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Birthdate: January 21, 1993
High School: Luther Burbank IB Class of 2011
Hometown: San Antonio, Texas
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This class has taught me a lot about myself and what my role is in
society. The most important thing I am walking away with is the
understanding of how important it is to be informed. “Ye shall know
the truth and the truth shall set you free.” We have heard this
quote continuously throughout this course and each time its
significance has sunk in more and more. Now I understand that
ignorance is not bliss. Just because we choose to ignore all the suffering
that goes on in the world does not mean that we are not responsible for
it. We have the ability to make a difference but the first step in that is
knowing what the issue is. After all we are all Longhorns and we all
know “What Starts Here Changes The World”
This website is a representative of my personal journey to enlightenment
throughout this UGS 302 course. My journey is represented by the
words in parenthesis next to the titles of the pages.(i.e the beginning,
the journey, the arrival) The topics are in both chronological order and in
the order in which we progressively opened our minds to the truth. The
process of enlightenment itself is represented by the background of each
page. The first few are the darkest, with the middle pages lighter, and
the last pages being the lightest. The color scheme represents my spirit
animal.
“All mankind... being all equal and independent, no
one ought to harm another in his life, health,
liberty or possessions.” - John Locke
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Earthlings August 8 2011
So before the video even started I was nervous, anxious, and hesitant. I knew watching the video was important but I didnt know how I was
going to react to the video. Before any of the animal scenes even started I was already sickened by the pictures of molested children. "The
rapist does this to the victim of rape. The child molester to the child molested" (Volume II pg. 367) I knew at that point that I want
emotionally or mentally prepared to watch the video. Once the first portion of the video started "Part One: Pets". I was disgusted by the
images of the puppy mills although that was the least disturbing part, sad to say. When the narrator began sating facts about animal rescue
places I was angered. "Sadly, on top of al this, almost 50% of the animals brought to shelters are turned in by their caretakers" (Volume II,
pg. 370) I dont understand how people can just decide to give away thier pets with no remorse. Then again I can believe that because many
mothers dont even prioritize their children, much less their pets. However I know that there are many laws protecting animals that are
abused, abandoned, and neglected. At the least domestic animals receive more attention and media coverage than livestock. Which is
confusing to me, because even wild animals get more media coverage. We always see commercials about exotic animals that are on the
verge of extinction or wildlife that are losing habitat at an alarming rate. Yet no one is even aware of the cruelty that happens in our own
backwards, literally. I think the quote "Auschwitz begins wherever someone looks at a slaughterhouse and thinks: they're just
animals" (volume II, pg. 418) is a perfect example of the ignorance that surrounds the issue of animal cruelty. Americans weren't even
aware of what was happening in Germany during World War II. That doesnt negate the pain that the victims felt or the reality that innocent
people were buttered as the whole world either turned the other way or went on in ignorant bliss. I was infuriated at the gas chambers that
exist in our impounds. I was disgusted that some people could film animals being slaughtered with no reaction. I was horrified at the pain
that these animals were subjected to simply because we have the ability to do so. It angers me that these poor creatures of God dont not have
a voice of their own. "The question is not, Can they reason? nor, Can they talk? But rather, Can they suffer?" (Volume II, pg. 420) There is
a part of me that wishes that everyone in the government is required to watch Earthlings, or that we can make all the major fast food
corporations watch the video. It disgusts me that these people are living comfortably in their million dollar homes as innocent animals
experience pain everyday so that they may have luxurious cars and coats. When in fact it is they who have the means to help begin the end
of animal oppression and the "Animal Holocaust..." (Volume II pg.420) " Vivisection. Scientists often tend to regard animals as objects, and
this parallels the objectifying language of the Nazi scientists,... All the experiments were conducted without anesthetics or the slightest
attention to the victims suffering" (Volume II pg. 400) To be honest there was a point that I turned away from the video. Not being able to
continue watching made me feel weak, helpless, and I felt an immense rush of guilt. I am part of the problem. Whether I participate in the
murder of innocent animals directly or live my life allowing others to do so I am part of the problem. To be honest I wanted to be done with
the video because the reality is that there are just too many human beings on this planet to slaughter animals humanely ( which is an
oxymoron within itself ). With the overpopulation on this planet and kids having kids younger an younger there is no way to end the
overpopulation. With over population comes the decimation of wild habitat and the slaughter of animals to meet the demands of the human
race. I honestly hate the pain that I was forcing myself to watch. The amount of pain that was exerting from the screen was both
inconceivable and a life changing experience. And as upsetting as it is to know, I realize that people will never change and have remorse for
the treatment of animals and the planet. The world is too concerned with money, and suffering, both of humans and animals, is no concern
if a profit is involved. I was grinding my teeth of the sounds of the beaten elephants, abused pigs, and overcrowded chicken farms. The one
image that will always be with me is the image of the skinned foxes, the bloody skin and eyelashes, and the eyes still intact showing their
suffering and pain. I wish I could say that I will stop eating meat that comes from animals that were subjected to pain, I will stop wearing
clothes that kills innocent lives, and I will become part of the solution. Yet I fear that as long as the world keeps progressing as it has and
humanity continues to loose their empathy and duties for all of Gods creatures nothing will change anytime soon
Critical Thinking September 6 2011
This is my baby Mocha. She turned two this August. I could never in a million years ever think that I would one day consume my baby. I
never really put any thought as to why I have a psychological inclination to deem some animals edible and others inedible. After reading
"Why We Love Dogs, Eat Pigs, and Wear Cows.", I now have a different perception of how ones own psyche can influence one to alter our
morals in order to correspond with the social practices in which we were raised. "Psychological numbing is not evil; it is a normal,
inevitable part of daily life, enabling us t function in a violent and unpredictable world....." . (Volume II, pg. 468) When one is first
introduced to the term Psychological numbing it seems to have a negative connotation to it. However after reading examples in the article it
is obvious that psychological numbing is both necessary and easily abused. The idea of it allows me to understand a little better why
situations like those seen in Earthlings occur in over industrialized countries where it is necessary to feed the masses. Regardless I dont
agree with the practices that we were exposed to but I no longer am under the impression that those individuals participating in the violence
had to be crazy or lack total emotion, perhaps they were subjected to an intense psychological numbing in which their actions seemed
justified. But then it makes me wonder about earlier humans. Im sure they werent subjects of psychological numbing as much as we are in
today's world. How is it that it is deemed acceptable for our primitive ancestors to have hunted and somewhat slaughter innocent animals
for meat but it is wrong for us "civilized" version of man to do so. The article argues that eating meat is seen as "the 'natural' thing to do,
the way things have always been...We eat animals without thinking about what we are doing and why..." (Volume II pg. 471) Although I
agree that animals should never have to suffer or endure pain to fullfill mans selfish need of clothing and entertainment, it is unfortunate
that some animals have been and will continue to be deemed edible... Although I have an illusion that maybe the animals can be "turned
into meat" in a more ethical way, with no suffering and in a way that animals can live a full healthy life before they're innocent lives are cut
short. Unfortunately eating lesser species, and in some cases the same species, has been an integrated part of our evolutionary history and
as much as I wish todays practices could not be implemented it boils down to our evolutionary history.
Sympathetic Imagination September 13 2011
I find the idea of sympathetic imagination interesting in that I can finally put a term something Ive come across from time to time. I
especially feel that sympathetic imagination applies to Nature. For many the living "things" in nature are just that "Things." I find myself
thinking very objectively about nature sometimes even though I know its wrong. I think this happens because unlike the other living things
on our plant planets cant not voice their opinion, scream in pain, or express approval. However internally thy perform the very same basic
operations to live. They are just as alive as my pet, my parent, and I. Which is why we should treat nature with respect as much as we
should treat animals with respect. I find it ignorant when people choose to treat nature like a renewable recourse when it is very obvious that
it is not! I have to admit and give credit that recently more has been to to protect our natural forest, water systems, and ecosystems but I
think it took long enough no?? Although nature is not a "concrete, solid object" I feel that sympathetic imagination toward nature could
greatly benefit us as inhabitants of this planet. I also find the idea of Sympathetic Imagination and Morality very truthful "As we have no
immediate experience of what other men feel, we can form no idea of the manner in which they are affected, but by conceiving what
we ourselves should feel in the like situation" (pg. 637 Volume II) I feel that when we try to put oursleves in another persons shoes we
project our feelings and point of view into them. And although it is a good thing to do so that we may feel like we can relate to them
or understand them better I also think it is not a very accurate measure of another mans reaction. I feel that everyone has different morals
and levels of ethics and therefore everyone is affected by different things in different manners. I do agree that "however varying in degree it
may exist among individuals,... there is a natural and instinctive sympathy for one's fellow man;..." (pg.637, Volume II) yet i dont feel like
sympathy alone is enough to say that one can understand the other. It involves action. The action of directly addressing the issue at hand
with that individual and there direct feedback. I think a fact-to-face basis is the only way an individual can truly understand the other to the
needed degree. I loved the story of the hounds "the Odyssey, An Excerpt" It is endearing and hopeful. It makes one appreciate those who
play a part in saving our lives. Whether it the smallest role in helping us be better people, it makes us realize not to hide from the people
who are actively searching for u in our time of need or when we may feel unsure of the unknown. I find it very relate able to sympathetic
imagination from both the prospective of the man and the dog "I could her him thinking, 'At least I saved one'..." (Volume II pg. 691) I
think that in order for the puppy to understand why the man did what he did he needed to imagine his thought but described it as hearing his
thoughts. I love the excerpt because it shows how man should be with his fellow man. be willing to help the helpless, appreciate those who
do help by returning the favor when they need it or help a third individual. If everyone did that then no one would ever be alone.
Power Animal September 17 2011
So as I thought and thought and thought I couldnt narrow my spirit animal to just one animal because I find that two really fit my
personality which is weird because they are completely opposite from each other but I feel one was more relevant when I was a child, and
one is more relevant now that I am entering adulthood. "Although there are one or even several totems that re strongest in your life and
remain with you through most of it, others do play a role." (Volume 1. pg. 117) Ok so when I was a kid I often had dreams of Panthers. I
never payed mind to it but then when I saw a television series talking about spirit animals i finally made the connection. I often felt like the
bright yellow eyes of the panther were lingering in the dark watching over me. Its funny because Ive always had a fear of the dark and I
find that the Eyes of the panther pertrude through the darkness in the forest, like a lighthouse guiding the sea men back to safety. I also find
that the Panthers coat represents my fear of the dark. When further investigating the Panther I found that it described me relatively well.
