ELA/Literacy
Released Item 2015
Grade 10
Research Simulation Task
Roosevelt’s View
VF652847
Sample Student Responses
(annotations included)
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Item: VF652847
Associated Texts: “Inaugural Address, March 4, 1933,” “The Forgotten Man” and FDR—The New Deal
Anchor Set
A1 – A10
A1
RDG 4, WE 4
Annotations
Anchor Paper 1
Reading
Score Point 4
The response demonstrates full comprehension of ideas through a substantial exploration of
Roosevelt’s views (He is expressing his firm belief that they must remember the value of
family, hard work, and “that our true destiny is not to be ministerd unto but to minister to
ourselves and to our fellow men…”) and of how his proposed solutions differed from those
attempted by others (He says. . . other solutions ‘sought temporary relief form the top down
rather that permanent relief from the bottom up.’ He says that he does not think the country
should raise billions of dollars towards public works because this ‘would only be a stopgap’).
The response references all three texts, selecting quotations effectively to support the
analysis (President Roosevelt stated. . . . “the only thing we have to fear is fear itself..”. This
powerful idea insinuates that the greatest enemy that the nation currently has is loss of faith
in itself).
Written Expression
Score Point 4
The response introduces a claim (some of the biggest challenges during these dark days were
to remain calm and realize that this could be overcome. . . he believed that his solutions
differed from those previously presented because they would have permanant results and
were not based on fleeting desire for relief) and provides effective and comprehensive
development of these ideas. Relevant textual evidence promotes clarity and corroborates the
writer’s reasoning. The progression of ideas builds to a succinct but satisfying conclusion that
delivers a sense of completeness (Roosevelt truly aided a crippled nation in getting back on
its feet). Precise vocabulary (looked upon with a grim sort of dark remembrance and quiet
triumphant pride. . . .This powerful idea insinuates. . . .expressing his firm belief), and varied
sentence structures contribute to an effective style.
A2
RDG 4, WE 4
Annotations
Anchor Paper 2
Reading
Score Point 4
The response incorporates the ideas from the three texts into a brief introduction that
captures the essence of Roosevelt’s views (Roosevelt has had one theory in mind: hard work
gets the job done. Roosevelt believed that lending and borrowing money was not the solution
to bringing an end to the Great Depression, but the elimination of greed; emphasis on the
farmers, local banks, and tariff revision; and creation of jobs were the key elements to
rebuilding a more prosperous nation). Subsequent paragraphs provide an accurate analysis of
the specifics of Roosevelt’s proposals. The response draws effective comparisons between the
texts to support the writing (This ties in to one of the three parts of his plan in “The Forgotton
Man.” Helping farmers in any way was helping half the country regain economic strength).
Written Expression
Score Point 4
The response addresses all aspects of the prompt, subtly indicating that Roosevelt’s proposed
solutions differed from those attempted by others (Roosevelt believed that lending and
borrowing money was not the solution, America’s economy should be “[re]built from bottom
to top and not top to bottom” (paragraph 1) . . . .Instead of ridiculous tariffs, Roosevelt
proposed that an equal trade of good took place). A missing conclusion results in an abrupt
end to the essay. Nevertheless, the progression of ideas remains clear throughout. Varied
and appropriate transitions within paragraphs promote cohesion (In order to do this. . . .the
other part. . . .rather than. . . .The first. . . .The second). Precise word choices convey an
appropriately academic style that attends to the norms of the discipline (elimination,
theorized, consisted, adundance).
A3
RDG 3, WE 3
Annotations
Anchor Paper 3
Reading
Score Point 3
The response identifies three critical challenges Roosevelt faced (trying to get people back
into work. . . .the farming indurstry had started to really strugle, . . . .people were losing
there houses because of unfair mortgages) and follows with a mostly accurate analysis of
Roosevelt’s proposed solutions. Purposeful paraphrasing of relevant text-based details reveals
comprehension of ideas (His solution was that if we as a country wanted to create jobs for
our people that we should invest in creating new air ports and roads. . . . by investing in
these facilities many jobs would be created).
