Susan B Anthony.
Susan B Anthony was important in U.S history because she dedicated
her life so that woman could vote. She was a huge part of the woman suffrage
movement. She also wrote the 19th amendment. She was also president of the
National American Woman Suffrage.
Comment [A1]: This first paragraph is a little
listy. Try to elaborate more. Why is it important
that we learn about Susan B Anthony? How did she
impact history? How did she change the course of
history? Add more detail and a include some
commentary, connect it to a current event.
Susan b Anthony had a lot of accomplishments. If it wasn’t for her
then woman to day might not be able to vote. She had a huge impact on the woman
when she was alive. She founded the national American woman suffrage. Also she
Comment [A2]: Is this an organization? Explain
more as to what this was, and why we need to know
about it.
was the first person ever to get arrested and put on trial for voting as a woman.
Comment [A3]: This sounds like an interesting
story, maybe include more details.
Susan also led the only non-violent revolution in our country’s history. The 72 year
Comment [A4]: Is this really true? The only
non-violent revolution?
old struggle to win woman the right to vote.
Now as you can tell Susan B Anthony is a very important woman in
U.S history for more then one thing. She made a huge impact on the world for
woman. Susan made it possible for woman to vote.
Where is your works cited? I don’t know where any of this information came
from. Not a bad start to your small essay. You just need to add more detail and
elaborate on what you have included here. See the rubric below as well.
Comment [A5]: This is barely a paragraph.
Elaborate on some of this. You state that she
impacted the entire world, explain that, give an
example, perhaps quote a historian that agrees with
you.
Rubric for Essay and Works Cited
Position
Works Cited
Examples
3
2
1
0
States a clear
position on the
historical question.
States why studying
this historical
question helps us to
understand current
issues and events.
All facts are
accurately cited in
proper MLA format.
Sources are credible
and accurate and
easily verifiable. It
is easy to see where
all information was
gathered.
Provides clear and
credible evidence
backing up the
position that clearly
connects to the
thesis. There are at
least 2 high quality
examples
reinforcing the
position.
States a clear
position on the
historical question.
States a position on
how the historical
question but does not
outline a reason(s) in
support of the position.
OR
States a position that is
unclear or vague.
Does not state a
position the
historical question.
Some facts are not
cited, MLA format is
questionable, and
some sources are of
questionable
credibility. It can be
difficult to see where
information was
found.
Provides clear and
credible evidence
backing up the
position that clearly
connects to the
thesis. There is at
least 1 high quality
examples reinforcing
the position.
Many facts are not
cited, MLA format is
not followed, and
many sources are of
questionable
credibility. Finding
where information
was found is a chore
or impossible.
Provides evidence
backing up the
position that vaguely
connects to the
thesis. There are no
high quality
examples reinforcing
the position
Many facts are not
cited, MLA format is
not followed, and
many sources are of
questionable
credibility. Finding
where information
was found is a chore
or impossible
Evidence provided
does not back up the
position. There are
no examples or the
examples do not
connect well, and do
not reinforce the
position.