Although "Whats your sign.com" May not be a accurate or trust worthy source it had this to say about what a Panther totem does for the
individual it is guiding: Panthers also beckon us to consider our darker side - analyze this side of ourselves and determine its motivation
Am I putting others' needs before my own to the point of self-neglect? Am I being mindful of my movements - both physical and
emotional? Am I being defensive? Who or what am I protecting and why?" I think that its very interesting that our ancestors felt such a
great connection with animals and were able to live in perfect harmony in the world in which we both share. "We've only just begun to
catch up with the genius of these people." (volume I pg.120) And now we are separated or at least feel separated from them through our
"superior" intelligence, our cities, the comfort of being "civilized". I think that mentality is so flawed. Now that we feel separated from
animals and nature we have no love or respect for it. We dont think twice when we destroy the homes of millions of animals in order to
process the raw materials for the building of our homes. We dont care that we pollute the ocean, which is the most diverse ecosystem found
on Earth in order to keep our ecosystem clean. We never think about what we can learn from animals because we feel that there is nothing
to learn from a "lower species". But when you really stop to think about Animals have a better sense of this planet and even our illnesses.
Animals can sense when a natural disaster is going to occur way before any of our scientific man made instruments can. And there are
plenty of stories where someones pet detected breast cancer or a tumor before the diagnosis came down from a specialist in the medical
fields. This reminds me of the movie "The Golden Compass" Each person in the movie has a demon. The demon is essentially their spirit in
physical form. Whatever the animal feels the individual feels and vise versa. Also the demon can change form while the person is still a
child but once they begin to mature and enter adult hood their demon will choose a permanent form. If the demon is separated from the
child the child looses their sense of humanity. Instead they cant think or function. Although I know its all fiction I think it holds a relative
truth. " Having a spirit animal companion is a direct route to a place where the air is always clean and the sea and soil are pristine"( Volume
I pg. 121)
Totem Animal: Longhorn?
I find it very interesting that the Longhorn if given the opportunity will revert back to a familiar place or "home". I think that applies to me
and probably many of my peers. Regardless of how far life takes us sometimes when were given the opportunity we will go home to what
is familiar and to those who we know will always have out best interest at heart. "...Sancho was at the tail end of [the herd], often stopping
and looking back." (volume I pg. 143) I often find myself too stopping and looking back but I think the university encourages us to do so.
Its important for us to know where we come from and who we are in order to know where we need to go. Also I think its important to
learn from either our own past or the past of our family. That oh so famous quote "History repeats itself" is an important part of our
decision making because we make better decisions based off of what we have learned from history. Sancho isnt necessarily looking back
at history to learn from it, he is more looking back at home because he wants to return to the comforting familiarity and the warmth of
belonging but in essence when we look back for those same reasons we must go beyond that and realize how those things have come to
shape and influence who we are becoming. With that being said I think that the Longhorn fits the University's goals for us as students.
The University of Texas is about making us "better leaders for the benefit of Society". With the Longhorn as our Totem I think that there
is a lot to learn from these animals that will help us do just that. One of them being to never forget where we come from. Just as Sancho
never did. Another thing is standing up for what you believe in. Even if the mainstream is doing something it doesn't mean that its right
and much less that you should follow in their example. Even though the right thing to do may be the harder path, because it normally is,
just as a Longhorn would, we must be brave enough to face it and trudge onward. In order to do so we must be "...full of pride and energy
of life." (Volume I, pg. 151) Table Cloth shows to what extent the Longhorn was willing to go in order to maintain his freedom and he
always fought for it. Just as we should fight for own. Not physically of coures, but with the tools UT provides us with. Although I am very
proud to be a Longhorn I still think I have a lot to learn about what it truly means to bleed orange. I take great pride in representing UT,
Bevo, and overall the State of Texas!! and although the first Bevo was brought to Austin and later treated under suspicious conditions I do
agree that he is "our protecting spirit that now and in future years will bring good luck to the institution and its teaching." (Volume I pg.
157) I realize that as Texans we tend to glorify our state a little too much. I often find myself saying if it werent for the constitution we
would be better off being our own country again. I guess now I understand a little better where that deep sense of pride comes from: The
Texas Myth. Yoakum's mythic Texas had been the lush coastal plain...With a few deft strokes of his pen,. he effectively severed Texas
from the defeated Old South and installed our collective psyche in the Wild West." (Volume I pg. 185) I think that is so true! When I think
of why I am prideful in Texas my mind reverts back to the cowboys and ranchers, the farmers and business men. I never think about the
slave owners and prejudice, or the conservative and left wing. Not to say that I will tone down my pride but I may definitely redefine it. I
like to think of Texas as a modern day melting pot within a melting pot. And I think that the idea that all Texans wear spurs and ride
horses to school is unrealistic although i recognize the appeal. "Texas megalopolitan culture is a bewildering mosaic of
diversity." (Volume pg. 185) I agree very much. I think Texas represents a great deal of cultures and traditions it just so happens that they
arent a majority and there fore there beliefs can't be expressed. I think the Texas myth as appealing as it is needs to be revised and altered
to fit what texas truly is today. It doesnt mean that we cant take pride in what we already do just that now there is more to be proud about
and accept! I for one will always be proud of being Texan first and then follows my pride of being Hispanic and from San Antonio.
Covey On Ethics October 12, 2011
I've only studied Ethics once before in my educational career in a Theory of Knowledge class. We focused on how we came to derive our
Ethics. And how we could apply ethics in acquiring knowledge, for example what do our ethics tell us about the world as we see it? And
how ethics has evolved through our understanding of the term. Just as Covey noticed the transformation of what we view as ethical for the
past 50 years. "much of success literature of the past 50 years was superficial...In stark contrast, almost all literature in the first 150
years...focused on...Character Ethic...-things like integrity humility, fidelity, temperance,.. modesty and The Golden Rule" (Covey, pg.18) I
think that through the generations the Term Ethics has lost its true essence. Now when people think of ethics they are trained to portray
the facade of being ethically whole without truly possessing the traits that should deem someone as an ethical functioning human being. We
are conditioned by this world to become so self concerned that in eventually will eliminate the rational that there is grave need for ethics
and the lack of such need will seem natural. "Each of us tend to think that we see things as they are, that we are objective. But this is not the
case. We see the world, not as it is, but as we are-or as we are conditioned to see it." (Covey, pg. 28) Just as I been told and
now afirmly believe "one reflects themselves in others". There are many examples of this but in general it simply means we
assume unconsciously that the reason why others are in situations are the same as the reasons we would be. Its important to attempt to
refrain from doing so. This goes back to sympathetic imagination and the original function of ethics, we have to fully listen to others
without judging and allow them to finish their message and then put ourselves in their position and try to understand why they have come
to the message. "The key is to genuinely seek the welfare of the individual, to listen with empathy, to let the person get to the problem, and
the solution at his own pace and time." (Covey pg. 252 )
"Rebellion is a knot of the heart, not of the mind. The key is to make deposits-constant deposits of unconditional love." (Covey, pg 200) I
find this idea so eye opening. I guess when we aren't ethical its because we're running low on deposits. That may be a hasty generalization.
Of course the world isn't that perfect. The sad truth is that the world doesn't revolve around love and not everyone passes along a good
deed. But id like to be naive and think that if everyone had a source of unconditional love for them there would be more traditional ethics in
the world. Thats all it would take. Just one person. Why would it be important to have a few people who fluctuate between loving and
uncertainty if everyone had one person who was definite in their "deposits" "it is more noble to give yourself completely to one individual
than to labor diligently for the salvation of the masses.." (Covey, 201) I think this relates going to everyone can make difference and you
don't have to touch everyone involved to make the situation better. If you help one person then you've managed to make their reality better
and that is enough to make this reality that much better.
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People may find that they often encounter a specific animal either physically or spiritually, yet they do
not read any further into the occurrence. As adults people tend to be closed off to the irrational and never stop to
think that the reoccurrence could be of significance. It never crosses their mind that it may be beneficial to be
more aware of the animal as it may be their potential spirit animal. Spirit animals are an ancient tradition held by
many Native Americans and other indigenous peoples. It is also a largely held belief that spirit animals can give
the individual a better understanding of their characteristics, teach the individual how to be a more productive
and better adapted version of themselves, and lastly instill better leadership abilities in the people they appear to.
I find this idea to be correct in my personal journey with my spirit animal.
The first step in understanding the concept of a spirit animal is the significance of the tradition. To the
indigenous people the spirit and totem animals were an intricate part both current life and the afterlife. “In the
past shamans, priests, and priestesses were the keepers of the sacred knowledge of life…To them, every species
and every aspect of its environment had the power to remind them of what they could manifest within their own
life It was an aid to bridge the natural world to the supernatural, awakening the realities of both within the
environs of their own lives.” The animals provided a better sense of who we are in this plane awareness and how
we affect many others. Through their connection with various spirit animals Shamans were able to take on the
different medicines, elements, and directions of each at a desired time. Traditionally the medicine of the animal
represents it specific ability and power that can be learned by the individual it chooses while the element reflects
a special characteristic. In today’s culture spirit animals can still be beneficial to those who are willing to be open
minded to the idea of having a spirit guardian and learning from them. “Contemporary cultures also have totem
animals, such as those for clubs or societies like the Lions Club…or for sports teams such as the Chicago
Bears…Even Christianity has the totems of the lamb and the fish.”
