Oakleigh State School (0331)
2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Harrison, ALLEN (EQID: 2449938147F Gender: M) Class: 3S Band: 5 Scale Score: 453
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
3
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 22/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
orients the reader: an internally consistent persuasive text that attempts to support the reader by developing a shared understanding of
context
4 and above
0.0
2.0
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
3
most simple and compound sentences are correct AND some complex sentences are correct (meaning is predominantly clear)
4 and above
1.4
2.8
Spelling (0-6)
4
correct spelling of: simple words; most common words; some difficult words (at least two); (incorrect difficult words do not outnumber
correct difficult words)
5 and above
2.9
0.4
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Eric, BAMBRICK (EQID: 8663718711C Gender: M) Class: 3CS Band: 2 Scale Score: 271
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Total Score: 9/48, Quintile: Bottom 20%
Category Descriptor
% Students who scored *
At the school
Nationally
Audience (0-6)
1
response to audience needs is limited; text contains simple written content
2 and above
95.7
93.3
Cohesion (0-4)
1
links are missing or incorrect; short script (often confusing for the reader)
2 and above
87.1
85.4
Ideas (0-5)
1
text contains one idea OR ideas appear unrelated to each other OR ideas are unrelated to topic on prompt
2 and above
94.3
91.4
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
1
correct use of capital letters to start sentences OR full stops to end sentences (at least one correct sentence marker); (punctuation is
minimal and of little assistance to the reader)
2 and above
85.7
80.3
Sentence Structure (0-6)
1
some correct formation of sentences (some meaning can be construed)
2 and above
95.7
90.0
Spelling (0-6)
1
few examples of conventional spelling; limited evidence (less than 20 words written)
2 and above
95.7
93.6
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
1
very short script
2 and above
94.3
94.8
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Jenna, BARTHOLOMEUSZ (EQID: 2314621422E Gender: F) Class: 3AF Band: 3 Scale Score: 373
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 16/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
2
correct spelling of: most simple words; some common words (at least two); (errors evident in common words)
3 and above
57.1
56.5
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Jude, BIRD (EQID: 0533398943B Gender: M) Class: 3S Band: 4 Scale Score: 402
Criteria
Total Score: 18/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
3
most simple and compound sentences are correct AND some complex sentences are correct (meaning is predominantly clear)
4 and above
1.4
2.8
Spelling (0-6)
2
correct spelling of: most simple words; some common words (at least two); (errors evident in common words)
3 and above
57.1
56.5
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Noah, BODDINGTON (EQID: 1590130133D Gender: M) Class: 3S Band: 3 Scale Score: 373
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 16/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
2
correct spelling of: most simple words; some common words (at least two); (errors evident in common words)
3 and above
57.1
56.5
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Luca, BROWN (EQID: 1792485644E Gender: M) Class: 3CS Band: 5 Scale Score: 465
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 23/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
4
"all sentence punctuation correct (no stray capitals) AND mostly correct use of other punctuation, including noun capitalisation
(provides accurate markers to enable smooth and efficient reading)"
5
0.0
0.1
Sentence Structure (0-6)
3
most simple and compound sentences are correct AND some complex sentences are correct (meaning is predominantly clear)
4 and above
1.4
2.8
Spelling (0-6)
5
correct spelling of: simple words; most common words; at least 10 difficult words; (incorrect difficult words do not outnumber correct
difficult words)
6
0.0
0.0
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Audrey, BUTLER (EQID: 0289172355U Gender: F) Class: 3CS Band: 5 Scale Score: 453
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 22/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
3
most simple and compound sentences are correct AND some complex sentences are correct (meaning is predominantly clear)
4 and above
1.4
2.8
Spelling (0-6)
3
correct spelling of: most simple words; most common words (at least 20)
4 and above
24.3
13.3
Text Structure (0-4)
2
text contains two clearly identifiable structural components OR all components are present but weak
3 and above
5.7
5.3
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Leonard, BUTLER (EQID: 0283114976T Gender: M) Class: 3CS Band: 5 Scale Score: 465
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
3
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 23/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
orients the reader: an internally consistent persuasive text that attempts to support the reader by developing a shared understanding of
context
4 and above
0.0
2.0
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
3
"sentence level punctuation mostly correct (minimum of 80% of 5 sentences punctuated correctly) AND some other correct punctuation
(two or more examples of other punctuation) OR accurate sentence punctuation with correct noun capitalisation and no stray c
4 and above
5.7
2.4
Sentence Structure (0-6)
3
most simple and compound sentences are correct AND some complex sentences are correct (meaning is predominantly clear)
4 and above
1.4
2.8
Spelling (0-6)
3
correct spelling of: most simple words; most common words (at least 20)
4 and above
24.3
13.3
Text Structure (0-4)
2
text contains two clearly identifiable structural components OR all components are present but weak
3 and above
5.7
5.3
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Edward, CALLF (EQID: 2449938798S Gender: M) Class: 3S Band: 4 Scale Score: 388
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 17/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
3
correct spelling of: most simple words; most common words (at least 20)
4 and above
24.3
13.3
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Thomas, CASSELL (EQID: 9734049204U Gender: M) Class: 3S Band: 5 Scale Score: 428
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 20/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
3
most simple and compound sentences are correct AND some complex sentences are correct (meaning is predominantly clear)
4 and above
1.4
2.8
Spelling (0-6)
4
correct spelling of: simple words; most common words; some difficult words (at least two); (incorrect difficult words do not outnumber
correct difficult words)
5 and above
2.9
0.4
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Claudia, CASSIDY (EQID: 0283134569T Gender: F) Class: 3AF Band: 6 Scale Score: 501
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
