Assessment of Reading, Writing and Mathematics:
Primary Division
Released 2014 Assessment: Language 1, Writing
Item-Specific Rubrics and
Sample Student Responses with Annotations
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Scoring Guide for Short Writing (2014)
Topic Development
Favourite Way to Stay in Touch With Your Friends – Booklet 1 - Question 12
Q12: Write a paragraph describing your favourite way to stay in touch with your friends and explaining
why you like this form of communication.
Code
B
I
10
Descriptor
Blank: nothing written or drawn in the space provided
Illegible: cannot be read; completely crossed out / erased; not written in English
OR
Irrelevant content: does not attempt assigned prompt (e.g., comment on the task,
drawings, “?”, “!”, “I don’t know”)
OR
Off topic: no relationship of written work to assigned prompt
OR
Errors in conventions prevent communication
Response is not developed; ideas and information are limited and unclear.
Organization is random with no links between ideas.
Response has a limited relationship to the assigned task.
20
Response is minimally developed with few ideas and little information.
Organization is minimal with weak links between ideas.
Response is partly related to the assigned task.
30
Response has a clear focus, adequately developed with ideas and supporting details.
Organization is simple or mechanical with adequate links between ideas.
Response is clearly related to the assigned task.
40
Response has a clear focus, well-developed with sufficient specific and relevant
ideas and supporting details. Organization is logical and coherent with effective
links between ideas.
Response has a thorough relationship to the assigned task.
Scoring Guide for Short Writing (2014)
Topic Development
Favourite Way to Stay in Touch With Your Friends – Booklet 1 - Question 12
Code 10
Annotation:
Response is not developed; ideas and information are limited (e.g., i Like to to use my iPOD Becase i have a
texting aPP). Supporting details are missing.
Response has a limited relationship to the assigned task.
Scoring Guide for Short Writing (2014)
Topic Development
Favourite Way to Stay in Touch With Your Friends – Booklet 1 - Question 12
Code 20
Annotation:
Response is minimally developed with few ideas and little information on how to stay in touch (e.g., I can
call my friend…I can text my friend…talk to my friend on the computer…send her/he a letter…invite her/he
to my house). Response does not explain why it is the favourite way. Organization is minimal (e.g., I
can…maybe.I can…I might…) with weak links between ideas.
Response is partly related to the assigned task.
Scoring Guide for Short Writing (2014)
Topic Development
Favourite Way to Stay in Touch With Your Friends – Booklet 1 - Question 12
Code 30
Annotation:
Response has a clear focus and is adequately developed with ideas and supporting details about the favourite
way to stay in touch (e.g., My favourite way to stay in touch with friends is to do video chat) and explains
why it is the favourite way (e.g., …because when you’re bored you can talk to your friend…when…you
miss your friend and it’s a long weekend, you can talk to eachother). Organization is simple, with opening
and closing sentences and adequate links between ideas (e.g., My favourite way…I picked…My second
reason is…when you feel…you can…That’s why I picked video chat...).
Response is clearly related to the assigned task.
Scoring Guide for Short Writing (2014)
Topic Development
Favourite Way to Stay in Touch With Your Friends – Booklet 1 - Question 12
Code 40
Annotation:
Response has a clear focus, and is well-developed with sufficient specific and relevant ideas and supporting
details about the favourite way to stay in touch and why (e.g., My favorite way to communicate…is
email…it is effecient and easy. I won’t have to wait for my friend to pick up the phone, or wait for days for
my letter to reach my friend and get a reply…adults won’t be able to get into our conversation. It will just
be between my friend and I!). Organization is logical and coherent with an opening sentence and closing
sentence and effective links between ideas (e.g., My favourite way to communicate is…This is because…I
won’t have to wait…Also…I am thankful for this wonderful way to communicate).
Response has a thorough relationship to the assigned task.
Scoring Guide for Short Writing (2014)
Conventions
Favourite Way to Stay in Touch with Your Friends– Booklet 1 - Question 12
Q12: Write a paragraph describing your favourite way to stay in touch with your friends and explaining
why you like this form of communication.
Code
B
I
Descriptor
Blank: nothing written or drawn in the space provided
Illegible: cannot be read; completely crossed out / erased; not
written in English
OR
Errors in conventions prevent communication
10
Errors in conventions interfere with communication
OR
Insufficient evidence to assess the use of conventions
20
Errors in conventions do not interfere with communication
30
Conventions are used appropriately to communicate
Scoring Guide for Short Writing (2014)
Conventions
Favourite Way to Stay in Touch with Your Friends– Booklet 1 - Question 12
Code 10
Annotation:
Response has errors in conventions (e.g., misspelled words: firend’s, ceeP, comePiny; misplaced capital
letters: Play, ceeP, comePiny; incorrect sentence structure: I like to see my firend’s because text them;
and play with them and they ceepme comepiny) that interfere with communication.
Response does not demonstrate the use of expected conventions.
Scoring Guide for Short Writing (2014)
Conventions
Favourite Way to Stay in Touch with Your Friends– Booklet 1 - Question 12
Code 20
Annotation:
Response has errors in conventions (e.g., misspelled words: favrit, ‘say’ for stay, toch, frens, tenolge, ‘bo’
for do, ues, leter, frends) that do not interfere with communication. The response contains simple sentences
and demonstrates control.
Response demonstrates the use of some expected conventions.
Scoring Guide for Short Writing (2014)
Conventions
Favourite Way to Stay in Touch with Your Friends– Booklet 1 - Question 12
Code 30
Annotation:
Response uses conventions appropriately to communicate (e.g., use of beginning and ending punctuation:
use of exclamation marks; correct use of the contraction it’s). Some errors may exist (e.g., misspelled
words: athor, cheep, conect; incorrect contraction ther’re; missing apostrophe in theres; missing beginning
capital on sometimes; missing plural in friend). The response demonstrates control of compound sentences.
Response demonstrates control of expected conventions.