In my journey I discovered my spirit animal to be the panther. The panther does have a few
characteristics that correspond with my own. According to author Ted Andrew in his book Animal Speak
Spiritual and Magical Powers of Creatures Great and Small, the panthers keynote is “reclaiming ones true
power.” I find that idea to be both integral in many parts of everyday life and invigorating. “[Panther’s] have
over 500 voluntary muscles that they can use at will. It reflects the ability to do a variety of tasks as he or she
wills.” I feel that that idea applies to my abilities as a student. I may not be an expert in one area of study or one
extracurricular activity but I feel I am equally capable of performing well at a variety of tasks. Opposed to those
individuals that may be exceptionally well at one task and cannot perform very well at any others. Another
aspect I find that correlates well between my spirit animal and I is our tendency to be solitary by nature. “As a
whole panthers are solitary animals…drawn to other solitary individuals.” I enjoy being in the company of others
however if I spend too much time in a public area or with a large group I find myself gravitating away from the
situation. I’d prefer to be in small circuit of close knit friends. If those individuals are not available than I prefer
to be in solitude. For me, the word solitude does not carry a negative connotation as I find that I complete some
of my best work when I work in solitude; just as the panther is a better hunter when it hunts alone. As mentioned
earlier spirit animals are associated with medicines and elements. Due to its position at the top of the food chain
the Panther is associated with predation. Predators are not wasteful animals. I have always been very motivated
to recycle, use less water, and especially never waste my talent. After researching the panther as a spirit animal I
believe my instinct that I connected with her was correct. Once I realized how many traits we shared I started to
understand how much I could learn from her.
“Predation in the natural world can teach us how to develop no fear of death while maintaining a high
regard for life.” I consider the acceptance of loss and change to be the best trait my spirit animal can bestow upon
me. Particularly in this stage of my life in which I have had to overcome greatest change thus far. I am also
aware that diminishing my fear of death, which symbolizes permanent loss, will benefit me in dealing with the
illness of my mother. Although in my judgment I have handled the idea well, I know I can still become a better
caregiver and become more understanding of her ever changing needs. One of my spirit animal’s medicines is
shape shifting which “is a matter of controlling and utilizing your energy to the fullest to meet whatever the life
situation requires.” If I learn how to hone the medicine I feel it will allow me to be a better person in that I will
be able to better handle difficult situations with greater ease. I will “begin to see how [I] can use the life and
death process to end aspects of [my life] and to create new ones.” Shape shifting also refers to the camouflage
ability that a panther possesses. “Like the black panther [I can learn to] blend into [my] surroundings with ease
and to whatever degree [i] desire.” Apart from the spiritual powers animal spirits possess one can also learn from
their physical attributes. “A study of the survival techniques of your totems will provide clues…you could focus
upon to survive more effectively in your own life.” Physically the jaguar is a great sprinter but is not built for
endurance. Therefore as its chosen ward I should learn how to build my endurance. Surprisingly this is very
accurate because I was a sprinter on my high school swim team but I never performed as well in the races that
required endurance. The panther also hunts at night. This implies that I may be my most productive at night.
Night is also associated with darkness, which I have an immense fear of. In this way my spirit animal is pushing
to face and overcome my fears. Most importantly the panther can teach me how to “temper [my] responses, or [I]
may unintentionally wound others more deeply than [I] mean to…” I have already been made aware that my
reactions in a tension high situation can do just that. Overall I feel that my spirit animal can teach me how to
better prepare for life’s challenges, face my fear, be healthier, and most of all learn how to conduct myself in
intense situations. I also feel through these traits the panther could teach me how to be an effective leader.
Good leaders are passionate, influential, ethical, and are inspiring. Chris Littchau wrote, in his book
Animal Spirit Guides: Discover Your Power Animal and the Shamanic Path, Spirit animals are “exceptional
leaders who will help you learn about both the spiritual world and the natural world (pg.2)” My spirit animal has
many good leadership traits. As a predator the panther has an element of fire and “fire is an element of heart, the
center for passions and love that can help us to recreate….” A leader has to be passionate as well as instill
passion into their followers. If the members of the following are passionate about what they are doing this will
inspire them to work harder toward the goal. Passion can also motivate the individual to go above and beyond
the minimal requirement. A passionate leader can motivate his or her followers; if the followers are passionate
then they can motivate others. Leaders also need to be aware of the wants and needs of their followers.
“Predation teaches us that all life is sacred and essential to all other life.” Although theoretically the leader is in a
higher position that their followers, literally the follower is just as essential to the relationship. Therefore it is
vital that the leader treat his followers with respect and dignity, just as the panther is able to teach me. The
panther also has a very strong will. Determination plays a role in the success of a leader. As a leader one must
accept responsibility when the desired outcome is not achieved by the group. However a strong leader will not be
so easily dismayed, instead they will continue to inspire their followers in hopes of ultimately achieving their
goals. They understand the concept that “that which does not kill us makes us stronger. It is this same idea that is
awakened in the lives of those who open to the power of the panther totem.” If I keep all these traits of my spirit
animal in mind, I have no doubt that I can use them to develop my skills as a leader. Leadership is a process and
is an ongoing interaction between both parts. It is something that everyone should continue to hone and can do so
with the guidance of their spirit animal.
Spirit animals can benefit those who are willing to listen and learn from a spirit guide. One “can turn to
these perceptive and trustworthy oracles for advice and counsel on any question or concerns,” Furthermore spirit
animals give their wards insight on why they were chosen, how they can grow from the relationship, and how to
be effective in their roles as leaders. In my personal experience and through the knowledge I have gained about
my spirit animal I feel lucky to have been chosen by the panther. I hope to continue to learn and grow through
my spirit guide. It is also very comforting to know that have a watchful guardian whom I can call on when I
“need a strong sense of protection and guardianship.” Just as in the case of Harry Potter when he conjures his
Expecto Patronum in dire situations. “Expecto Patronum is correct classical Latin for “I await a protector.” To
think that those who never open themselves to the experience do not understand what they are forgoing is
disheartening. “The saddest part is that when we fail to reverence any aspect of nature and our intimate
connection to it, we are failing to reverence intimate aspects or our own self.”
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“Everyone who visits me says I’ m such a sweetheart and they stay and pet me for a while, yet they don’t take me with them.” – Take out
such (slightly awkward) and add a comma after sweetheart.
SUGGESTION: People who visit me think I’m a sweetheart and stay awhile to accompany me; however, they always leave me behind.
1. Unity, Coherence, and Flow – 4 Need to improve on transitioning. I can understand what you’re trying to say, but some sentences have
awkward beginnings: “Yet I had no idea that what I was doing was using sympathetic imagination.”
2. Organization and Logical Order of the Prose – 7 Thoughts and ideas were presented very clearly. I had no trouble understanding what
you were trying to say.
3. Specificity and “Concreteness” – 4 Be more specific with the people you’re referring to. For example, you wrote “Everyone who visits
me…” and “That lady…”. Who exactly are these people? Also, try appealing more to the five senses when you talk about Georgia.
4. Integration of Verbal and Visual Rhetoric – 6 Pictures were well placed in the blog. It could’ve been more effective if there was
interaction so that the reader can connect Georgia to your descriptions.
5. Proofreading: Typos, Spelling, and Grammar errors – 5 “The always make comments about my fluffy, soft fur.” – I’m assuming you
meant “they” instead of “the”. Also, there is an unnecessary comma after fluffy. “When I first meet Georgia I would have never guessed…”
– Change “meet” to “met” for past tense. “Everyone who visits me says I’ m such a sweetheart and they stay and pet me for a while, yet
they don’t take me with them.” – Take out such (slightly awkward) and add a comma after sweetheart. People who visit me think I’m a
sweetheart and stay awhile to accompany me; however, they always leave me behind. “She can’t just give everyone her love.” – Try not
to use contractions.
6. Documentation – 1 Document pictures, use University of Chicago style documentation ( Faigley Penguin Handbook page 125)
7. Punctuation – 4 There are many obvious punctuation errors that need to be fixed. Your biggest problem is commas. They are either
missing or misplaced. “I don’t know what it is about them but they smell…” – Comma after but
8. Word Choice – 5 There are certain areas that can be changed with better diction. “Once I got back to my room to start writing I still had
to use sympathetic” – Perhaps you can change “Once I got back…” to “Upon my return..”
9. Conciseness – 5 There were certain sentences that seemed wordy. Try to be more direct.
SLOTH
“Once I got back to my room to start writing I still had to use sympathetic imagination only now I could only refer to the notes that I had
taken.” – Slightly wordy; “back to my room” can be taken out for conciseness. “The longer people are around me and the more attention
they give me I will come out of my shell.” – I had to re-read this sentence a few times to understand. Rephrase?
Sentence rewrite: “I’m not yet an aged cat yet I have been through so much that I feel so mature.” I thought this sentenced could be
rewritten so that your first sentence would become more compelling to the reader and clear. Try something along the lines of this:
“Although I am a young cat, I feel mature because I have been through so many hardships thus far.”
1. Unity, Coherence, and Flow (3) Some sentences were choppy and did not flow between each other. For example (3rd paragraph) “So
it’s ok to claim my space, they’ll tell the dogs to stay away too. I was a little sad because they took my kittens to homes soon after they
came.” These two sentences do not have related ideas. You are flipping to a different idea without warning the reader. This happens some
other times in your paper. Helpful hints to avoid this—while you proof read your paper keep in mind what each sentence is talking about
and make sure the ideas always relate. If the ideas are somewhat related, but also different, try adding in a word like “also, however,
although, therefore, furthermore” and it might help make the paper flow in a better way
2. Organization and Logical Order of the Prose (4) Ideas skip around in paragraphs sometimes. Helpful hints: try and make sure each
paragraph has a specific topic. Start out the paragraph with a topic sentence and make sure all of the ideas in the paragraph relate to that
one topic . Then look the topics of each paragraph and see if those topics relate and are in the best order within the entire paper.
Sometimes its helpful to write out each topic of each paragraph on a piece of paper so you can see a visual of the order of ideas in your
paper
3. Specificity and “Concreteness” (2) When I read the paper there were many times where I got confused only because you always
referred to the humans as “they.” This is a quick fix in your paper and will help the reader understand what you are saying. Sometimes it
is unclear who “they” actually is referring to. Sometimes you don’t clearly explain where the cat actually is and you refer to the place just
as “here.” It might be more clear just to call the place a shelter or APA
4. Integration of Verbal and Visual Rhetoric (6) The one picture of Georgia place in your blog was very strong and effective for the
project—good use of a picture. However, you should include 2 more pictures of Georgia in your project to receive full credit.
