time. Suddenly he saw something. Something paper… Something
brown… It was a treasure map! He found it hard to read because of the terrifying sand storm.
Freddie Maidment
Many years ago on a desert island a man gazed across the sea. Scattered around the beach were c
crystals pushed into the sand. The man who gazed across the sea was a pirate. He had black boots,
an orange beard, a colourful parrot, a wooden leg and a sword, which was sharp and shiny. Theo
Peck
Early one morning a mean pirate came out of his dark and gloomy cave holding an old treasure map,
which showed him where the treasure was. On one leg he had a big, black boot and on the other leg
he had a wooden peg! Caden Tombleson
The whirlpool pulled him in and his ship broke into a million pieces. Blackbeard quickly swam over to
the water’s edge where he found a cave. His lit his lantern and walked in... Louise Walsh
Late at night the terrifying monster dug a hole and placed the colourful treasure inside. Slowly,
Captain Blackbeard crept up on the monster… Kaitlin Carey
Quickly, Blackbeard zoomed across the ocean to find the golden treasure. When he got there he
spotted two slimy monsters who were guarding it! Ellie-May Connor