Written Expression
Score Point 3
The response introduces a central claim (Well, through the use of inguity [ingenuity] our
great president was able to solve these problems) and provides mostly effective development
for how Roosevelt tackled three of the critical problems facing the United States. A
straightforward organization makes it fairly easy to follow the progression of ideas; clear
topic sentences guide the reader (The farming industry is always the backbone of any
economic structure. . . .The last and final problem Roosevelt was facing in fixing the economy
was mortgaes). Varied sentence structures contribute to a mostly effective style (Wouldn’t it
be just costing us more money? Well, by investing in these facilities many jobs would be
created for people who had lost there’s by building these places. Roosevelt felt that in order
to fix our economy and get jobs back for our people we must first spend money on facilities
like airports and roads).
A4
RDG 3, WE 3
Annotations
Anchor Paper 4
Reading
Score Point 3
The response demonstrates comprehension of ideas through a mostly accurate exploration of
the ideas in “Inaugural Address” and “The Forgotten Man.” Adequate textual evidence, both
quoted and paraphrased, supports the analysis (Another issue stressed by Roosevelt was the
decrease in foreign trade. In his radio address, “The Forgotten Man,” he talks about the
Hawley-Smoot Tariff. Since this tariff encouraged other countries to, “build tariff fences”,
which made world trade pretty much non existent…. They thought that decreasing world
trade would increase, trade within the United States and boost the economy).
Written Expression
Score Point 3
The response addresses Roosevelt’s views of the critical challenges the nation faced
(President Franklin D. Roosevelt stressed the issues of unemployment, people not being able
to afford homes, the decrease in foreign trade, and farmers not being paid enough) and his
proposed solutions (strict supervision of all banking and credits and investments. . . .farmers
should be allowed to charge more for their products then it cost to produce. . . . the
government should assist people who have trouble paying their mortgages, and tariffs should
be lowered so foreign trade will increase). The response establishes and maintains a mostly
effective style by providing textual evidence that advances his/her reasoning and
demonstrates coherence and clarity. The response points out the ways that Roosevelt’s plans
differed from his predecessors (None of the other president really did anything about
unemployment before Roosevelt. . . .Revising the tariff is obviously different than what others
attempted because the others were the ones’ who pu the tariff there in the first place. . .
.they were the ones’ who gave more attention to the larger banks in the first place). Although
transitions between paragraphs are basic (Another issue, Lastly, In conclusion), they supply a
sense of organization and provide for a basic progression of ideas.
A5
RDG 2, WE 2
Annotations
Anchor Paper 5
Reading
Score Point 2
The response presents Roosevelt’s views of the critical problems arising from the Great
Depression (people are poor because there are too many people in one market. . . .foreign
countries cannot give us goos and services because the tariffs ae so muh money). The
response demonstrates basic comprehension through a generally accurate analysis of
Roosevelt’s proposals (there should be more jobs for these farmers…. we lower the tariffs)
and the ways that they differ from those attempted by others (because he believes that he
knows what the people want and need. Roosevelt wanted to steer away from the political side
of these issues. He wanted to better the community of the people and be a man of the
people). Relevant text-based inferences support the discussion (Also in the video, you can
see that Roosevelt’s solutions are working for not only the lower class but for the upper class
as well).
Written Expression
Score Point 2
The response addresses the prompt and establishes a claim in the opening sentence (Franklin
D. Roosevelt had some very specific ideas on what the problems are in the Great
Depression).The writing contains some development of ideas, though support is occasionally
repetitive (If we cannot trade with other countries, it is impossible to make more money or
get our goods and supplies. . . . With the tariffs being so high, people have to pay more
money to just get goods). Each paragraph relates to a distinct subject, starting with the lack
of jobs, moving to the burden of tariffs, and wrapping up with the ways that Roosevelt’s
solutions differed. Although the response lacks a formal conclusion, a progression of ideas is
usually discernible, and the final sentences provide some sense of closure (In the video, you
can see that he accomplished that and that what he wanted to do, he did. For these reasons,
Rooselvelt thought his ideas were better than other plans that people have made).