5. Proofreading: Typos, Spelling, and Grammar errors (4) There are many small errors that can easily be fixed if you just carefully read
over your writing. I could always decipher what you meant in your sentences but sometimes, for example, if you forgot to include a
comma in the sentence, I hesitated while reading which interrupted the flow of your paper. Towards the end of your paper sympathetic
imagination portion of your paper you have typed “I’ ll” make sure to delete that space when you turn in your project
6. Documentation (2) Documentation was correct on the blog, but make sure to change it to the correct format when you turn in the hard
copy of your paper Pg. 62 in Penguin
7. Punctuation (4) Make sure you are not forgetting commas. Read your paper slowly and include commas where you naturally pause. For
example, you say, “As hard as I try I seem to never be able to catch it.” (enter comma after “try”) Also, you say, “Now that I think about
it I guess I am a determined cat.” (enter comma after “it”) Notice how you pause after each of those beginning phrases? Try and go
through your paper and notice where commas need to be inserted.
8. Word Choice (5) At some points in your paper you could use different words to create a stronger sentence. For example, you say, “I’m
a gentle cat but sometimes I may come off as shy.” Gentle and shy have very similar meanings to them, but the use of the word “but” is
meant to contrast ideas. Since gentle and shy aren’t contrasting words you might want to consider changing one of those adjectives in
that sentence.
9. Conciseness (5) Your 3rd paragraph could be more concise when you are explaining Georgia’s uneasiness about her new home and the
dogs that live there try and make this passage in your paper more clear by simplifying your ideas
SWAN
"I’m not yet an aged cat yet I have been through so much that I feel so mature" has some errors. Maybe change to "Although I am still
quite young, I feel mature because of all that I've been through" or something like that..
1. Unity, Coherence, and Flow – 4 There is good Coherence, however the grammar and punctuation errors take away from flow of
material. Think about proof reading and tweaking transitions a little bit.
2.Organization and Logical Order of the Prose – 7 Great Organization of thoughts
3. Specificity and “Concreteness” – 5 Could be more specific and descriptive when talking about your cat.
4. Integration of Verbal and Visual Rhetoric – 7 Very nice pictures!
5. Proofreading: Typos, Spelling, and Grammar errors – 3 There were many grammatical errors throughout your project. Make sure to
proofread the whole thing a few more times. Specific sentences that need work are..."I was taken to this place, I’m not sure what it was
but there were a lot of other cats there too." First of all, this is a run on sentence. Also if you are talking about this place, say "here"
instead of "there". "There were all kinds of cats old and young, sick and healthy, some scared some glad." should be changed to.. There
were all kinds of cats. Some were old, some were young; some sick, some healthy. Some were scared and some were glad".
6. Documentation – 2 Make sure to look up how to document pictures!
7. Punctuation – 4 Many punctuation errors. See examples above.
8. Word Choice – 5 Word choice could be more descriptive
9. Conciseness – 5 There were times when your wording was a little much. Extra words can be taken out of some of your sentences and
they would still have the same meaning.
WOLF
"I claimed my space and told them they weren’t allowed in my space" Sounds a little weird. Think about re-wording it.
1) Unity Coherence and Flow Score: 5 There are a few errors that I mentioned below that would make this flow better.
2) Organization and Logical Order of the Prose Score: 6 Good order. It made sense and it progressed from one idea to the next.
3) Specificity and "Concreteness": Examples, Verbal Images, Metaphors, Similes, Evidence, Supporting Details Score: 6 Very descriptive of
her past and her behaviors and actions towards you! Try adding even more detail.
4) Integration of Verbal and Visual Rhetoric Score: 5 Incorporate the pictures in your essay rather than just at the end.
5) Proof Reading Score: 4 (Reflection, 1st paragraph) “She sounded like a brave cat and if I loved the opportunity to be a part of her
finding a home!” Delete “if.” “She sounded like a brave cat and I loved the opportunity to be a part of her finding a home!” (Reflection, 3rd
paragraph) “She has to be wearing of everyone she first meets.” Wearing is the incorrect tense. “She has to be weary of everyone she
first meets.”
6) Documentation Score: 2 You need to document in endnotes. You need to document your pictures.
7) Punctuation Score: 5 (Sympathetic Imagination, 1st paragraph) “There were all kinds of cats old and young, sick and healthy, some
scared some glad.” Add a comma after scared. “There were all kinds of cats old and young, sick and healthy, some scared, some glad.”
8) Word Choice Score: 5 Good word choice, some words needed modification, but overall they made sense.
9) Conciseness Score: 5 “She is way more than deserving of it.” You could make this more concise and understandable by saying: “She is
very deserving of finding a home.”
DRAGONFLY
Sentence Revision: “they’ll never be taken to a place like where they took me first.” Suggestion: The wording is a bit awkward. Instead try
rephrasing it: “… they’ll never be taken to a place that was similar to where I was.”
1) Unity, Coherence and Flow Score: 6 Very interesting Sympathetic Imagination part. A couple of grammar errors. The unity was good all
throughout. I liked the story about her past
2) Organization and Logical Order Score: 6 The organization was good. Sentences got a bit choppy toward the end.
3) Specificity and Concreteness Score: 6 Good detail in the Sympathetic Imagination part. The essay as a whole was concrete
4) Integration of Verbal and Visual Rhetoric Score: 5 Cute pictures! But could have more for Georgia. Video was cute! Integrate the
pictures with the writing
5) Proofreading Score: 5 The errors were pretty visible. “I’ve seen any cats with yellow eyes but mine are unique,” you cant be jumping
from speaker to cat. Try changing “mine” to “yours” referring to Georgia’s eyes. Delete repetitive sentence: “And every time I wake up
they will be there”. “back at home in San Antonio” would sound better: “ back home in San Antonio”. “She sounded like a brave cat and if
I loved the opportunity…” Should delete the “if”
6) Documentation Score: 1 Make sure to document the pictures, Chicago style
7) Punctuation Score: 6 Insert comma: Once I got back to my room to start writing I still had to use sympathetic imagination only now…”
Insert between imagination and only. “… Sympathetic imagination, only now”
8) Word Choice Score: 6 Good examples: “ fluffy” “flinch” and “ optimistic”
9) Conciseness Score: 5 Could be a bit more concise with your ideas in the second section. Once you fix the grammar errors your essay
will be great! And more concise! It was really fun to read!
BEAR
1. Unity, Coherence, and Flow-4 I was caught having to reread sentences often throughout the essay indicating bad transitions and skipping
of thought.
2. Organization and Logical Order of the Prose-5 The organization of the paper wasn’t bad just work on the flow and it will make the
organization look better.
3. Specificity and “Concreteness”-4 I felt at times that your essay was very generic and the “kind of”s and the “And” and “But”s at the
beginning of sentences lead to less concrete ideas.
4. Integration of Verbal and Visual Rhetoric-5 Very well placed picture, but find more pictures of Georgia and I couldn’t see where to find
the video.
5. Proofreading: Typos, Spelling, and Grammar Errors-4 “She is small and dainty and so gentle”-She is small, dainty, and so gentle. (or)
She is so small, so dainty, and so gentle. “I know I would be intimidated if someone just decided to take me to a new place and I had no
idea what their intentions were.”-“their” should be “his or her”. The always make comments about my fluffy, soft fur.”
6. Documentation-2. Not correct Chicago Documentation (see Faigley Penguin Handbook page 125). Document Pictures
7. Punctuation-3 Really bad with prepositions and prepositional phrases. “Once I have become accustomed to a person I will show them my
true personality and they’ll know how loving I am.”- …to a person, I will show them… “If I were her I would tell other people not to be
discouraged by my shy nature.”- If I were her, I would…. “At first I wasn’t going to write for Georgia but one of the APA coordinators who
had picked her up from Town Lake told me her story and I knew that I wanted to meet and write about her.”-At first, I wasn’t going to write
for Georgia but one of the APA coordinators, who had picked her up from Town Lake, told me her story-and I knew that I wanted to meet
and write about her. (Really long sentence, may even want to break it up)
8. Word Choice-5 “I eat more here than I ever have before and I know I’m safe from the crazy world that they brought me from.”-Crazy
isn’t a bad word but I believe you could find one stronger like hectic, chaotic, or disorderly. “But for now she is stuck trusting that the
volunteers at APA will take care of her until that day arrives.”-I don’t like “stuck” use something less harsh on APA or remove it and say
“but for now she trusts that…”
9. Conciseness-5 Definitely could eliminate some excess verbiage and adjectives. I would start by taking away “And” and “But” from the
beginning of sentences. It makes them stronger. And every time I wake up they will be there->Every time I wake up, they will be there.
Peer Reviews of My Project Two
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Punctuation, 5“Yet, the “ cures”” to “Yet, the “cures”” (just watch out for those extra spaces, it happened a few times, but that is an easy
fix! “Although I would hope to achieve my vision in my time at UT I am aware that the goal” to “Although I would hope to achieve my
vision in my time at UT, I am aware that the goal” “We must recognize that we share this planet with them and they are our equals in that
they are part of the cycle that keeps this planet thriving” to “We must recognize that we share this planet with them, and they are our equals
in that they are part of the cycle that keeps this planet thriving” “In my vision I would hope to “ SAVE” as many animals as I could” to “In
my vision, I would hope to “ SAVE” as many animals as I could”
Word Choice, 6I thought word choice was pretty well done.
Proofreading, 6“Considering that chickens are the most consumed and processed animal in the market and that livestock is often
slaughtered in inhuman ways,” to “Considering that chickens are the most consumed and processed animal in the market and that livestock
is often slaughtered in inhumane ways,” “and the passion to fight for those that cannot fight for themselves” to “and the passion to fight for
those that cannot fight on their own.” Very good attention grabber at the beginning. I really enjoyed reading your essay. Very informative,
and I am glad your vision included animals! Overall, very good essay!