3
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 26/48, Quintile: Top 20%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
orients the reader: an internally consistent persuasive text that attempts to support the reader by developing a shared understanding of
context
4 and above
0.0
2.0
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
2
all paragraphs are focused on one idea or set of like ideas: at least one paragraph is logically constructed and contains a topic
sentence and supporting detail (paragraphs are mostly correct)
3
0.0
0.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
3
"sentence level punctuation mostly correct (minimum of 80% of 5 sentences punctuated correctly) AND some other correct punctuation
(two or more examples of other punctuation) OR accurate sentence punctuation with correct noun capitalisation and no stray c
4 and above
5.7
2.4
Sentence Structure (0-6)
3
most simple and compound sentences are correct AND some complex sentences are correct (meaning is predominantly clear)
4 and above
1.4
2.8
Spelling (0-6)
4
correct spelling of: simple words; most common words; some difficult words (at least two); (incorrect difficult words do not outnumber
correct difficult words)
5 and above
2.9
0.4
Text Structure (0-4)
2
text contains two clearly identifiable structural components OR all components are present but weak
3 and above
5.7
5.3
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Isla, CLEMENTS (EQID: 0289743070S Gender: F) Class: 3AF Band: 5 Scale Score: 477
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
3
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 24/48, Quintile: Top 20%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
orients the reader: an internally consistent persuasive text that attempts to support the reader by developing a shared understanding of
context
4 and above
0.0
2.0
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
3
"sentence level punctuation mostly correct (minimum of 80% of 5 sentences punctuated correctly) AND some other correct punctuation
(two or more examples of other punctuation) OR accurate sentence punctuation with correct noun capitalisation and no stray c
4 and above
5.7
2.4
Sentence Structure (0-6)
3
most simple and compound sentences are correct AND some complex sentences are correct (meaning is predominantly clear)
4 and above
1.4
2.8
Spelling (0-6)
4
correct spelling of: simple words; most common words; some difficult words (at least two); (incorrect difficult words do not outnumber
correct difficult words)
5 and above
2.9
0.4
Text Structure (0-4)
2
text contains two clearly identifiable structural components OR all components are present but weak
3 and above
5.7
5.3
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Abigail, COLLECUTT (EQID: 0283756581X Gender: F) Class: 3S Band: 3 Scale Score: 373
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 16/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
1
links are missing or incorrect; short script (often confusing for the reader)
2 and above
87.1
85.4
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
3
correct spelling of: most simple words; most common words (at least 20)
4 and above
24.3
13.3
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Edward, COOPER (EQID: 3247592971D Gender: M) Class: 3CS Band: 6 Scale Score: 523
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
3
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 28/48, Quintile: Top 20%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
orients the reader: an internally consistent persuasive text that attempts to support the reader by developing a shared understanding of
context
4 and above
0.0
2.0
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
2
all paragraphs are focused on one idea or set of like ideas: at least one paragraph is logically constructed and contains a topic
sentence and supporting detail (paragraphs are mostly correct)
3
0.0
0.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
4
"all sentence punctuation correct (no stray capitals) AND mostly correct use of other punctuation, including noun capitalisation
(provides accurate markers to enable smooth and efficient reading)"
5
0.0
0.1
Sentence Structure (0-6)
3
most simple and compound sentences are correct AND some complex sentences are correct (meaning is predominantly clear)
4 and above
1.4
2.8
Spelling (0-6)
4
correct spelling of: simple words; most common words; some difficult words (at least two); (incorrect difficult words do not outnumber
correct difficult words)
5 and above
2.9
0.4
Text Structure (0-4)
3
"text contains an introduction, a body and conclusion OR detailed longer text with two developed components and one weaker
component"
4
0.0
0.0
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Zane, COOPER (EQID: 2489550303R Gender: M) Class: 3CS Band: 6 Scale Score: 512
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
3
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 27/48, Quintile: Top 20%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
orients the reader: an internally consistent persuasive text that attempts to support the reader by developing a shared understanding of
context
4 and above
0.0
2.0
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
2
all paragraphs are focused on one idea or set of like ideas: at least one paragraph is logically constructed and contains a topic
sentence and supporting detail (paragraphs are mostly correct)
3
0.0
0.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
4
"all sentence punctuation correct (no stray capitals) AND mostly correct use of other punctuation, including noun capitalisation
(provides accurate markers to enable smooth and efficient reading)"
5
0.0
0.1
Sentence Structure (0-6)
3
most simple and compound sentences are correct AND some complex sentences are correct (meaning is predominantly clear)
4 and above
1.4
2.8
Spelling (0-6)
4
correct spelling of: simple words; most common words; some difficult words (at least two); (incorrect difficult words do not outnumber
correct difficult words)
5 and above
2.9
0.4
Text Structure (0-4)
2
text contains two clearly identifiable structural components OR all components are present but weak
3 and above
5.7
5.3
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Alexander, DALZELL (EQID: 3121063621C Gender: M) Class: 3S Band: 5 Scale Score: 428
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 20/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
3
"sentence level punctuation mostly correct (minimum of 80% of 5 sentences punctuated correctly) AND some other correct punctuation
(two or more examples of other punctuation) OR accurate sentence punctuation with correct noun capitalisation and no stray c
4 and above
5.7
2.4
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
2
correct spelling of: most simple words; some common words (at least two); (errors evident in common words)
3 and above
57.1
56.5
Text Structure (0-4)
2
text contains two clearly identifiable structural components OR all components are present but weak
3 and above
5.7
5.3
