Reader: _________________________
Writer: __________________________
STEPS of REVISION
English 99—Fate/Fortune Essay
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Write the thesis statement here:
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Does the thesis take a position—stating whether or not we have control over our own destinies?
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Is the thesis statement the last sentence of the introduction paragraph? YES
What is the supporting reason or example in the first body paragraph? _______________________________
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Does the writer include and cite any sources? YES
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Are the citations in MLA format like the examples below?
If YES, check the format(s) used in this paragraph:
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YES
NO
PARAPHRASE: This information is completely in my own words (Brown 13).
DIRECT QUOTE: Waln K. Brown describes therapy sessions by using this example: “This quote is exactly word-forword like the original” (13).
DIRECT QUOTE: According to studies, “This quote is exactly word-for-word like the original” (Brown 13).
Body Paragraph 2
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What is the supporting reason or example in the second body paragraph? ______________________________
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Does the writer include and cite any sources? YES
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Are the citations in MLA format like the examples below?
If YES, check the format(s) used in this paragraph:
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NO
YES
NO
PARAPHRASE: This information is completely in my own words (Brown 13).
DIRECT QUOTE: Waln K. Brown describes therapy sessions by using this example: “This quote is exactly word-forword like the original” (13).
DIRECT QUOTE: According to studies, “This quote is exactly word-for-word like the original” (Brown 13).
Body Paragraph 3
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What is the supporting reason or example in the third body paragraph? _______________________________
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Does the writer include and cite any sources? YES
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Are the citations in MLA format like the examples below?
If YES, check the format(s) used in this paragraph:
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NO
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NO
Body Paragraph 1
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YES
NO
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PARAPHRASE: This information is completely in my own words (Brown 13).
DIRECT QUOTE: Waln K. Brown describes therapy sessions by using this example: “This quote is exactly word-forword like the original” (13).
DIRECT QUOTE: According to studies, “This quote is exactly word-for-word like the original” (Brown 13).
Conclusion
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Does the conclusion point the reader back to the thesis statement? YES
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Does it add any new points or aspects that haven’t already been discussed in body paragraphs?
NO
YES
NO