Dragonfly
Sentence to be revised: “It is undeniable that some cures have been discovered through animal research, yet for the billions of animals that
die every year how many actually contributed in finding the cure for polio or leading to the discovery of insulin’s effects on diabetes.” - It
was very wordy, try shortening Suggestion: “ It is undeniable that some cures have been discovered through animal research. However,
billions of animals die every year, how many of them actually contributed to finding the cure for polio and the effects of insulin?”…
Something around those lines.
Word Choice: 6 Good & strong word choice. “Undeniable” & “utilization”
Proofreading: 5 “Personally, I am horrified that as a civilized and technologically advanced culture would depend so heavily on such a
primitive method of research.” I think you meant to put “that a civilized…” “That is a very spiciest point of view.” I know what you are
trying to say, but “spiciest” has a different meaning
Punctuation: 6 I did not see any major mistakes. The essay flowed well .“In five years, I should no longer be on campus as an
undergraduate student but I would like to have left behind a cause and my name.” Suggestion: place a comma before “but”
Butterfly Nguyen
“I’ m just not sure that I’m willing to subject animals to needless suffering to save humans from suffering. That is a very spiciest point of
view." Did you mean “That is a very speciesist point of view?”
Proofreading – 6 There are a lot of extra spaces throughout your paper. I don’t know if these are cause from transferring from Word to the
blog, but you should watch out for those:
“Yet, the ‘ cures’”
“I’ m just not sure”
“’ If potentially painful…’”
“… a booth a rush week.” I’m not sure what you mean to say here.
Word Choice - 5“… for higher level institutions to use ulterior methods of scientific research.”
The word “ulterior” doesn’t fit the context of the sentence. The meaning of the word “ulterior” is “being beyond what is seen or avowed;
intentionally kept concealed: ulterior motive.” Did you mean to use the word “alternative”? “presentation of ulterior methods” Same as
above. The diction was compelling and practically grabbed my attention.
Punctuation – 5“The first step I could take in my sophomore year a year from now.”
A comma is needed after “sophomore year” to make a distinction between the clauses.
Other than that, I’m unaware of any other punctuation errors.
Monkey
Sentence to be revised: “Seems like an astronomical number?” Suggestion: “Seem like an astronomical number?” (Since you are talking
about the number 10 billion, it should be “seem” and not “seems”)
Punctuation- 5 Overall you punctuation was not bad, but there is room for improvement. “If it is unclear which experiments can be taken
into account then why continue to perform experiments on millions of animals when the majority will not yield beneficial results?” Should
be “If it is unclear which experiments can be taken into account, then why continue to perform experiments on millions of animals when the
majority will not yield beneficial results?”
Word Choice-5Although your word choice is good overall, there are some places where better words allow for conciseness and clarity. For
example, “Ultimately, I would hope that my efforts on campus would influence other campuses and my group would be the model to follow
in order for higher level institutions to use ulterior methods of scientific research” can be changed to “Ultimately, I hope that my efforts on
campus will influence other campuses and my group will be the model to follow in order for higher level institutions to use alternative
methods of scientific research.”
Proofreading- 5 I noticed a few grammatical errors in your writing. “Well that is how many animals die due to vivisection every year” can
be improved to “Well, that is also the number of animals that die due to vivisection every year.”Also, “Yet, the “ cures” that have been
discovered through this method are limited and often times are correlated with other research methods” should be “However, the “ cures”
that have been discovered through this method are limited and oftentimes are correlated with other research methods” (often times should
be one word). I think you should not use the word yet to start off a sentence and I see that a few times in your essay. Maybe you can change
“yet” to “however” or something along those lines.
Chicken
Sentence to Revise: “The amount of money Bill Gates intends to spend to create a “miracle vaccine”” Add “That is” to the beginning. Also
applies to the following two sentences.
Punctuation 5:“However many individuals in the animal welfare community would define vivisection as a cruel and unnecessary crime
against innocent animals being justified through science.” Add comma after However.“ In order to be part of the solution it is important to
educate the public.” Add comma after solution. “Although I would hope to achieve my vision in my time at UT I am aware that the goal I
am working toward may take more time than I will take to get a degree.” Add a comma after UT. “After the formation of the group I would
have to spread awareness of our cause” Add comma after group. “In speech classes students hone their ability to give effective
presentations” Add comma after classes.
Word Choice 5:“The second reason this argument is inconsistent is the lack of results.” Change to “The second reason this argument is
inconsistent is due to the lack of results.”
Proofreading 5:“The advocates of vivisection claim that the research done through vivisection saved their lives” Change to “has saved their
lives
Butterfly Null
Punctuation: 4 The first four sentences require using colons instead of two separate sentences. You mainly just need a little work with
commas. Goal as students and as a people is" 'goal as students, and as a people, is. "that die every year how many actually contributed" You
need a comma after 'year'
Word Choice: 6 "Yet there is hope" It would sound better if you said 'However, there is hope' "of animals for science to continue after all
this time." It might sound better if you said, 'to continue throughout all this time.' I thought you did a really good job!
Proofreading: 6 Try to avoid using contractions. There were very few mistakes!
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1) Flow-4 The flow was a little difficult to follow because it wasn't in essay format. Which is understandable because its a blog, but just by
adding an intro, body paragraphs, and a conclusion it should be fine. Also be careful not to let your quotes disrupt the flow of your essay.
Ex: ". I still look at the pictures and videos I took of her because I miss her, and I smile when I see the picture of us cuddling.
“Sympathetic imagination is the ability of a person to penetrate the barrier which space puts between him and his object, and, by actually
entering into the object, so to speak” (Anthology 637). By looking into Chickadee’s eyes, I could completely understand her." The quote is
separating two ides instead of supporting them.
2)Organization-5 I assume that your order is cause and effect? Since Chiackadee is sick she is at APA and people are hesitant to adopt
her. That is a little unclear, consider making it a little more obvious. And there are is only that one interruption because of the quote.
3) Specificity-4 You started out great being really specific about Feline Leukemia, which is important but it over shadowed other elements
about her personality. You only briefly mention that she is very vocal and affectionate. Try to include more about who she is, dont let her
illness define her.
4)Visual Aid-6 Your video had great effects and it was relevant because it showed she is a healthy cat despite the diagnosis. But you may
want to try to integrate the pictures into the essay "next to words that are relevant to them"
5) Grammar- 5 Just a few places: "between me and that extraordinary person "Is should be (Between that extraordinary person and I)
"The scariest part about it is having to deal with her leaving before her time should be, and no one wants to have to deal with that"
Consider rewording this sentence because the message is a little unclear maybe ( The scariest part about adopting her is that she may be
gone before her time, and that is difficult to handle) or (The difficult part about adopting her is that she may be gone before her time)
"Above all, we being together as one family will reinforce that there really is a God. "Consider (Above all, together as a family...)
6) Documentation-2 Your quote was relevant but the wrong format. Also maybe include some information about FeVL so that people
understand what you mean when you say she is healthy right now.
7) Punctuation- 5 Generally not many but careful with your use of commas. Ex:. "I live for the day when that one perfect, beautiful face
appears right outside my door, looks into my large, pastel green eyes that say, “Hi, I’m Chickadee,” and realizes we were meant to be
together." You may want check that your using the (,) correctly and that your not putting some where they aren't needed.
8)Word Choice-6 Avoid Cliches. Some of the adjectives you use are fine but others are a little to extreme.
"It is almost an impossibility. The size I am at right now is perfect to cradle in someone’s arms, and the radiating warmth of my body
makes anyone want to snuggle with me for hours on hours" Maybe choose another word than impossibility like inevitable or hopeless to
resist. And radiating warmth of my body sounds kind of odd too or maybe that's me.
9) Conciseness-4 Too many adjectives in certain parts delude the overall message of the essay. Also it gets a little redundant because you
say the same idea in different words. Make sure to make one idea concise and explain it fully and then move on and refrain from going
back to it.
For Butterfly Nguyen
1) Flow-6 The idea was different from what many of us did and it still managed to flow well. Good job on your use of commas and semicolons. The only hard part to follow were the transitions and main ideas of the paragraph. The majority of the sympathetic imagination
deals with the dread Lilian felt having to go to APA. And other main points are shadowed by this theme. Also the transition from past to
present and then back to past was a little confusing.
2)Organization-6 The idea of the cats perspective is clear and the order is logical in that it starts with her being sent to APA, her emotions
about it, and ultimately her experience there. The only thing is as with the other ideas sometimes the tense is confusing. I feel like you are
in present describing the past but then at some points its as if she were in the past Ex:". I was a burden, a liability, something that just
took their time and damaged their investment. Please look past that. I need your care, your help, your affection!
But they didn’t." I understood what you were trying to do but i had to reread it.
3) Specificity- 6 Your really great with detail and very specific about what she was feeling! Yet I feel like your specificity lost momentum.
You had lots of detail about her emotions and experience going to APA and not so much once she was there. Consider elaborating about
the birth of her kittens or her experience with the volunteers to add depth just as you did with the introduction
4)Visual Aid-4 The pictures do great in representing Lilian's personality. However you may want to consider adding some effect or perhaps
placing the pictures in a more appropriate location so that they tie into the story more so than just added at the end.
5) Grammar-6 No apparent grammar errors. Just check your verb-tense agreement and your use of combining sentences.
6)Documentation-7 Your quote is relevant and documented. You may want to consider adding more however.
7)Punctuation-4 Ex: " As I was placed in the box, everything was enveloped in darkness and all I could see were the lifeless walls of the
cardboard box and the light gleaming through the holes of the walls, teasing me, mocking my imprisonment with glimpses of the world
that I loved, the world that was slowly moving away from me before my very eyes. I reached my paw out, wanting to be a part of that
world again, the world that I loved so much, but it’s all in vain; I knew all too well what was happening."
The entire introduction is one sentence and although it is not a run-on im not sure if thats the best way to write that sentence.
8)Word choice-5 Very strong use of words but sometimes cliche. ex: "Light suddenly flooded in, creeping in and filling every corner of my
imprisonment, chasing away the darkness that I had found so comforting." I understand your point and you know Lilian's personality but I
thinks its a little too dramatic.