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Jacque, DESRETTES (EQID: 3712403997X Gender: M) Class: 3AF Band: 3 Scale Score: 373
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 16/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
1
text contains one idea OR ideas appear unrelated to each other OR ideas are unrelated to topic on prompt
2 and above
94.3
91.4
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
2
correct spelling of: most simple words; some common words (at least two); (errors evident in common words)
3 and above
57.1
56.5
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Levi, DOUGHERTY (EQID: 3289794332E Gender: M) Class: 3S Band: 4 Scale Score: 402
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
3
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 18/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
orients the reader: an internally consistent persuasive text that attempts to support the reader by developing a shared understanding of
context
4 and above
0.0
2.0
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
3
correct spelling of: most simple words; most common words (at least 20)
4 and above
24.3
13.3
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
1
very short script
2 and above
94.3
94.8
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Isabella, DUNN (EQID: 1675436517X Gender: F) Class: 3AF Band: 6 Scale Score: 512
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
3
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 27/48, Quintile: Top 20%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
orients the reader: an internally consistent persuasive text that attempts to support the reader by developing a shared understanding of
context
4 and above
0.0
2.0
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
2
all paragraphs are focused on one idea or set of like ideas: at least one paragraph is logically constructed and contains a topic
sentence and supporting detail (paragraphs are mostly correct)
3
0.0
0.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
3
"sentence level punctuation mostly correct (minimum of 80% of 5 sentences punctuated correctly) AND some other correct punctuation
(two or more examples of other punctuation) OR accurate sentence punctuation with correct noun capitalisation and no stray c
4 and above
5.7
2.4
Sentence Structure (0-6)
3
most simple and compound sentences are correct AND some complex sentences are correct (meaning is predominantly clear)
4 and above
1.4
2.8
Spelling (0-6)
4
correct spelling of: simple words; most common words; some difficult words (at least two); (incorrect difficult words do not outnumber
correct difficult words)
5 and above
2.9
0.4
Text Structure (0-4)
3
"text contains an introduction, a body and conclusion OR detailed longer text with two developed components and one weaker
component"
4
0.0
0.0
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Sophie, DWYER (EQID: 2312629843S Gender: F) Class: 3S Band: 5 Scale Score: 441
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
3
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 21/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
orients the reader: an internally consistent persuasive text that attempts to support the reader by developing a shared understanding of
context
4 and above
0.0
2.0
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
3
most simple and compound sentences are correct AND some complex sentences are correct (meaning is predominantly clear)
4 and above
1.4
2.8
Spelling (0-6)
3
correct spelling of: most simple words; most common words (at least 20)
4 and above
24.3
13.3
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Hamish, DYCE (EQID: 2449938759P Gender: M) Class: 3S Band: 3 Scale Score: 359
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 15/48, Quintile: Bottom 20%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
1
correct use of capital letters to start sentences OR full stops to end sentences (at least one correct sentence marker); (punctuation is
minimal and of little assistance to the reader)
2 and above
85.7
80.3
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
2
correct spelling of: most simple words; some common words (at least two); (errors evident in common words)
3 and above
57.1
56.5
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Igor, ELIAS (EQID: 1405598554A Gender: M) Class: 3CS Band: 4 Scale Score: 388
Criteria
Total Score: 17/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
2
correct spelling of: most simple words; some common words (at least two); (errors evident in common words)
3 and above
57.1
56.5
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Ivory, GIDDINS (EQID: 2312629882V Gender: F) Class: 3S Band: 3 Scale Score: 373
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 16/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
1
links are missing or incorrect; short script (often confusing for the reader)
2 and above
87.1
85.4
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
2
correct spelling of: most simple words; some common words (at least two); (errors evident in common words)
3 and above
57.1
56.5
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Grace, GRANT (EQID: 4033372156L Gender: F) Class: 3CS Band: 5 Scale Score: 428
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 20/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
3
correct spelling of: most simple words; most common words (at least 20)
4 and above
24.3
13.3
Text Structure (0-4)
2
text contains two clearly identifiable structural components OR all components are present but weak
3 and above
5.7
5.3
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Vincent, GRASSO (EQID: 0283750146N Gender: M) Class: 3CS Band: 3 Scale Score: 373
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 16/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
2
correct spelling of: most simple words; some common words (at least two); (errors evident in common words)
3 and above
57.1
56.5
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Florence, HALL (EQID: 8055827446D Gender: F) Class: 3CS Band: 5 Scale Score: 441
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
3
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 21/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
orients the reader: an internally consistent persuasive text that attempts to support the reader by developing a shared understanding of
context
4 and above
0.0
2.0
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
3
correct spelling of: most simple words; most common words (at least 20)
4 and above
24.3
13.3
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Shakeehah, HEDRICK (EQID: 4033372193M Gender: F) Class: 3CS Band: 4 Scale Score: 388
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 17/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
3
correct spelling of: most simple words; most common words (at least 20)
4 and above
24.3
13.3
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Mitchell, HENDERSON (EQID: 3255044975W Gender: M) Class: 3CS Band: 4 Scale Score: 415