A6
RDG 2, WE 2
Annotations
Anchor Paper 6
Reading
Score Point 2
The response consists of a brief introductory statement about the critical problems facing the
United States (During the Great Depression many people were out of work and losing money
fast. Everyone needed jobs and no one was hiring). The response follows with a brief, but
generally accurate, review of Roosevelt’s proposals that is supported by textual evidence (In
“New Deal” FDR discusses how building safe roads would be a great idea. . . .In ‘Inagural
Address’ Roosevelt makes it clear that happiness is as important as income. . . .in ‘The
Forgotten Man’ FDR says how America neeeds to learn from its mistakes). Overall, the
response demonstrates basic comprehension of ideas.
Written Expression
Score Point 2
The response addresses the prompt, acknowledging the difficult circumstances created by the
Great Depression and highlighting some of Roosevelt’s plans to overcome them. The
response contains only a slight reference to the solutions attempted by others (FDR says how
America neeeds to learn from its mistakes, but also learn fom what they have done right);
however, the writing offers some development of Roosevelt’s proposals (In “New Deal” FDR
discusses how building safe roads would be a great idea. More pople would have jobs building
roads, mining the quarries and it would make transport more efficient). A somewhat loose
organization leads to a progression of ideas that is usually discernible but not obvious.
Sentence variety contributes to a somewhat effective style.
A7
RDG 1, WE 1
Annotations
Anchor Paper 7
Reading
Score Point 1
The response demonstrates limited comprehension of ideas through a brief listing of the
critical challenges facing the United States (The farmers cannot make their profit on goods
anymore, foreign countries cant pay us back in cash, and homeowners cant pay their
mortgage), as well as some proposed solutions (The solution to the farmer’s problem was to
make the farmers vcharge more to get their profit. . . . The solution to the foreign countries’
problem is to change the tariff system to make them pay us in goods. . . . The last solution to
the homeowner’s problem is to help them pay). Although the response contains little to no
analysis, the response provides some minimal textual evidence.
Written Expression
Score Point 1
The response addresses the prompt and makes a claim (Roosevelt’s inagural address tells us
of the problems going on during the Great Depression). Although the writing introduces
multiple ideas, list-like development inhibits clarity. The response is minimally organized,
with one paragraph focusing on the critical challenges and the second paragraph concerning
the proposed solutions; however, an absence of transitions obscures connections among
sentences. In addition, repetitive word choice produces a stilted rhythm and limits the
effectiveness of the style (The solution to the farmer’s problem. . . .The solution to the
foreign countries’ problem. . . .The last solution to the homeowner’s problem).
A8
RDG 1, WE 1
Annotations
Anchor Paper 8
Reading
Score Point 1
The response demonstrates limited comprehension by providing a few minimally accurate
observations related to the texts (he [Roosevelt] addressed these issues with the new deal. .
. . this new deal gave thousands of people jobs. this increased the health of the economy and
thus heled the country out to the depression).
Written Expression
Score Point 1
Although the response provides limited development, the response makes a claim (roosevelt
believed that unemployement and the inefficiancy of roads leading to and from were two
important issues). Minimal textual evidence provides limited clarity (with the new deal this
put people in place to build new, “weatherproof roads”). The brevity of the response permits
only a minimal progression of ideas.
A9
RDG 0, WE 0
Annotations
Anchor Paper 9
Reading
Score Point 0
An inaccurate analysis demonstrates no comprehension (Rooselvelt wants to pay everyone
what they deserve and make there hard work pay off). The response lacks textual support.
Written Expression
Score Point 0
The response contains a weak attempt to address the prompt (Roesevelts purpose is to bring
up the economy), but a lack of development and an inappropriate style show little to no
awareness of the norms of the discipline.
A10
RDG: 0, WE: 0
Annotations
Anchor Paper 10
Reading
Score Point 0
A weak attempt at analysis demonstrates no comprehension of the text. (roosevelts view on
this topic is very opinionized).
Written Expression
Score Point 0
Vague and undeveloped statements produce no clarity and are inappropriate to the task (it is
important to notice this and it is explained in the article).
Practice Set
P101 - P105
P101
P102
P103
P104
P105
Practice Set
(order of scores: Reading Comprehension, Written Expression, Conventions)
Paper
Score
P101
2,2,2
P102
4,4,3
P103
0,0,0
P104
1,1,1
P105
3,3,3