How to write a business letter l Language l Poor business letter language Poor business letter language Here is an example of what not to do! This letter is unclear because it has too many redundant and meaningless words, clichés, big words, jargon and sexist language. Mr John Freedman ABC Pty Ltd 56 Main Road HILLSWEST WA 6754 15 March 20XX Cliché Ms Joanne Desmond 233 Hills Cres Cliché HILLSWEST WA 6754 In response to your latest correspondence of 28 February 20XX, it is our pleasure that you please find enclosed our price range as requested. As you can see, the parameters of each option are entirely flexible and can be catered to suit your individual requirements as needed by you. Please take your time to peruse the Jargon Too many words price list and if you have any further queries, we would be more than happy to acquaint Big words you with more and additional information. Cliché I have also enclosed some testimonials from other satisfied customers which I am sure Redundant words will demonstrate and verify our desire to accommodate your needs. We look forward to working with you and please don’t hesitate to contact our salesman on 5550 6541 for further information. Redundant words Sexist language – should be ‘salesperson’ Yours sincerely John Freedman Encl © WestOne Services 2010 COMM1085 Page 1 of 1
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