9) Conciseness-3Can get really wordy at certain places, especially ih the cats point of view.
" I knew; knew right when it happened that the people that loved me so dearly, the people who took care of me like I was their child,
would send me away, never to care for me, never to look at me again." I feel the idea would be just as effective without two examples for
each argument. Also its a little redundant or seems redundant because you focus on one ideas throughout the majority of the writing.
Ex: "As I was placed in the box, everything was enveloped in darkness and all I could see were the lifeless walls of the cardboard box and
the light gleaming through the holes of the walls..." The word box is used twice in the same sentence. Ex: "Damn this light; dancing back
and forth with its mocking gleam and all the happiness and hope it represents. Why do you jest at me so? Why do you bring memories of
happiness, of joy?" You mention what the light represents twice as well
For Cockroach
1)Flow- 5 Generally your flow was evident. It was easy to follow your ideas. Try to make your transitions a little more obvious. Your ideas
are progressive but you could add a transition sentence at the end of every paragraph.
2) Organization-5 The last paragraph in your Cats Perspective isn't really a conclusion, its more of a body paragraph. You may want to
save the paragraph you talk about her finding a family for the end as an concluding idea and the last paragraph can go before that.
3) Specificity- 4 You had great examples of what APA does for the cats but you could be a little more specific about what you mean by
"human friend" I know you mean owner but consider making it more clear. "However I still feel lonely. I miss having a human friend"
4) Visual Aid-6 I loved the video it was full of effects and the song went perfectly with your cat. I also liked your personal message very
cool! Only thing I could think of it placing in a more relevant place instead of just the beginning of the essay.
5) Grammar/Proofreading-3 Some of your choice of words are really strong but don't really connect with the over all idea. ex: "It is not
quite a phobia, or something that I feel very strongly about, but they do make me quite uneasy. "When you say you "feel strongly about"
it gives the impression that its matter of choice. Consider: "Its not quite a phobia, or something that (hinders me) or (is too bothersome)"
To relate that your not choosing to feel that way you just did but Delilah helped. Also try to use the word "however" to often.Other
transition words: Yet Although Even So Still Regardless
6) Quotes-4 You didn't cite the quote you used from the course anthology just double check that. But other than that everything else was
accounted for!
7) Punctuation-5 Just be careful with run-ons. I do it all the time without noticing. Ex: . "I wasn’t the only one who thought that way,
whoever I told about what I had to would ask me to further explain about what I had to do and listened attentively to every word I said
about the project." There are two ideas expressed here. Others both agreed with you and were interested. Try to break it into two
sentences.
Also there is a page in the Course Anthology on how to use commas effectively.
8) Word choice-5 In your reflection the word choice is a little hard to follow. Ex: ". I felt like I was going to do something good, something
to help this society out, even if it was just about helping get a pet adopted" Consider "I felt i was doing something to benefit the
community, even if it was just helping a pet find a home"
9) Conciseness-In the Cats Perspective the fifth and sixth paragraph seemed a little repetitive. Try to reorganize it so that the ideas that
are similar are said consecutively instead of going back to something you've already said later.
For Monkey
1) Flow-6 It flowed very well but a few the transitions were kind of harsh. For example from the second to third paragraph as well as from
the third to the fourth paragraph. You may want to consider adding transition sentences between these paragraphs. Such as adding a
segue sentence at the end of previous sentence and a restatement sentence at the beginning of the next. Try pg. 301 in Volume 1 of our
Course Anthropology. Its Focusing on Transitions.
2) Organization- 5 Your individual paragraphs were well organized but the logic of your order is kind of unclear. I assume that you ordered
things according to importance because you said things like "One important thing that you should know is that...." and "Before you hurry
over to the adoption center to pick me up, I would just like to inform you ". Consider making it more clear what your next paragraph is
going to be about. Also in your personal reflection you may want to introduce Sympathetic Imagination sooner than the fourth paragraph.
3) Specificity-5 You were very specific about her quiet personality that was great! But you may want to be a little more specific about FIV.
The description of the condition was a little vague. Especially when you say "It is indeed a quite harmless disease, though I will need some
special medicine. I hope that you will be willing to spare some money for that." What kind of medication? How much money?
4) Visual Aid-6 The video explained what you talked about very well! But you may want to consider adding some kind of affect. I think it
would be funny and effective to add a voice over of Jessica maybe agreeing with you when you say she really is quite.
5) Typos/ Grammar-6 Just your sentence structures cause minimum hesitation. Ex: "So, if you want to know me better, you should stop
by the PETCO where I am at right now as much as possible." I understand you mean to visit her as much as possible but when I initially
read it I thought you meant Jessica was there as much as possible. Also careful with Run-On I do it all the time! Ex: "The only way it is
transmitted is through bites and scratches, but don’t worry, even though I am FIV positive, the vet said that I would still live a long and
happy life, so I’m excited about that." You have more than one central idea (how it is transmitted and life expectancy) here and you may
want to break it apart.
6) Documentation-6 Your quote was extremely relevant! I think you could make it stronger by adding some evidence to back up what you
know about FIV, like its only transmitted through bites and scratches or that she will live a long happy life.
7) Punctuation-7 Nothing stood out. Sorry.
8) Word choice-6 Not really wordy or redundant. "I did cry a little when I was first born to my mother" It’s kind of implied she was born to
her mother so you dont need to state that in the sentence. Just "when I was born" "I hope that you will be the one to take me away. "take
me away has a negative connotation to it I think. "Similarly, I don’t want you to not adopt me " Your using a double negative here,
consider re wording.
9) Conciseness-9 Not wordy or redundant in my opinion
For Manatee
1)Flow-6 It is easy to follow the main idea and what your going to discuss next. Transition sentences between each main point would
make it just a little easier to follow.
2)Organization-6 It is well organized in that you begin my describing her name and then her personality and then her physical health.
Consider adding paragraph format and transition sentences between each main point.
3) Specificity-7 Your extremely specific and its great that you included so much detail about how to treat FIV.
4)Visual Aid- 4 Consider adding some effects or perhaps just placing the picture in a more relevant place in the sympathetic imagination.
Ex when you describe her coat and white beard you can place the picture showing that.
5)grammar-6 There aren't any apparent typos or spelling errors. However "Helping me have the longest life possible means giving me a
high protein diet usually with added vitamins, anti-oxidants, and Omega 3 and Omega 6 fatty acids." is a fragment consider
revising.Careful with verb tense agreement "She was one of the sweetest cats ever" it should be (is) instead of (was)
6) Documentation-7
Great job you included outside resources and followed the correct format.
7)Punctuation-5 Careful with commas Ex:"Finally, I picked Oprah because she is the fourth longest stay cat there. " There isnt a need for
the comma after "Finally"In fact, Tay Hofoff spoke very correctly about my kind, “There are few things in life more heartwarming than to
be welcomed by a cat.” You may want to consider making this two sentences and give creed to Tay Hofoff.
8) Word Choice-6It was simple yet effective. Just a few places need revision "I took a numerous amount of pictures of her, as well as
Karthik’s cat, Jessica Rabbit." "numerous amount" the adjective doesn't agree with the noun consider "Great amount" or just "numerous
pictures" Also you started some of your sentences with the transition word "But". Consider different transition words.
9)Concisness-7 I didnt feel it was wordy or redundant.
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For Sloth
Proofreading 5"So, according to this Act, inspectors will verify that no suffering of animals occurs in American slaughterhouses." There isn’t
a need to start the sentence with so. Simply start with According to...."And this is easy because the government has passed these laws to
protect the animals, but has turned a blind eye to the truth of what really goes on inside the slaughterhouses." Avoid starting sentences
with AND "There are a vast amount of differences between animals who have lived on a farm rather than a farm factory and, when
compared, the grass-fed animals are more beneficial to society and the economy. " Can be separated into two different sentences I
suggest-- There are a vast amount of differences between animals who have lived on a farm rather than a farm factory. Also grass-fed
animals are more beneficial to society and the economy. "But, there is nothing natural about this painful disorder." Avoid starting
sentences with BUT other transitions words HOWEVER YET REGARDLESS
Word Choice 5 "In the slaughterhouse, the animal’s death is tortuous and agonizing because many times the bullet that is meant to leave
the animal unconscious during its slaughter is usually improperly injected, leaving the poor animal fully conscious while it bleeds to death."
Tortuous and Agonizing mean the same thing.. You could delete one. "Feeding off of this idea, this could be a win-win-win-win-win
situation if everyone was a vegetarian and no animals were killed on our behalf." This topic and the word feeding shouldn't go together. "I
think that with patience, this cause can be carried out and achieved. First, I must spread awareness of the negative aspects of the
slaughterhouses. "Eliminate I THINK THAT start with "It is also an easy change because one is not compromising much of their diet. "I
would delete ALSO
Conciseness 6 Other than the slightly awkward integration of questions I didnt really see any issues with the flow of the essay. It follows a
logical order from beginning to end and all the material is relevant. The questions just make it a little less formal and more conversational
which is not always a negative.
For Bear
Consciences 4"One is lonely as he sits on a curb in South Central, Los Angeles. With no place to go to after school, he roams the streets
until his mom comes home from work at 6:00 pm." Combine these sentences for better flow possibly- One is lonely as he has no place to
go to after school, he roams South Central, Los Angeles until his mom comes home from work at six pm. "An adult-supervised place to go
afterschool can promote a child’s safety and socialization" The sentences before and after this sentence only deal with health so consider
deleting socialization or include other aspects about it. "Throughout life there are times where teamwork is required to succeed; sports
provide a good basis for working together. Learning to function as a team can be valuable for children working on projects in school and
for their future job or working environment." These two sentences seem roughly the same you dont need both. " Without self-confidence,
an individual may shy away from contributing their own ideas because he or she doesn’t believe in himself or herself." I would eliminate
using he/she by using one and himslef/herslef with themselves. "All of these traits are important to ones personal growth, can be obtained
through sports." Insert and and delete the coma. Maybe try integrating the vision instead of awkwardly italicizing it in your body
paragraphs. "The fact that this program provides facilities for soccer can help multiple schools and organizations by having safe community
fields where kids can play." This sentence seems like an incomplete thought and only repeats what is stated in the previous sentence.
