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ENC 1102
Journal Entry #1
Comment [L1]: MLA formatting is completely
incorrect. Please refer to the HANDBOOK or see me
for direction. This cannot happen again. In addition
to that, there is no title to your essay.
As I read through the story “Girl” by Jamaica Kincaid, I slowly realize, sentence
after sentence, how much I can relate the story to my life. This story expresses the
different aspects of one girl’s lifestyle. It states her daily duties and how to do them, her
dos and don’ts and the appropriate way to act. Some but not all of her lifestyle could be
Comment [L2]: Apostrophe is needed here
between the “o” and the “s.”
lines in a story about my lifestyle. For the most part her ways are normal and not
Comment [L3]: I can see punctuation is going to
be your nemesis. You need help with Comma rules.
Once again, check the Handbook.
anything out of the ordinary. Stating that gives me reason to come to the observation that
many other people live in a similar lifestyle.
In the end of the story, it tells the readers how she can tell the bread is fresh,
which is by feeling it. A point is made and that is, “what if the baker won’t let her feel the
Comment [L4]: XXXX, do you realize that
whatever you have shared in this Reader’s Response
Journal could have also been said by any other
young woman who may, or may not, have read one
word of the Kincaid’s story. As I am now reading the
second paragraph, I am noting that you have
attempted to use the story; and that is a GOOD
THING!
bread?”. That could very well have happened to her as well as anyone else. If I were ever
caught in such a situation I would not know how to respond nor react. I could not imagine
being in the shoes of the girl in this story. After all her correct mannerisms she should be
the kind of woman to allow near the bread.
XXXX, I won’t lie and say that I am not disappointed in what you have submitted here. It is short,
scarcely detailed, and sparsely developed. Granted, the assignment did not require pages of writing, but I
certainly expected at least ONE page with MLA formatting, including a Work Cited page detailing the
story’s title, author, and anthology publication information. If you were not sure how to do this, there
were plenty of ways to get that support and information. Please look at the Essay Rubric for further
feedback and scoring information.
C/O=13; D=14; S/S=14; G/M=14; R/D=0
TOTAL=55 F
Comment [L5]: This seems to be the crux of
your essay, but you do not go into it any more than
in only one sentence. At the college-level, a Reader’s
Reflection Journal is seriously deficient if it does not
even fill up one entire page. To be honest, it seems
as if you submitted this unfinished.