Peter is a seventh grade boy who is spending two weeks at a summer
camp and has written a letter home to his parents. Before he gives it
to his counselor for mailing, he would like you to read it. After you
read Peter's letter, think about the changes you would make to help
him correct and improve it. Then answer the multiple-choice
questions that follow.
Dear Mom and Dad,
(1) Camp Wakandooho has been all that you promised and
more! (2) It seems the advenfures never end!
(3) Let me first tell you about our counselor. (4) Our cabin
master, Mr. Orville Dinty, is a rather wierd feliow. (5) No matter how
hard he ffies to be cool, he always ends up looking like a nerd. (6) For
example, we all had the opporfunity to walk across a rope bridge the
other day, but Mr. Dinfy slipped and lost his glasses. (7) They
clattered across the wobbly walkway, plunged 60 feet into the gorge
below. (8) Mr. Dinfy has no backup giasses, so now he sort of "feels"
his way around camp. (9) He can't see a thing that's over three feet
away! (10) You should have seem him when we were casting our
fishing rods in the casting tournament. (11) I've never saw boys
scatter so quicklyl (12) Needless to say, we're hoping his new glasses
will arrive this week.
(13) Our cabin has been ostracized by the other cabins.
(14) Upon our arrival the first day of camp, we begun to notice a
familiar stench. (15) We discovered a family of skunks had taken up
residency under our cabin steps. (16) No other cabin was available to
house the twelve boys in our group, so us, the Mighfy Troopers, had
to settle for this one.
(17) One of the boys put a rubber snake in Mr. Dinfy's bed
Safurday night and youll never guess what happened! (18) We boys
had tossed sardines at the hole where the skunks live and just as the
skunks came out to investigate, Mr. Dinfy came barreling out the
door. (19) A traumattzing moment for all concerned!
(20) Butch, Rusty, and all of us learned our lesson though, we
discovered that skunk spray covers a wide area, including
mischievous boys who are watching from the woods.
(21) See you next week,
Sfi'n*tt
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1.
What change, if any, should be made in sentence 6?
A change opportunity to oppurtunity
B remove the comma after example
C change Mr. to Mr
D make no chanse
2. What change, if any, should be made in sentence 16?
change Mighty Troopers to mighfy troopers
B change available to availible
C change us to we
D make no chanse
A
a
J.
What is the BEST w?y, if necessary, to rewrite the ideas presented
in sentence 19?
A It was a traunatrzing moment for all concerned!
B A trarunatic moment for all concerned, Mr. Dinty!
C A traumatizing moment for all concerned?
D No revision necessary.
if any, should be made in sentence
change youll to you'Il
change Mr. Dintyb to Mr. Dinfys
4. What change,
A
B
17?
C change
D
the exclamation point to a question mark
make no chanse
5. What change,
A
B
C
D
if any, should
be made in sentence 4?
change is to was
remove the comma after master
change wierd to weird
make no chanse
6. What change, if any, should be made in word group
change week to weak
B change the commato a semi-colon
C change,See to see
D make no change
2l?
A
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7. What is the BEST way to rewrite the ideas presented into
,
sentence 20?
A Butch, Rusty, and all us boys learned our lesson, though. We
learned that skunk spray covering a wide area including
mischievous boys who are watching from the woods.
B Butch, Rusfy, and all us boys learned our lesson. Though we
discovered that skunk spray covers a wide area.
C Skunk spray covers a wide area, including mischievous boys
watching from the woods Butch, Tommy, and all us boys really
learned our lesson.
D Butch, Rusty, and all us boys learned our lesson, though. We
discovered that skunk spray covers a wide area, including
mischievous boys who are watching from the woods.
8. What change, if any, should be made in sentence 11?
A change s&w to seen
B change quickly to quick
C change boys to boy's
D make no change
9. What is the BEST way to rewrite the ideas presented in
sentence 7?
A They clattered across the wobbly walkway; plunged
60 feet into the gorge beiow.
B They clattered across the wobbly walkway, and will plunge
60 feet into the gorge below.
C Clattering across the walkway, rt plunged 60 feet into the
gorge below.
D They clattered across the wobbly walkway and plunged 60 feet
into the gorge below.
1O.What change, if any, should be made in sentence 14?
A change notice to are noticing
B change begun to began
C change familiar to familair
D make no change
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