Punctuation 6"Every day, there are children on the streets, in bad neighborhoods, and in danger for their lives." Rewrite as Every day
there are children on the streets, in bad neighborhoods which endangers their lives. "More, specialized, organizations helping this cause
include the U.S. Soccer Foundation3 and the Pop Warner Little Scholars4" delete the coma after MORE
Word Choice 5"How do we help this group of youths stay safe?" I would substitute youths for adolescents for stronger impact. "Sports
assist children to stay healthy and build up their physical and mental strength" I would substitute assist to allow. "A possible first, and
easiest, step would be to provide balls and equipment to schools that have access to fields and public facilities but don’t have the funding
for the equipment." Consider re writing as- The first, and possibly easiest, step would be to provide equipment to schools that have access
to fields and public facilities but don’t have the funding for the equipment.
For Swan
Proofreading 6 "Various disorders such as depression, schizophrenia, and extreme anxiety plagues the minds of so many to the point that
their lives become a miserable prison." Isnt so clear consider re writing as Various disorders such as depression, schizophrenia, and
extreme anxiety plagues the minds of many and as a result their lives become miserable prisons. "Because the cost of counseling and
medication are extremely high, these people have no way of seeking help for their problems. They become trapped in a vicious cycle,
unable to escape the desperate reality of their situation. Because of their extreme mental instability, these men and women are not only a
danger to themselves, but to to all citizens in the Austin community." Avoid starting sentences with BECAUSE
Word Choice 5 "The extent of trauma experienced by mentally-ill victims can be almost indescribable" Doesnt sound conifident re write
as. The extent of trauma experienced by mentally-ill victims is indescribable. "I hope to contact other organizations around Austin such as
ARCH and CommUnity Care and ask for their help and cooperation in making the HCC a reality. Once the Homeless Counseling Center has
been built, I hope to hire part time volunteers who will counsel the homeless. I hope to have enough volunteers by the end of my senior
year of college. By then time I graduate, I hope to have a running facility that is extremely effective in helping the homeless attain
amazing mental counseling." You repeat "I HOPE" a lot try My intentions are or Im expecting to or By this time I should...
"My leadership vision is a huge project, and will take the completion of many small steps before any significant progress is made. "
Substitute huge for another word that implies difficult not size like tremendous or tedious or complex "This course has taught me that it is
our job as ethical human beings to do everything in our power to help aid the suffering of others. " Help and Aid mean the same thing
delete one of the words.
Specificity 7"If it wasn’t for these lessons, I may have never realized the extreme suffering going on around me. " Here you could define
the type or kind of suffering. Did really well with being specific throughout the essay
For Humming Bird
Proofreading 5 "Living in a post-modern society, we are bombarded by technology and careers as priorities." Re word to make more clear
possibly- Living in a post-modern society, we have learned to prioritize technology and careers. "Out of my passion for photography, I
often want to stop and document what I see so that it can remind me of my blessings each day, but I know this technique is not just
effective for me" This can be separated into two sentences. Consider--Out of my passion for photography, I often want to stop and
document what I see so that it can remind me of my blessings each day. I know this technique will not only benefit me, it is an action that
can affect millions. "A photograph can truly change how we view the world and stir up hidden emotions that might help us realize how
important it is to slow down and look around the environment." Seems like a run on sentence consider revising. "I can help find homes to
poor dogs and cats who are still in need of a home. " Should be FOR not TO
Word Choice 5". As a result, it becomes easy for people to be ignorant of the difficulties around the world." "The city of Austin is the
perfect starting place for me because every angle I turn to, I am confronted with homeless people, dirty and helpless." You may not want
to call them DIRTY helpless is strong on its own. "Many people claim different circumstances to be an experience of a lifetime, but kneeling
on the floor, interacting with homeless cats, and documenting their loneliness was certainly special." I would substitute LONELINESS for
JOURNEY "Sometimes, we just need to breathe and take time out of our busy lives to slow down and re-prioritize our lives." You use lives
twice I would substitute one of them for days. "It may be a challenge to get people to care at first, but as long as the advocates persevere
with their goals, there will always be one person who can experience a change of heart and make a difference." I would substitute
PERSERVERE with ARE PERSISTENT with their goals, they can always encourage at least one person to make a difference.
Conciseness 4"In reference to Stephen Covey’s teachings, one can display leadership if they “resolve to dedicate their talents and
resources to noble purposes and to provide service to others”." This sentence deals with leadership but the material before and afterward
deal with sympathetic imagination and the camera. Consider rewording it or including more on leadership. "If this is my plan for
leadership, how can I achieve this goal? During my college career, I would like to take the first step towards fulfilling my vision" You
haven't made your vision clear yet so it affects the conciseness.
For Dragonfly
Proofreading: 4 Consider Revising: "They grew up with you and obeyed you for their entire life." Maybe As they grew up with you they
obeyed you. "Offering your time as well as an animal’s time can truly change the lives of people in need." I understood what you meant
but i had to re read it make it a little more clear. Consider rewording "On the Loving Pets Healing Lives website they say its been proven
that the animal-human “relationship reduces high blood pressure.”[3]" Id suggest According to the Loving Pets Healing Lives website the
animal-human "relationship reduces high blood pressure. "My purpose is to integrate animals in need into this program. Expanding the pet
therapy into an opportunity to save animals’ lives as well." These two sentences could be combined possibly into My purpose is to
integrate shelter animals into pet therapy to save their lives. "I will be able to communicate successfully with the head of the companies.
And learn about the negotiating skills necessary to plan out an event." Combine these sentences and avoid starting a sentence with AND
Word Choice: 4 "These animals are given a second chance while offering themselves to help other people" The word offering sounds off
because the animals aren't making a conscience choice. "I would like to take baby steps with this project, getting things done at a steady
pace, ensuring that things run smoothly." Baby sounds informal maybe small steps or you can eliminate the first part altogether. "Being
familiar with the Austin Pets Alive shelter is to my advantage." is an advantage. "This outcome could be improved with time and
experience" Substitute outcome for results "From my Public Relations class I will learn the talent of smart communication." Re word it to
make more clear.
Punctuation-5"Possible run-on and the wording is complicated. "With so much talk about the improvement of lives because of pets, it is
obvious why there are companies are expanding dramatically; such as American Human Association, Therapy Pet Pals of Texas, and
Therapy Dogs International."
Try Due to the evidence that pets improve lives companies such as AHA, TPPT, and TDI have expanded.
"Taking the simple flyers and booth idea and turning in to commercials and video blogs. " needs commas. Taking the simple flyers and
booth ideas, I could create commercials and video blogs. "These classes teach you about the public and what they want to see written
about in newspapers." May need a comma after public and you could delete "about" "Hopefully planning events to gather more volunteers
will broaden the public awareness" Comma is needed after hopefully.
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Activity
Everyone should get into groups of about 4-5. Once you are in your group pick one person to go and
choose one of the items provided for you. Next everyone should write a description about the item.
Write every thought that comes to mind. Try to write continuously for about three minutes. Try to
write without stopping about the item and any thoughts that the item evokes, or anything you think is
associated with it. After your done everyone should share what they have written with the group. The
rest of the group will try to decide if you are Intuitive or Sensing personality based off of what you
have written. Try to guess why the person chose the item that they did. Share the reasons why you
came to your conclusions. Enjoy
- Similar
Doe: “ I am someone who “wants facts, trusts facts, and remembers facts” (Anthology 218). Like Professor Bump, I like to have things done
according to specific rules and guidelines.” “ I prefer reading books about historical events or ones that seem realistic.”
Turtle Blaine: “ This worries me because I am not the loud and wanting type, which sometimes comes off as me being the not caring type and that is so
far from it and on the contrary I do care a lot, I just don't always know how to write or express my feeling very well.”<
Butterfly Null: “Usually, while writing, I just like to "report factual information" and "say it simply and directly" (Anthology 230), but in this class
already, we are required to include deeper meaning. This is going to be difficult, but I will just have to work at it!”
Buffalo: “ Also, because ISFJ people tend to be stubborn in their ways, when writing I need to make sure that I follow his rules and
guidelines. However, luckily for me, being an ESFJ person has me striving to follow the rules and guidelines provided.”
Humming Bird: “I also prefer to write about topics that I care about. I want my writings to be of great worth and value to those who read it so I
would “focus more on how the message is delivered to the audience than on content.” (Anthology 236)”
Lauren: “After reading Professor Bump’s ISFJ type, I can honestly say that he is a very good match as a teacher for my personality type.
Because ISFJs are “methodical and accurate workers, often with very good memories and unexpected analytic abilities”(Anthology 253), I
can learn a lot from professor Bump because I am lacking in these areas. ISFJs are also very dependable and hard working, and I definitely
appreciate those qualities in a teacher”
- Dissimilar
Sloth: “I write like a “thinker,” but come up with topics like a “ perceiver” and “feeler.”< span> I wish that I had the skills to write more loosely
and interestingly, but because I have a hard time making my ideas into words, my writing is much different from how I actually think and
feel”
Wolf: “. N stands for intuitive. I received a high score in this category and in the description I figured out why. “The possible is
always in front of [the intuitive], pulling on his imagination like a magnet” (Anthology, 219). One strength of being intuitive is being
determined to reach a certain goal. F stands for feeling.”
