Writing Task 1:
Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you left the plane, you left a
bag. You did not remember about the bag until you got to your hotel.
Write a letter to the airline. Explain what has happened, describe the bag and its contents and
say what would you like them to do about it.
Previous Last week I was on the flight number 209 from Tehran to London. I am writing to
inform you that I left my bag in that airplane.
Last Sunday I got on the aircraft and took my given bag with me to the airplane, and I put my
bag in the compartment located above me then I sat in my seat. All of a sudden, one of the flight
attendants asked me politely to change my seat with another person who had major disabilities,
so I changed my seat without transferring my belongings to the new compartment. Consequently,
when I was getting off the plane, I searched the compartment above my head ,and I thought that I
did not bring something with me, but actually I did.
My bag’s color is blue with lily flowers on it. It contains a precious book, which was written by
John Steinbeck. This book is very expensive and costs about 2 million pounds, and it belongs to
London National Museum.
So, If if you find the bag, please call my mobile phone and inform me about the bag, and whether
the book is still there.
In the end, I appreciate your attention to this matter.
Yours faithfully,
Jack Mitchell <<< Be real! Write your own name!
Writing Task 2:
Children today are too dependent on computers and electronic entertainment. It
would be better for them to be outside playing sports and taking part in more
traditional pastimes than spending all day indoors.
Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Nowadays, children play video and computer games more often. Some people argue
that in-house activities are better for youngsters, however; however, other people think
outdoor exercises help children more. In my opinion, the advantages of outdoor sports
are much more than indoor ones.
Playing outdoor sports and doing traditional activities prepare children purposely for
the society. Children who involve are involved in old-fashioned exercises , especially
practices practiced in the past, learn juveniles how they their parents or grandparents
play and which kind of sports they are involved in it. Consequently, culture will be
preserved. Additionally, sports which are played outside such as football or basketball
teach teenagers to work in team and achieve their goals with collaboration. Cooperation, therefore, will be the first priority because team activities educate teach them
that with co-operation, they can reach to their ambitious plans. As a result, that those
outdoor exercises raise adults who will be likely to be fully fully-committed employees
,and their exercises in the past can be beneficial to them, to their society and their
company.
On the other hand, indoor related activities have its their own advantages which should
be mentioned. Firstly, children learn English language better because partial English
language proficiency as a professional cyber player is a key element. Secondly,
children can do some dangerous actions in the virtual environment, so computer and
sophisticated electronic gadgets gives this golden opportunity to the children to take
risks. Children , consequently, can experience dangerous stuffs things and see the
consequences of their risky actions’ consequences , so they learn cause and effect rule
thoroughly, and it does not need to experience it physically.
To sum up, I believe that outdoor activities benefit children, community and culture a
lot, so it is highly recommended that children be permitted to play outdoors.
Comment [Afarinesh1]: Parallelism rule!
Comment [Afarinesh2]: informal
Comment [Afarinesh3]: search the structure
for RECOMMEND in a dictionary.
Estimated Band Score:
TA
CC
LR
GRA
87-
7
6
6+
5+
76
For the second
task, you have
not covered
TRADITIONAL
PASTIMES in your
writing! Read and
study the topic
more carefully!
You always lose
marks on task
achievement.
You need better
cohesive devices.
Also the
transition
between some of
your sentences is
not smooth
enough.
The lexical
resources are too
simple and there
are instances of
problem using
them in context.
Good Luck
Corrected and Commented by: Hamed Mohammad Hosseini
Very simple
structures,
though accurate.
You need a wider
range of
grammar.
Overall
6+
Task1 > 7
Task2 > 6-