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 19/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
2
correct spelling of: most simple words; some common words (at least two); (errors evident in common words)
3 and above
57.1
56.5
Text Structure (0-4)
2
text contains two clearly identifiable structural components OR all components are present but weak
3 and above
5.7
5.3
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Leala, HENDY (EQID: 3951718988N Gender: F) Class: 3AF Band: 4 Scale Score: 402
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 18/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
3
correct spelling of: most simple words; most common words (at least 20)
4 and above
24.3
13.3
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Caitlin, HOLMES (EQID: 3289792768Q Gender: F) Class: 3CS Band: 5 Scale Score: 441
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 21/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
3
"sentence level punctuation mostly correct (minimum of 80% of 5 sentences punctuated correctly) AND some other correct punctuation
(two or more examples of other punctuation) OR accurate sentence punctuation with correct noun capitalisation and no stray c
4 and above
5.7
2.4
Sentence Structure (0-6)
3
most simple and compound sentences are correct AND some complex sentences are correct (meaning is predominantly clear)
4 and above
1.4
2.8
Spelling (0-6)
3
correct spelling of: most simple words; most common words (at least 20)
4 and above
24.3
13.3
Text Structure (0-4)
2
text contains two clearly identifiable structural components OR all components are present but weak
3 and above
5.7
5.3
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Louise, HUDSON (EQID: 8055096681C Gender: F) Class: 3AF Band: 5 Scale Score: 428
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
3
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 20/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
orients the reader: an internally consistent persuasive text that attempts to support the reader by developing a shared understanding of
context
4 and above
0.0
2.0
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
2
correct spelling of: most simple words; some common words (at least two); (errors evident in common words)
3 and above
57.1
56.5
Text Structure (0-4)
2
text contains two clearly identifiable structural components OR all components are present but weak
3 and above
5.7
5.3
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Devon, JOHNSON (EQID: 0850283067R Gender: M) Class: 3S Band: 3 Scale Score: 373
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 16/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
2
correct spelling of: most simple words; some common words (at least two); (errors evident in common words)
3 and above
57.1
56.5
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Cameron, JOY (EQID: 6605629233U Gender: M) Class: 3S Band: 5 Scale Score: 465
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 23/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
3
"sentence level punctuation mostly correct (minimum of 80% of 5 sentences punctuated correctly) AND some other correct punctuation
(two or more examples of other punctuation) OR accurate sentence punctuation with correct noun capitalisation and no stray c
4 and above
5.7
2.4
Sentence Structure (0-6)
3
most simple and compound sentences are correct AND some complex sentences are correct (meaning is predominantly clear)
4 and above
1.4
2.8
Spelling (0-6)
4
correct spelling of: simple words; most common words; some difficult words (at least two); (incorrect difficult words do not outnumber
correct difficult words)
5 and above
2.9
0.4
Text Structure (0-4)
2
text contains two clearly identifiable structural components OR all components are present but weak
3 and above
5.7
5.3
Vocabulary (0-5)
3
four or more precise words or word groups
4 and above
0.0
0.2
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Stella, KAMMAN (EQID: 1590136531L Gender: F) Class: 3AF Band: 6 Scale Score: 523
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
3
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 28/48, Quintile: Top 20%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
orients the reader: an internally consistent persuasive text that attempts to support the reader by developing a shared understanding of
context
4 and above
0.0
2.0
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
2
all paragraphs are focused on one idea or set of like ideas: at least one paragraph is logically constructed and contains a topic
sentence and supporting detail (paragraphs are mostly correct)
3
0.0
0.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
3
uses some devices that persuade; use is effective but not sustained (may also include some ineffective use)
4
0.0
0.0
Punctuation (0-5)
3
"sentence level punctuation mostly correct (minimum of 80% of 5 sentences punctuated correctly) AND some other correct punctuation
(two or more examples of other punctuation) OR accurate sentence punctuation with correct noun capitalisation and no stray c
4 and above
5.7
2.4
Sentence Structure (0-6)
3
most simple and compound sentences are correct AND some complex sentences are correct (meaning is predominantly clear)
4 and above
1.4
2.8
Spelling (0-6)
3
correct spelling of: most simple words; most common words (at least 20)
4 and above
24.3
13.3
Text Structure (0-4)
3
"text contains an introduction, a body and conclusion OR detailed longer text with two developed components and one weaker
component"
4
0.0
0.0
Vocabulary (0-5)
3
four or more precise words or word groups
4 and above
0.0
0.2
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Nicolaas, KOCK (EQID: 0283750795A Gender: M) Class: 3CS Band: 4 Scale Score: 415
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 19/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
2
correct spelling of: most simple words; some common words (at least two); (errors evident in common words)
3 and above
57.1
56.5
Text Structure (0-4)
2
text contains two clearly identifiable structural components OR all components are present but weak
3 and above
5.7
5.3
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Infinity, KRUISDYK (EQID: 1792485042U Gender: F) Class: 3S Band: 3 Scale Score: 359
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 15/48, Quintile: Bottom 20%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
1
correct use of capital letters to start sentences OR full stops to end sentences (at least one correct sentence marker); (punctuation is
minimal and of little assistance to the reader)
2 and above
85.7
80.3
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
2
correct spelling of: most simple words; some common words (at least two); (errors evident in common words)
3 and above
57.1
56.5
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Harry, LENNON (EQID: 8663718753I Gender: M) Class: 3CS Band: 3 Scale Score: 344
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 14/48, Quintile: Bottom 20%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
1
links are missing or incorrect; short script (often confusing for the reader)
