CA Treasures 3rd Grade –Unit 2 ELD Writing Process-Expository Description
Criteria Chart, Advanced Graphic Organizers/Thinking Maps and Sample Communication Guide
Chart #1 WK3
Chart #2 WK4
Personal Narrative Oral Presentation
Criteria Chart
Features of an Expository Description
Includes:
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It gives information about a real
person, place, or thing. In other
words it describes a person, setting,
or object.
The writer uses concrete sensory
details to present and support unified
impressions of people, places, things,
or experiences.
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Did I introduce myself?
Did I give information about a real
person, place, or thing?
Did I describe a person, setting, or
object?
Did I use concrete sensory details?
Did I refer to my visual or artifact
during my presentation?
Did I ask a question about my
presentation?
Did I answer a question about my
presentation?
CA Treasures 3rd Grade –Unit 2 ELD Writing Process-Expository Description
Criteria Chart, Advanced Graphic Organizers/Thinking Maps and Sample Communication Guide
principal
CM #1 WK 3
mom
friend
dad
people I
would like to
write about…
teacher
neighbor
grandma
coach
CA Treasures 3rd Grade –Unit 2 ELD Writing Process-Expository Description
Criteria Chart, Advanced Graphic Organizers/Thinking Maps and Sample Communication Guide
Interview Question Cards
WK3
WHO?
Who is this information
about?
WHAT?
What does this person
do?
HOW?
How did he/she learn
his/her job?
WHY?
Why does he/she like
his/her job?
CA Treasures 3rd Grade –Unit 2 ELD Writing Process-Expository Description
Criteria Chart, Advanced Graphic Organizers/Thinking Maps and Sample Communication Guide
Interview Questionnaire
Name:
WHO?
Who is this information about?
WHAT?
What does this person do?
WHAT?
Where does he/she work?
HOW?
How did he/she learn his/her job?
WHY?
Why does he/she like his/her job?
Date:
CA Treasures 3rd Grade –Unit 2 ELD Writing Process-Expository Description
Criteria Chart, Advanced Graphic Organizers/Thinking Maps and Sample Communication Guide
COMMUNICATION GUIDE
SIMPLE (ELD 1-2) Student uses basic vocabulary from Thinking Map or Graphic Organizer to
complete guide.
Opening sentence: My dad is smart.
Topic sentence-Who is the information about?: My dad is a Diesel motor mechanic.
What does this person do?: He/she fixes motors.
Where does he/she work?: He/she works at a/an carpet factory.
How did he/she learn his/her job?: He/she learned his/her job at technical school.
ELABORATED (ELD 3) Student uses basic vocabulary from Thinking Map or Graphic
Organizer and adds descriptive words to complete the guide.
Opening sentence: My dad is a clever puzzle-solver.
Topic sentence-Who is the information about?: My dad is a Diesel motor mechanic.
What does this person do?: He/she fixes motors in big machines.
Where does he/she work?: He/she works at a/an carpet factory.
How did he/she learn his/her job?: He/she learned his/her job at technical school. He had to read
about motors and learn to understand the diagram and pictures in the books.
Why does he/she like his/her job?: He says he likes his job because it is like playing with a big
puzzle.
Closing: I like to watch him work with machines because I learn how to use tools.
COMPLEX (ELD 4-5) Student uses vivid and precise vocabulary to create their own complex
sentences.
Opening sentence: My dad is a clever puzzle-solver.
Topic sentence-Who is the information about?: My dad is a Diesel motor mechanic.
What does this person do?: He/she fixes motors in big industrial machines.
Where does he/she work?: He works at a/an carpet factory in Los Angeles.
How did he/she learn his/her job?: He/she learned his/her trade at technical school. He had to
read about diesel motors and be able to understand the diagrams and pictures in the
manuals.
Why does he/she like his/her job?: He says he likes his job because it is like playing with a big,
heavy puzzle. Sometimes it is hard to put the motor back together.
Closing: I like to watch him work with machines because I learn how to use tools and it helps
me to be a better problem solver.
*Teacher models response according to students’ EL level(s).
CA Treasures 3rd Grade –Unit 2 ELD Writing Process-Expository Description
Criteria Chart, Advanced Graphic Organizers/Thinking Maps and Sample Communication Guide
Teacher Model
WK4 & WK5
Teacher Model –Draft WK 4
My dad is a Diesel motor mechanic. He fixes the motors in big, industrial
machines that are used to manufacture carpets. He figures out what is wrong
with the motors by taking them apart.
My dad learned to repair Diesel motors at technical school. He had to read about
how Diesel motors work and be able to understand the diagrams and pictures in
the manuals.
My dad says that being a mechanic is like playing with a big, heavy puzzle. I like to
watch him work with machines because I learn how to use tools and it helps me
to be a better problem-solver.
Teacher Model- Revise WK 5
My dad is a clever puzzle-solver. He is a Diesel motor mechanic. He fixes the
motors in big, industrial machines that are used to manufacture and finish
carpets. My dad figures out what is wrong with the motors by taking them apart
and finding the part that is broken. Then he has to put the motor back together
with the new part. Sometimes, he repairs the part rather than replace it with a
new one. That saves the factory money.
My dad learned to repair Diesel motors at technical school. He had to read about
how Diesel motors work and be able to understand the diagrams and pictures in
the manuals that show the different parts of a motor. He also learned how to
reassemble a motor after taking it apart.
My dad says that being a mechanic is like playing with a big, heavy puzzle because
it can be difficult to put the motor back together. I like to watch him working with
machines because I learn how to use tools and it helps me to be a better
problem-solver.
Note: The words in red indicate additions added during the revision process in Week 5.
Notes:
How did he/she learn his/her
job?
Who is the information about?
What does this person do?
Notes:
Appointment #2
Date:
Appointment #1
Name:
Appointment Card
Notes:
Why does he/she like his/her
job?
Appointment #3
CA Treasures 3rd Grade –Unit 2 ELD Writing Process-Expository Description
Criteria Chart, Advanced Graphic Organizers/Thinking Maps and Sample Communication Guide