DESTRUCTIVE POWER OF
MAN IN NATURE
The people are the cause of the changes of the Earth, we are guilty of the
extinction of animals, plants and even cultures.
The most of problem The main problems that affect the nature are:
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GLOBALIZATION
INDUSTRIALIZATION
Globalization is a problem that has grown in last century with the
growth of the very powerful countries. Human societies across the globe
have established progressively closer contacts over many centuries, but
recently the pace has dramatically increased. The globalization are is a
form of change minorities cultures for by others with more followers. The
powerful counties want TO take a control of others countries.
Comentario [H1]:
The industrialization is a form to create new places to produce things
but this form is bad for nature. This It creates jobs but it provokes
deforestation, changes the relief and change the economy. It changes the
rural economy for by the industrial economy. This form is very good for
the economy but bad for the nature.
Comentario [H4]: Cannot understand
what you are trying to say here-
This These things and the overpopulation create very serious
problems in the nature.
Comentario [H7]: Remember that THIS
is singular but THESE is plural.
Comentario [H2]: You should use
another Word and not one that belongs to
the same lexical field as the verb GROW
you have just used a couple of words before.
Comentario [H3]: Careful!!! Adjectives
do not have a plural form in English,
therefore do not write the –S.
Comentario [H5]: Try not to repeat the
very same Word three times in just one
sentence.
Comentario [H6]: It is not the right
Word for this context.
Advantages
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The globalization help to better meet other people from others
countries
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The globalization helps to learn more about others cultures and
customs
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The overpopulation allows more workers.
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The industrialization creates jobs
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The industrialization stables stabilizes the economy
Disadvantages
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The globalization end cultures
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The globalization change people and customs
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The globalization want that the powerful countries reign about the
economy and culture
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The industrialization ends with more landscapes and natural parks
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The industrialization changes the economy and impoverishes small
traders
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The industrialization provokes deforestation.
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The overpopulation provokes damage in the nature.
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The fires, pollution and the human irresponsibility end with the
landscapes.
Comentario [H8]: Remember that
adjectives in English do not take the –S for
the plural form. Try to get rid of this basic
mistake.
Comentario [H9]: You have to explain
this statement further. It is not clear what
you are trying to say.
Comentario [H10]: You repeat several
times the same ideas. You should have them
grouped into three big headings: CULTURE,
NATURE & ECONOMY.
Comentario [H11]: Very basic mistake.
You should remember to add the –S for the
third person singular Present Simple.
Comentario [H12]: Careful with the
lack of variety in the vocabulary used. At
home you can use a dictionary, either online
or in the library but make sure you do not
repeat the very same words twice or three
times in the same paragraph.
My opinion
In my opinion, I think that the worse problem in the nature is the
human being. We are the remponsible for the most of the tragedyies in the
world, for example: whem when there is are a fire, the most of causes of
this are humans. The industrialization is are created by humans, the
globalization are is created by us but we realize that we are the biggest
problem in the world.
Comentario [H13]: Careful!!!! You are
referring to a superlative, therefore it is not
worse but WORST. This is a very basic
mistake.
Comentario [H14]: Whenever you
hand in a Project, you should doublé-check
it for spelling mistakes and typos.
Comentario [H15]: Careful with the
Subkect + Verb agreement. This is a very
basic mistake.
Comentario [H16]: Do not use the
definite article THE when you are making a
general statement.
Comentario [H17]: The same
explanation that I have included above
referes to this mistake. You should ne more
careful!!!
Comentario [H18]: It is not the RIGHT
linking Word so you should use another
linker.
WORDS
guilty: for example a person who is convicted of a crime is guilty.
(culpable)
across: from one side to the other. (sobre)
minority: smaller number: fewer than half. (minoría)
provoke: to cause something. (provocar)
overpopulation: too many people. (sobrepoblación)
customs: habit, usual behaviour. (costumbres
impoverishes: make poor. (empobrecer)
traders: people who sale something (comerciantes)
Comentario [H19]: Remember that
GUILTY is an adjective, not a noun like in
Spanish.
Comentario [H20]: If you are defining
a word, you should not include the endings
for the third person singular Present Simple..
It should be written in the infinitve.
Comentario [H21]: Sale is a noun, it is
not a ver, do not confuse “sale” (venta) and
“sell” (vender)
LINKS
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Industrialisation
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Contaminaci%C3%B3n_atmosf%C3%A9rica
https://www.globalpolicy.org/globalization/defining-globalization.html
Comentario [H22]: Dates are missing!!!
Three sources are not enough.