2 and above
87.1
85.4
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
0
no evidence or insufficient evidence
1 and above
95.7
93.7
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
3
correct spelling of: most simple words; most common words (at least 20)
4 and above
24.3
13.3
Text Structure (0-4)
0
no evidence of any structural components of a persuasive text
1 and above
95.7
94.0
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Mia, MACKAY (EQID: 2242065213E Gender: F) Class: 3CS Band: 3 Scale Score: 373
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 16/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
2
correct spelling of: most simple words; some common words (at least two); (errors evident in common words)
3 and above
57.1
56.5
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Olivia, MINNS (EQID: 6034843432P Gender: F) Class: 3S Band: 4 Scale Score: 415
Criteria
Total Score: 19/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
3
most simple and compound sentences are correct AND some complex sentences are correct (meaning is predominantly clear)
4 and above
1.4
2.8
Spelling (0-6)
2
correct spelling of: most simple words; some common words (at least two); (errors evident in common words)
3 and above
57.1
56.5
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
3
four or more precise words or word groups
4 and above
0.0
0.2
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Annabel, MOLONEY (EQID: 3315336924R Gender: F) Class: 3CS Band: 4 Scale Score: 388
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 17/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
1
correct use of capital letters to start sentences OR full stops to end sentences (at least one correct sentence marker); (punctuation is
minimal and of little assistance to the reader)
2 and above
85.7
80.3
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
3
correct spelling of: most simple words; most common words (at least 20)
4 and above
24.3
13.3
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Charles, MULLINS (EQID: 3951130175M Gender: M) Class: 3AF Band: 4 Scale Score: 402
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
3
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 18/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
orients the reader: an internally consistent persuasive text that attempts to support the reader by developing a shared understanding of
context
4 and above
0.0
2.0
1
links are missing or incorrect; short script (often confusing for the reader)
2 and above
87.1
85.4
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
3
correct spelling of: most simple words; most common words (at least 20)
4 and above
24.3
13.3
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Stella, O'BRIEN (EQID: 8340112552I Gender: F) Class: 3S Band: 5 Scale Score: 477
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
3
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 24/48, Quintile: Top 20%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
orients the reader: an internally consistent persuasive text that attempts to support the reader by developing a shared understanding of
context
4 and above
0.0
2.0
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
3
uses some devices that persuade; use is effective but not sustained (may also include some ineffective use)
4
0.0
0.0
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
5
correct spelling of: simple words; most common words; at least 10 difficult words; (incorrect difficult words do not outnumber correct
difficult words)
6
0.0
0.0
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
3
four or more precise words or word groups
4 and above
0.0
0.2
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Kade, PEARCE (EQID: 4825370778F Gender: M) Class: 3CS Band: 3 Scale Score: 359
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 15/48, Quintile: Bottom 20%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
1
correct use of capital letters to start sentences OR full stops to end sentences (at least one correct sentence marker); (punctuation is
minimal and of little assistance to the reader)
2 and above
85.7
80.3
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
2
correct spelling of: most simple words; some common words (at least two); (errors evident in common words)
3 and above
57.1
56.5
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Flynn, PERKINS (EQID: 6950427811V Gender: M) Class: 3CS Band: 1 Scale Score: 95
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Total Score: 0/48, Quintile: Bottom 20%
Category Descriptor
% Students who scored *
At the school
Nationally
Audience (0-6)
0
symbols or drawings which have the intention of conveying meaning
1 and above
97.1
99.2
Cohesion (0-4)
0
symbols or drawings
1 and above
97.1
98.8
Ideas (0-5)
0
no evidence or insufficient evidence
1 and above
97.1
98.7
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
0
no evidence or insufficient evidence
1 and above
95.7
93.7
Punctuation (0-5)
0
no evidence of correct sentence punctuation
1 and above
97.1
97.8
Sentence Structure (0-6)
0
no evidence of sentences
1 and above
97.1
98.5
Spelling (0-6)
0
no conventional spelling
1 and above
97.1
99.0
Text Structure (0-4)
0
no evidence of any structural components of a persuasive text
1 and above
95.7
94.0
Vocabulary (0-5)
0
symbols or drawings
1 and above
97.1
99.0
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Katelyn, POINTON (EQID: 3247592996K Gender: F) Class: 3S Band: 5 Scale Score: 465
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
3
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 23/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
orients the reader: an internally consistent persuasive text that attempts to support the reader by developing a shared understanding of
context
4 and above
0.0
2.0
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
4
correct spelling of: simple words; most common words; some difficult words (at least two); (incorrect difficult words do not outnumber
correct difficult words)
5 and above
2.9
0.4
Text Structure (0-4)
2
text contains two clearly identifiable structural components OR all components are present but weak
3 and above
5.7
5.3
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Sophia, PRINCE (EQID: 1596556537G Gender: F) Class: 3S Band: 4 Scale Score: 415
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
3
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 19/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
orients the reader: an internally consistent persuasive text that attempts to support the reader by developing a shared understanding of
context
4 and above
0.0
2.0
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
2
correct spelling of: most simple words; some common words (at least two); (errors evident in common words)
3 and above
57.1
56.5
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Ebony, PRUCHA (EQID: 2968393576M Gender: F) Class: 3AF Band: 4 Scale Score: 388
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 17/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
1
