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Hook
Each day teenagers around the world are told to get up and do something,
get off their phone, stop playing that video game. Teens need to do something
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worthwhile with their free time. Being able to make money and developing
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necessary skills while keeping out of trouble are some reasons why teenagers
Thesis – What you will prove
should have a part time job.
Statement
Teens should have a part time job because it allows them to make their
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own money. Making money is great because it lets them become independent.
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They can buy the clothes they want, go to the movies and out to dinner with
friends without having to ask their mom and dad for the money. Another great
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reason for making money is they can start saving. They can save their cash for
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large purchases such as skis or snowboards or even save for their postExample #3
secondary education. A final reason why it is good to have a part time job and
therefore make money is they can buy their parents presents. Growing up kids
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always have to make their parents presents, there are only so many pictures a kid
can give their parents. If they have their own money they can buy their parents
something that they may have asked for or the teen knows their parent will enjoy.
Conclusion
For these reasons it is clear that because a teen can earn some money they
should have a part time job.
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Not only is making money a good reason to have a part time job but so are
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the skills a teen can learn on the job. Time management is a necessary skill to be
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successful in life. Having a job will require the teen to manage their time wisely if
they hope to complete homework, get to work on time and continue with
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extracurricular activities. Furthermore, being an effective team member will be
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developed at a job. The teen will have to work with others and most likely with a
supervisor. If they are accustomed to working alone at school and are an only
child they will have the opportunity to learn how to listen to other people’s ideas,
work together to problem solve and recognize the importance of working together
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to accomplish certain goals or standards. Lastly, a mature disposition will be
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developed at work. While at school students can still get away with being
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immature and rude, however, at a job they will be fired if they do not show respect
and maturity at all times. Through a part time job the teen will learn polite
customer service and how to respect the boss and fellow employees. Each of
Conclusion
these skills are necessary in the successful future of all individuals; therefore, it is
a great idea to start as a teenager at a part time job.
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While developing skills is a great aspect of a part time job they are also
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important because they keep teens out of trouble. If a teen has a part time job
they are going to be spending their free time at work not hanging out at parks or
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loitering in Walmart. A busy teen doesn’t have the time to look for trouble.
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Additionally, if a teen is making money they will not be as tempted to steal from
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their parents or shoplift from stores. By having a job they will have their own
money and will be able to buy the things they want and need, keeping them out of
Conclusion
trouble with the police and their parents. Clearly, having a job is a great idea if you
want a teen to stay out of trouble.
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Restate Thesis
Having a part time job is very important for today’s teenagers. It allows
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them to make money, develop necessary life skills and keeps them out of trouble.
Final Thought
All you teens need to get off your electronics and get a job.
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