Author’s response to reviews
Title: Predictors of physical activity and sedentary behaviours among 11-16 year olds:
Multilevel analysis of the 2013 Health Behaviour in School-aged Children (HBSC) study in
Wales
Authors:
Kelly Morgan ([email protected])
Britt Hallingberg ([email protected])
Hannah Littlecott ([email protected])
Simon Murphy ([email protected])
Adam Fletcher ([email protected])
Chris Roberts ([email protected])
Graham Moore ([email protected])
Version: 2 Date: 23 Jun 2016
Author’s response to reviews:
Response to reviewers
Line 12, p. 3 - 'reducing a range of chronic disease risk' should be amended to 'reducing a range
of chronic disease risks'
Response:
The sentence has been amended accordingly.
Line 8, p. 4 - From the sentence starting 'Previously, national estimates...' through to 'pupils in
year 1-7.' should be revised - there are incomplete sentences secondary to the amendments made
by the authors.
Response:
The sentences have been amended to read: ‘Previously, national estimates of PE provision across
schools in England were measured using survey data on pupils aged 5-16 years in 98% of all
state schools. Data from the Physical Education and Sport survey, conducted annually between
2003/4-2009/2010, show that 90% of schools provided a minimum of two hours PE for pupils in
year 1-7.
Line 2, p. 5 - 'and during lunch break' should be 'and during lunch breaks'
Response:
The sentence has been amended accordingly.
Line 35, p. 5 - 'This paper reports analysis' should be either 'this paper reports analyses' or; this
paper reports an analysis'
Response:
The sentence has been amended to read, ‘This paper reports analyses of’
Line 60, p. 5 - 'First schools' should be 'first, schools'
Response:
The sentence has been amended accordingly.
Line 2, p. 6 - 'in each of year groups 7' should be 'in each of the year groups 7'
Response:
The sentence has been amended accordingly.
Line 17, p. 6 - 'within these 67 schools both individual- and school-level data available 'should
be 'within these 67 schools, with both individual- and school-level data available'
Response:
The sentence has been amended accordingly.
Line 25, p. 8 - 'All analyses are undertaken' should be 'all analyses were undertaken'
Response:
The sentence has been amended accordingly.
Line 28, p. 9 - The paragraph starting 'Table 3' refers to physical activity. When reporting the
results, it would be clearer if you referred to total physical activity as per the variable description
Line 2, p. 11 - Please rephrase so 'however' is not repeated Line 6, page 12 - remove , between
questions and which
Response:
The paragraph has been amended accordingly.
Editorial Comments
Can you please ensure your revised manuscript meets our formatting guidelines (which may
have changed since your initial submission), in particular the addition of a complete
'Declarations'
section
including
a
list
of
abbreviations
used:
https://bmcpublichealth.biomedcentral.com/submission-guidelines/preparing-yourmanuscript/research-article
Response:
The article has been amended to include extra headings, a shorter abstract and an abbreviation
list to fit with the new formatting guidelines. A ‘Declarations’ section has also been inserted
using the specified sub-headings.
Please provide the name of the ethics committee that approved the study. Please see the
following
for
more
details:
http://www.biomedcentral.com/submissions/editorialpolicies#ethics+and+consent
Response:
The following sentence has been added to the Declarations section; ‘The study was approved by
Cardiff university Social Sciences Research ethics committee’.
Are the HBSC data freely available or was permission required to access them? Please provide
details in the Declarations section.
Response: Information concerning data access is available via the HBSC website, to inform
readers the following sentence has been added to the script, ‘Information on data access and
materials can be located at http://www.hbsc.org/data/’
Is the survey used in the study published/available in references 37/38? If not, could you provide
details in the methods section of where it can be found please?
Response:
As noted above, the website link inserted provides specific information regarding data access
and survey design.
As a very minor point, please check the new wording on the third line of the abstract Results
section for clarity.
Response:
The sentence has been amended accordingly.