7 Writing Formative 7.14D
Some questions (c) 2012 by NWEA.
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The following is a rough draft of a student’s essay. It contains errors.
Science Fair
(1) At the same time every year, all of the science teachers in our school become very enthuzeastic about
the school­wide science fair. (2) It is contagious. (3) Their excitement spills over to the whole student body. (4)
This is the time of year that we all anticipate, since the fair showcases the most original ideas no matter how
large or small. (5) I could not wait to get home and start, but I could not think of any ideas for my project. (6) The next day, as my father and I walked down the aisles of the supermarket, my problem was what we
discussed. (7) We talked about ideas as we loaded our groceries into the trunk of the car. (8) Because it was a
sunny day, I became concerned that the ice cream we had bought might melt in the trunk before we arrived
home. (9) “Would the temperature in the back seat of the car be warmer or cooler than the temperature in the
trunk?” I wondered aloud. (10) My father looked as though he were about to reply; instead, he became
strangely silent and just smiled knowingly at me. (11) I was puzzled, but I soon had an idea forming inside my
head. (12) “Of course,” I exclaimed! (13) I was sure I had a fantastic idea for a project. (14) Knowing how
temperatures differ within the different areas of an automobile would be useful and interesting.
(15) After my father and I put away the groceries, I asked him for a favor. (16) “Dad, School and project
supply Sources is a teacher supply store downtown that sells equipment for science projects,” I said. (17)
“Everyone in my class buys his or her supplies there. (18) Would you please drive me there this weekend? (19)
The store has thermometers for sale for less than one dollar each, and I’m going to need quite a few of them.”
(20) Dad smiled and nodded I could not wait to begin.
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Which change, if any, should be
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Which change, if any, should be
made in Sentence 14?
made to Sentence 19?
A
change Knowing to Knew
F
B
insert a comma after automobile
G change quite to quiet
C
change would be to was
H change the period to a question
mark
D Leave as is.
J
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change the comma to a semicolon
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Which change, if any, is needed in
Sentence 15?
A
Asking my father for a favor, the
groceries were put away.
C
Read the sentence from the
essay.
I put away the groceries after my
father and asked him for a favor.
B
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My father and I put away the
groceries after I asked him for a
favor.
D Leave as is.
(12) “Of course,” I exclaimed!
What is the correct way to
punctuate this sentence?
A
“Of course!” I exclaimed.
B
Of course, “I exclaimed.”
C
“Of course!” I exclaimed!
D Of course, “I exclaimed!”
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Which change, if any, is needed in
Sentence 7?
F
Loading our groceries into the
trunk of the car, ideas were talked
about.
G About ideas we talked, as we
loaded our groceries into the trunk
of the car.
H Into the trunk of the car we
loaded our groceries, as we talked
about ideas.
J
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