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According to the preferences my strengths are that I "excel at writing about ideas", (Volume I pg. 232) "presenting factual information and
descriptive writing", (Volume I pg. 233), and "writing logically, objectively, and analytically". (Volume 235) Overall I agree with the
profile set by the Introverted Sensory with Thinking. The three points I agree most with are that "they have a...sense of right and wrong,
especially in their interest..., they also often come off as cold..., [and] also do not react well to change and resist it." (Volume I pg.243) I also
agree with my profile as a reader and a writer. I think my skills are well balanced but of course could always use some improvement!! As an
introvert "[I] often need time and solitude for concentration...[ also I often ] stop frequently to anticipate the direction of the
essay..."(volume I pg. 232) As a reader this means that I often stop to think about what the writer is trying to say so it takes me longer to
read through articles and informational reading. As a writer this means that I cant not begin the writing process until I have a clear outline
that I can follow throughout the writing process. With Sensing I "may excel at descriptive writing" (Volume I pg.233) which means that I
pay attention to the little details versus being able to see the full picture. As a reader I may over analyze the message, and I know I read
between the lines to find technicalities instead of taking the literature at face value. In Thinking "[I] tend to excel at writing logically,
objectively, and analytically. [My] papers are often well organized" (Volume I 235). As a reader I prefer less abstract works. I also prefer
writing with good transitions so that the paper is easy to follow, and including a lot evidence
How this affects me as a leaner is as a learner this means that I need to learn how to "be more friendly so as not to make the classroom
awkward in their presence." (Volume I pg.243) In a small class room like 30211, it will force me to come out of my shell and interact
more the group. I just have to be sure "to choose my words wisely so that [I] do not offend or hurt others." (Volume I pg.243) As an ISFJ
I feel like I can benefit from Professor Bump's ability to "assist the downtrodden and can deal with disability and neediness in
others..." (volume I pg.252) This makes me feel like I can talk to Professor Bump when I am having trouble understanding his
expectations in our papers. I also feel like another opportunity would be Professor Bumps method of teaching. "ISFJ's learn best by doing
rather than by reading about something in a book, or applying theory" (Volume I pg. 257) He wants us to learn through experiential
learning not just through our anthropology. The only conflict I see arising would be in our different styles of writing. "[ISFJ's] are also
notoriously stubborn and adopt a 'if you want it done right. do it yourself motto'" (Volume I pg. 251). I fear that my style of writing may
be too factual and not focus enough of emotional experiences for the liking of an ISFJ. I have been taught to write in a methodical way
and I have trouble adjusting to change and reconstructing my style of writing.
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Natural Science Museum September 8 2011
As a Panther we try to have respect for every from of life. Regardless of how big or small. We know that every creature is special and
important in their own way. We even try to have respect for humans. In an attempt to understand them and their relationship with animals
better I decided to visit what they call a museum. My curiosity quickly turned into disgust and and confusion. I was upset that they were
remains at almost every kind of animal. To our ancestors to small insects to modern animals. I couldn't understand why any species would
put others on display. When one of our kind passes into the great unknown we try to pay our respects and have a service in their memory.
We would never decimate their bodies to keep the hallow physical self to gaze at in amazement. I dont blame the little ones they have not
been taught better. But the older ones.... How could they allow such a thing? How could they approve of such disrespect. I overheard one of
them say that it was for education... I dont understand.. Why must they gaze at our ancestors stuffed bodies to learn from us? What can they
learn from a display that they cant learn from a picture or a documentary. To make matters worse I noticed that some humans pay something
called money to visit the museum. Money has worth to them that I cant understand. But it is important to them to acquire it and then they
trade it for other things of value. Does that mean that they put a value on our lives? The thing that bothered me most about the museum was
that they had infants of my ancestors on display. There only little ones and they did not have a proper burial or the respect to start their
passage to the great beyond .
According to what the humans wrote these little ones were Scimitar-toothed cat Homotherium Serum. They were only four months old at
the time of their passing. They were alive anywhere between 2 million to 12 thousand years ago. I couldnt bare the thought of humans
digging up their burial sites to come and put them in these glass boxes for human little ones to look and not understand how it is utterly
unnecessary. It broke my heart even more to see that one of the "displays" had a kitten that died in a an accident or was killed because the
body was in a compromised position. The poor little one died in such a horrible way to have its burial site dug up and brought here.... I
payed my regards to the kitten and hoped that its new self had not been disturbed by what had happened to its physical slef. They also had
an adult of the same ancestor a full scale "skeleton" that too required the disturbance of a burial ground. The "skeleton showed how fierce
my ancestor were. It gave me a little pride but I cannot deny the sorrow it also caused me because my ancestors were majestic and do not
deserve to be here as a show or for educational purposes that can easily be substituted for something else. Like what they had on the outside
of the museum.
This statue accurately represents what my ancestors looked like. At least that is how I always pictured them from the stories my parents told
me about the ancient ones. They were parents to all the big cats that humans know today. Why couldnt they something like this in the
museum. Not just for my ancestors but also for every other animal on display. I think the human little ones can learn just as much from
something like this than the bones of our ancestors. Especially when they are going to misrepresent us like what they did in the display of a
modern cat called the puma. Who is a cousin of mine although we are both solitary cats so we dont spend too much time together.
Bob Bullock Museum November 10 2011
Animals have always been seen as means to facilitate our lives. Wether it we use them as tools, machines, or for companionship. Native
Americans in Texas, before fit was Texas, used buffalo in their everyday lives. They only killed the animals out of need and if I recall
correctly they always said a prayer for the animal they killed. They respected the buffalo because they understood that their survival was
dependent on the animal. Some tribes were nomadic because they would follow the grazing herds. "Buffalo provided the [Comanche] with
practically everything- food, shelter, clothing, robes, weapons, tolls, and fuel in the form of buffalo chips." (Bullock Museum) Native
Americans used every part of the animal and revered them as equals. They never felt as if they were better or superior, but for their lifestyle
it was a natural cycle of life.
Once settlers began to move in to Texas they introduced new animals. Europeans brought in horses, donkeys, rats, and dogs. Before the
annexation of Texas, Native Americans began to use horses as war machines. The Comanche became the best riders in Texas, even better
than the cowboys. They began using the horses in war and battle and many animals died in battle. The horses were begin forced to fight and
die in confrontations that they had no part in starting. Mexicans, who were decedents of Native Americans and lived in Texas when it was
still a part of Mexico and then got stuck in Texas after the annexation, also began to use these animals as they settled Texas. Farmers began
to use animals as commodity. They would trade animals for food and other tools. Animals began to have value based on their health and
their ability to work. Animals were now being used to facilitate travel and agricultural chores but weren't always treated with respect or as a
someone. Now animals were seen as objects, machines, and a form of currency. If an animal became ill it was "put down" or left to die. This
is also when the distinction between animals arose. Some were used as tools, others as food, and others as pets. Once the missionaries
began to move into texas and build little town around the missions the treatment of animals became even worse. Europeans began hunting
buffalo as a form of sport. They would kill the animal skin it and then leave the remains out to rot in the plains of Texas. They nearly wiped
out the entire population of buffalo. Buffalo almost became extinct in a region where millions used to roam free. This is also when cattle
were being driven north to go to the slaughter houses. Animals , such as the longhorn, began being breed especially to be killed and eaten.
There was little concern for the health of the animals they now lost any form of living aspect. They became completely objects that we were
better" than and had no feelings and didn't suffer they way that we do.
Blanton Art Museum November 4 2011
A picture is worth a thousand words. Yet those one thousand words can be different from someone else’s interpretation of that same
painting. I’ve learned how to examine art through my Creative requirements from IB. However that doesn’t mean that the message I
understand from a work of art is the only message that can be interpreted. I knew upon visiting the Blanton Museum of Art that I should be
looking for a painting with a particular message. With this message in mind I choose Francois Perrier’s oil on canvas painting Bacchus and
Ariadne which was painted in 1647-50, in Paris, France. It is a small canvas that “ renders a mythological subject, Bacchus and his
entourage discovering the abandoned Ariadne…” For my purposes, I focused more on the relative relationship between the animals and the
message of the painting. I saw that animals had distinct roles, representations, and negative relationships with humans, or in this case gods.
First I noticed the different roles that each animal played. It was apparent that animals were either treated as pets or servants. In either case
they were treated as inferiors. This is seen in both the placement of the animals in the painting and how Bacchus’ followers are interacting
with the animals. The animals that are considered pets are in the foreground of the painting. While the animals that are under servitude are
both in the middle and background of the painting. Also the animals that are considered pets are painted with warmer colors to distinct them
from the negative space in the painting. The other animals are painted with cooler earthy tones that blend in with the negative space if one is
distinctly looking for them. The animals in the foreground seem to have a servant tending to them and caring to them alone. The mule in the
middle ground doesn’t seem to have the consideration of its care givers. The mule is forced to carry a creature that is seemingly too heavy
for him. The only symbol of consideration for the mule is the brush the creature hold in its right hand. However because it is a brush it
shows that they are more concerned with the mules aesthetic appeal more so than its health or feelings. Lastly the animals in the background
are seen strictly as servants with no care for their wellbeing. In the far right of the painting there is a camel with a large load on its hump and
an elephant that has a rider holding reins. These animals are viewed as less than servants. Perhaps they are seen as machinery to facilitate the
travels of Bacchus and his followers. I can’t imagine that the “humans” stop on their journey allowing either animal to rest. Or that the load
that is placed on the animals is monitored to ensure it is not too heavy. Through the placement of the animals and their relationship with the
mythological comrades of Bacchus it is evident that the different animals have distinct roles. The roles of the animals also emphasize what
symbolism they hold in society
Over all this painitng shows that humans had no repsect for animals. They were just tools to show status and triats or to carry heavy loads
and perform other chores. Even as pets animals were not seen as loving companions. They were dragged along by force and were only taken
care of if they represented something positive. As in the case of the mule. Humans projection of mules being stupid animals has lead to the
mules servitude in this painting. The relationship between owner and pet or servant is a cruel one. The animals have expressions of
discontent or exhaustion. Its not to radical to assume that humans may have thought of animals as objects more so than living things. In this
world each animal was assigned a role based on humans interpretation of what that animal represented. Also humans treat animal according
to their roles. Humans deem them worthy of care and consideration. Instead of recognizing that every living thing is entitled to rights and
consideration of feelings.
Although Francois Perrier may not have been consciously depicting the relationship between humans and animals in his painting there are
contextual clues alluring to it. Such as the positions, color, and actions of the animals. Even in a mythological context one can see how
animals were treated and viewed in Perrier’s time. Do we still hold the same beliefs toward animals? It is eye opening to think that perhaps
we haven’t progressed much in our treatment of animals in over three centuries. Hopefully three centuries from now, when a student is
analyzing a painting with animals from our time they will be able to see a great change.
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