links are missing or incorrect; short script (often confusing for the reader)
2 and above
87.1
85.4
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
3
correct spelling of: most simple words; most common words (at least 20)
4 and above
24.3
13.3
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Eli, PULLEN (EQID: 1156014100U Gender: M) Class: 3CS Band: 4 Scale Score: 415
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 19/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
4
correct spelling of: simple words; most common words; some difficult words (at least two); (incorrect difficult words do not outnumber
correct difficult words)
5 and above
2.9
0.4
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Zachary, QUARTERMAN (EQID: 5954849807N Gender: M) Class: 3AF Band: 5 Scale Score: 453
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
3
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 22/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
orients the reader: an internally consistent persuasive text that attempts to support the reader by developing a shared understanding of
context
4 and above
0.0
2.0
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
3
most simple and compound sentences are correct AND some complex sentences are correct (meaning is predominantly clear)
4 and above
1.4
2.8
Spelling (0-6)
2
correct spelling of: most simple words; some common words (at least two); (errors evident in common words)
3 and above
57.1
56.5
Text Structure (0-4)
2
text contains two clearly identifiable structural components OR all components are present but weak
3 and above
5.7
5.3
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Oliver, RAYNER (EQID: 2807918518D Gender: M) Class: 3CS Band: 1 Scale Score: 95
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Total Score: 0/48, Quintile: Bottom 20%
Category Descriptor
% Students who scored *
At the school
Nationally
Audience (0-6)
0
symbols or drawings which have the intention of conveying meaning
1 and above
97.1
99.2
Cohesion (0-4)
0
symbols or drawings
1 and above
97.1
98.8
Ideas (0-5)
0
no evidence or insufficient evidence
1 and above
97.1
98.7
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
0
no evidence or insufficient evidence
1 and above
95.7
93.7
Punctuation (0-5)
0
no evidence of correct sentence punctuation
1 and above
97.1
97.8
Sentence Structure (0-6)
0
no evidence of sentences
1 and above
97.1
98.5
Spelling (0-6)
0
no conventional spelling
1 and above
97.1
99.0
Text Structure (0-4)
0
no evidence of any structural components of a persuasive text
1 and above
95.7
94.0
Vocabulary (0-5)
0
symbols or drawings
1 and above
97.1
99.0
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Elizabeth, RICHMOND (EQID: 4085650730Q Gender: F) Class: 3AF Band: 5 Scale Score: 465
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 23/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
3
most simple and compound sentences are correct AND some complex sentences are correct (meaning is predominantly clear)
4 and above
1.4
2.8
Spelling (0-6)
4
correct spelling of: simple words; most common words; some difficult words (at least two); (incorrect difficult words do not outnumber
correct difficult words)
5 and above
2.9
0.4
Text Structure (0-4)
2
text contains two clearly identifiable structural components OR all components are present but weak
3 and above
5.7
5.3
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Zachary, RILEY (EQID: 8663718545H Gender: M) Class: 3AF Band: 5 Scale Score: 465
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
3
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 23/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
orients the reader: an internally consistent persuasive text that attempts to support the reader by developing a shared understanding of
context
4 and above
0.0
2.0
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
1
correct use of capital letters to start sentences OR full stops to end sentences (at least one correct sentence marker); (punctuation is
minimal and of little assistance to the reader)
2 and above
85.7
80.3
Sentence Structure (0-6)
3
most simple and compound sentences are correct AND some complex sentences are correct (meaning is predominantly clear)
4 and above
1.4
2.8
Spelling (0-6)
4
correct spelling of: simple words; most common words; some difficult words (at least two); (incorrect difficult words do not outnumber
correct difficult words)
5 and above
2.9
0.4
Text Structure (0-4)
2
text contains two clearly identifiable structural components OR all components are present but weak
3 and above
5.7
5.3
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Nicholas, ROSOLEN (EQID: 8041749260T Gender: M) Class: 3S Band: 3 Scale Score: 373
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 16/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
2
correct spelling of: most simple words; some common words (at least two); (errors evident in common words)
3 and above
57.1
56.5
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Eva, SCENEY (EQID: 3314647247T Gender: F) Class: 3S Band: 4 Scale Score: 415
Criteria
Total Score: 19/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
3
"sentence level punctuation mostly correct (minimum of 80% of 5 sentences punctuated correctly) AND some other correct punctuation
(two or more examples of other punctuation) OR accurate sentence punctuation with correct noun capitalisation and no stray c
4 and above
5.7
2.4
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
3
correct spelling of: most simple words; most common words (at least 20)
4 and above
24.3
13.3
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Isaac, SCHEFE (EQID: 3370469289F Gender: M) Class: 3AF Band: 5 Scale Score: 428
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 20/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
3
most simple and compound sentences are correct AND some complex sentences are correct (meaning is predominantly clear)
4 and above
1.4
2.8
Spelling (0-6)
2
correct spelling of: most simple words; some common words (at least two); (errors evident in common words)
3 and above
57.1
56.5
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Jardine, SMITH (EQID: 1056465223L Gender: F) Class: 3CS Band: 3 Scale Score: 373
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 16/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
2
correct spelling of: most simple words; some common words (at least two); (errors evident in common words)
3 and above
57.1
56.5
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Lewis, SMITH (EQID: 2806830190P Gender: M) Class: 3AF Band: 5 Scale Score: 465
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 23/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
4
"all sentence punctuation correct (no stray capitals) AND mostly correct use of other punctuation, including noun capitalisation
(provides accurate markers to enable smooth and efficient reading)"
5
0.0
0.1
Sentence Structure (0-6)
3
most simple and compound sentences are correct AND some complex sentences are correct (meaning is predominantly clear)
4 and above
1.4
2.8
Spelling (0-6)
3
correct spelling of: most simple words; most common words (at least 20)
4 and above
24.3
13.3
Text Structure (0-4)
2
text contains two clearly identifiable structural components OR all components are present but weak
3 and above
5.7
5.3
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Tyler, SMITH (EQID: 9592001455S Gender: M) Class: 3CS Band: 5 Scale Score: 465
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
3
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 23/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
orients the reader: an internally consistent persuasive text that attempts to support the reader by developing a shared understanding of
context
4 and above
0.0
2.0
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
2
all paragraphs are focused on one idea or set of like ideas: at least one paragraph is logically constructed and contains a topic
sentence and supporting detail (paragraphs are mostly correct)
3
0.0
0.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
3
correct spelling of: most simple words; most common words (at least 20)
4 and above
24.3
13.3
Text Structure (0-4)
2
text contains two clearly identifiable structural components OR all components are present but weak
3 and above
5.7
5.3
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Christian, SORENSEN-BEWS (EQID: 2312629801L Gender: M) Class: 3AF Band: 6 Scale Score: 523
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
3
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 28/48, Quintile: Top 20%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
orients the reader: an internally consistent persuasive text that attempts to support the reader by developing a shared understanding of
context
4 and above
0.0
2.0
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
3
"sentence level punctuation mostly correct (minimum of 80% of 5 sentences punctuated correctly) AND some other correct punctuation
(two or more examples of other punctuation) OR accurate sentence punctuation with correct noun capitalisation and no stray c
4 and above
5.7
2.4
Sentence Structure (0-6)
4
"most simple, compound and complex sentences are correct OR all simple, compound and complex sentences are correct but do not
demonstrate variety (meaning is clear)"
5 and above
0.0
0.0
Spelling (0-6)
4
correct spelling of: simple words; most common words; some difficult words (at least two); (incorrect difficult words do not outnumber
correct difficult words)
5 and above
2.9
0.4
Text Structure (0-4)
3
"text contains an introduction, a body and conclusion OR detailed longer text with two developed components and one weaker
component"
4
0.0
0.0
Vocabulary (0-5)
3
four or more precise words or word groups
4 and above
0.0
0.2
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Thomas, STANNARD (EQID: 9584558807N Gender: M) Class: 3CS Band: 5 Scale Score: 428
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 20/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
3
correct spelling of: most simple words; most common words (at least 20)
4 and above
24.3
13.3
Text Structure (0-4)
2
text contains two clearly identifiable structural components OR all components are present but weak
3 and above
5.7
5.3
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Sofia, STATHAM (EQID: 3797427223A Gender: F) Class: 3CS Band: 3 Scale Score: 373
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 16/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
1
links are missing or incorrect; short script (often confusing for the reader)
2 and above
87.1
85.4
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
2
correct spelling of: most simple words; some common words (at least two); (errors evident in common words)
3 and above
57.1
56.5
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Bella, STONELL (EQID: 1596849484M Gender: F) Class: 3S Band: 5 Scale Score: 477
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 24/48, Quintile: Top 20%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
3
"sentence level punctuation mostly correct (minimum of 80% of 5 sentences punctuated correctly) AND some other correct punctuation
(two or more examples of other punctuation) OR accurate sentence punctuation with correct noun capitalisation and no stray c
4 and above
5.7
2.4
Sentence Structure (0-6)
3
most simple and compound sentences are correct AND some complex sentences are correct (meaning is predominantly clear)
4 and above
1.4
2.8
Spelling (0-6)
4
correct spelling of: simple words; most common words; some difficult words (at least two); (incorrect difficult words do not outnumber
correct difficult words)
5 and above
2.9
0.4
Text Structure (0-4)
2
text contains two clearly identifiable structural components OR all components are present but weak
3 and above
5.7
5.3
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Declan, SWEEDMAN (EQID: 0283114934M Gender: M) Class: 3AF Band: 5 Scale Score: 453
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
3
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 22/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
orients the reader: an internally consistent persuasive text that attempts to support the reader by developing a shared understanding of
context
4 and above
0.0
2.0
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
3
correct spelling of: most simple words; most common words (at least 20)
4 and above
24.3
13.3
Text Structure (0-4)
2
text contains two clearly identifiable structural components OR all components are present but weak
3 and above
5.7
5.3
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Jessica, VOYKIN (EQID: 3247592915B Gender: F) Class: 3AF Band: 4 Scale Score: 402
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 18/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
2
correct spelling of: most simple words; some common words (at least two); (errors evident in common words)
3 and above
57.1
56.5
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Sophie, WALLER (EQID: 2869912977P Gender: F) Class: 3S Band: 5 Scale Score: 477
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
3
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 24/48, Quintile: Top 20%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
orients the reader: an internally consistent persuasive text that attempts to support the reader by developing a shared understanding of
context
4 and above
0.0
2.0
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
3
most simple and compound sentences are correct AND some complex sentences are correct (meaning is predominantly clear)
4 and above
1.4
2.8
Spelling (0-6)
4
correct spelling of: simple words; most common words; some difficult words (at least two); (incorrect difficult words do not outnumber
correct difficult words)
5 and above
2.9
0.4
Text Structure (0-4)
2
text contains two clearly identifiable structural components OR all components are present but weak
3 and above
5.7
5.3
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Hayden, WATSON (EQID: 6027927280V Gender: M) Class: 3AF Band: 3 Scale Score: 373
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 16/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
2
some correct use of sentence level punctuation (at least 2 accurately punctuated sentences - beginning and end) OR one correctly
punctuated sentence AND some other punctuation correct where it is required (refer to lists in additional information); (provi
3 and above
24.3
29.6
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
2
correct spelling of: most simple words; some common words (at least two); (errors evident in common words)
3 and above
57.1
56.5
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Lachlan, WELSH (EQID: 5376841428C Gender: M) Class: 3AF Band: 4 Scale Score: 388
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 17/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
1
correct use of capital letters to start sentences OR full stops to end sentences (at least one correct sentence marker); (punctuation is
minimal and of little assistance to the reader)
2 and above
85.7
80.3
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
3
correct spelling of: most simple words; most common words (at least 20)
4 and above
24.3
13.3
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Brooke-MacKenzie, WHITE (EQID: 1675056578E Gender: F) Class: 3S Band: 5 Scale Score: 453
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 22/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
3
"sentence level punctuation mostly correct (minimum of 80% of 5 sentences punctuated correctly) AND some other correct punctuation
(two or more examples of other punctuation) OR accurate sentence punctuation with correct noun capitalisation and no stray c
4 and above
5.7
2.4
Sentence Structure (0-6)
3
most simple and compound sentences are correct AND some complex sentences are correct (meaning is predominantly clear)
4 and above
1.4
2.8
Spelling (0-6)
3
correct spelling of: most simple words; most common words (at least 20)
4 and above
24.3
13.3
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Jack, WILCOX (EQID: 1596550139W Gender: M) Class: 3AF Band: 3 Scale Score: 359
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
2
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 15/48, Quintile: Bottom 20%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
shows basic awareness of audience expectations through attempting to orient the reader; provides some information to support reader
understanding
3 and above
32.9
43.5
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
2
one idea with simple elaboration OR ideas are few and related but not elaborated OR many simple ideas that are related but not
elaborated
3 and above
42.9
37.9
Paragraphing (0-3)
0
no correct use of paragraphing
1 and above
54.3
68.5
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
1
uses a statement or statements of personal opinion OR uses one or two instances of persuasive devices (may be same type)
2 and above
50.0
52.9
Punctuation (0-5)
1
correct use of capital letters to start sentences OR full stops to end sentences (at least one correct sentence marker); (punctuation is
minimal and of little assistance to the reader)
2 and above
85.7
80.3
Sentence Structure (0-6)
2
correct sentences are mostly simple and/or compound sentences (meaning is predominantly clear)
3 and above
37.1
37.5
Spelling (0-6)
2
correct spelling of: most simple words; some common words (at least two); (errors evident in common words)
3 and above
57.1
56.5
Text Structure (0-4)
1
"minimal evidence of persuasive structure: structural components not clearly identifiable OR one component only, e.g. an introduction
or body"
2 and above
38.6
53.9
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
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2015 NAPLAN Year 3 Individual Student Writing Criteria Report - Students at time of Test
Writing
Gabrielle, WILSON (EQID: 5954849888X Gender: F) Class: 3AF Band: 5 Scale Score: 465
Criteria
Score Point
Awarded
Category Descriptor
Audience (0-6)
3
Cohesion (0-4)
Total Score: 23/48, Quintile: Middle 60%
% Students who scored *
Score
At the school
Nationally
orients the reader: an internally consistent persuasive text that attempts to support the reader by developing a shared understanding of
context
4 and above
0.0
2.0
2
some correct links between sentences (do not penalise for poor punctuation); most referring words are accurate OR longer text with
cohesion controlled only in parts (reader may occasionally need to re-read and provide their own links to clarify meaning)
3 and above
0.0
3.5
Ideas (0-5)
3
ideas are supported with some elaboration OR many unelaborated ideas that relate plausibly to argument (four or more) OR one idea
with more developed elaboration
4 and above
0.0
0.3
Paragraphing (0-3)
1
writing is organised into paragraphs that are mainly focused on one idea or set of like ideas to assist the reader to digest chunks of text
(contains at least one correct paragraph break)
2 and above
8.6
14.2
Persuasive Devices (0-4)
2
uses three or more instances of persuasive devices that support the writer’s position (at least two types)
3 and above
2.9
4.9
Punctuation (0-5)
3
"sentence level punctuation mostly correct (minimum of 80% of 5 sentences punctuated correctly) AND some other correct punctuation
(two or more examples of other punctuation) OR accurate sentence punctuation with correct noun capitalisation and no stray c
4 and above
5.7
2.4
Sentence Structure (0-6)
3
most simple and compound sentences are correct AND some complex sentences are correct (meaning is predominantly clear)
4 and above
1.4
2.8
Spelling (0-6)
2
correct spelling of: most simple words; some common words (at least two); (errors evident in common words)
3 and above
57.1
56.5
Text Structure (0-4)
2
text contains two clearly identifiable structural components OR all components are present but weak
3 and above
5.7
5.3
Vocabulary (0-5)
2
mostly simple words; may include two or three precise words or word groups
3 and above
7.1
9.5
NOTE:
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The report is generated based on the students who took the test at the school. It includes the demographic information provided on the NAPLAN tests which may differ from the information recorded at the
school.
This report does not include absent, exempt, or withdrawn students.
Score Point Awarded displays the score point that was awarded to the student for the criteria.
Percentage figures are calculated by excluding students who were absent, exempt or withdrawn. The percentages of students represented in the table have been rounded and may not sum to 100.
In 2007, a half cohort of Prep was introduced; 2008 was the first year of a full cohort of Prep students. These students are, on average, 3 months and 6 months older than previous cohorts, respectively.
They have both participated in one more year of schooling. These factors should be considered when interpreting NAPLAN results from 2010 onwards.
Please refer to the Explanatory Notes for further information about this report.
Writing results from 2011 should not be compared with those from 2008 to 2010.
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